| "A Mother For Rin" Reviews/Comments [ 140 ] |
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Title: Writer and Appreciator of a Great Writer
Reviewed By: Dianara On: July 17, 2005 20:13 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
You've got a great concept here. Sesshoumaru always tended to let things go to the last minute before he would realize how much he would lose. Nice job of playing this one out. I have to say I don't usually play Sesshoumaru out as nearly so confused, but that's your option. Sesshoumaru isn't easily fooled or confused and tends to get his facts assuredly before making conclusions. But I love the way you let his emotions play into the game. Perhaps you might want to let him remember that Rin knows nothing about mating rituals of the Youkai, so his little mating display while they were fighting would not have produced the results he wanted. Just some food for thought. Dianara
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Title: THANK YOU
Reviewed By: amori kuwabara [MediaMiner Member] On: July 15, 2005 00:50 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This chapter is so good. I am deeply heartened that Shippou woke up after his ordeal with the deer although he must have a pounding headache. I am also deeply heartwarmed that Sess was able to get Rin to eat and drink even if it was in her sleep. Now if only Kagome would wake up and see the ones that she loves right by her side. I am hoping that she will be OK. She went through quite a traumatic ordeal. But she needs to wake up and know that she is very much loved for who she is and not for the lust of two men. Please update as soon as you can. Thanks alot.
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Title: Interesting
Reviewed By: amori kuwabara [MediaMiner Member] On: July 13, 2005 00:59 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This chapter definitely leaves me awaiting another update from you. I would really like to see some heartfelt dramatic situations happen with both Sesshomaru and Inuyasha that would make Kagome wake up. I also hope that she will be able to get through to Rin because she really needs her right now. It wouldn't surprise me if Kagome would decide to stay where she is and keep both children with her. My heart really goes out to Rin and everything that she has had to endure. I hope that she will pull through and make it. I know that Kagome is diverting her miko powers to Shippo to help him heal. She needs to heal herself too. so that she can help with Rin. Please keep writing this story is getting better with each chapter that you write. Thanks so much for all this as my imagination continues to go into full blown overdrive. Thanks for everything. Please update soon.
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Reviewed By: toolazytosignin On: July 12, 2005 06:06 CDT
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I'm assuming the name Kimigra was an attempt at making up a Japanese name... I give you props on trying, but have to take them away just the same for not doing your homework on it. In Japanese, with the exception of "n" a consonant is ALWAYS followed by a vowel. I suggest that you find some sites or something with the character charts and also, a japanese-english dictionary for any other japanese words you may feel the need to use. Don't use 'em just 'cause you saw 'em in someone else's fic! Chances are, they know japanese less than you. Oh, and for future referance, adding original characters that may possibly have a chance at being paired with one of the actual characters is a real turn-off for a lot of readers.
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Reviewed By: ice_princess_1185 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 12, 2005 01:03 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oh, please make Rin and Kagome be alright!!!!!!~!_!~
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Reviewed By: ama_tori * you know the drill* On: July 11, 2005 21:46 CDT
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poor rin :(
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Title: GREAT
Reviewed By: hobbitfancier77 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 11, 2005 00:01 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
the suspence is killing me.... i need mroe to read...thats a lieim reading like 15 fanfictions...welll i need mroe really entertaining and good thigns to read...AKA...your story update soon
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Title: when i tell you when?
Reviewed By: habby On: July 10, 2005 09:42 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
the only thing that i have to say is update and great work.
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Reviewed By: Hadyia Spark On: July 08, 2005 18:15 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
WOW! please write more?
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Reviewed By: Hadyia Spark On: July 08, 2005 18:14 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
WOW! please write more?
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Reviewed By: ama_tori *nsi* On: July 08, 2005 12:06 CDT
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*wipes tear from eye* aww, that's so sad! that's evil to do that to shippo! I NEED MORE!! =^_^=
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Reviewed By: ice_princess_1185 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 08, 2005 09:18 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oh poor shippo!!!!
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Title: Good Chapter
Reviewed By: amori kuwabara On: July 05, 2005 19:44 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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I really liked this chapter. It seems that Rin has finally gotten both Inu brothers to calm in front of her. She is truly a handful but I think that both brothers can handle that. I'm glad with the marking ritual between Sango and Inuyasha although I wonder if Sango realizes that it was just done to protect her from the poison. I hope that Kagome and Shippou are OK you haven't mentioned them in the past 2 chapters. So I guess I'll just have to wait and see when the next chapter will be told. I really hope that all is going well for them too. It seems that Inuyasha and Sesshomaru will be in for quite a rude awakening when they go and see Kagome with Rin. Hopefully it will be a good thing however with Kagome and Shippou both pretty badly hurt from the dear I hope that Inuyasha and Sesshomaru don't see that as a betrayal to the one that had taken her away from them. Well I guess I just have to wait and see until the next chapter. PLEASE UPDATE SOON I CAN'T WAIT ANY LONGER TO SEE WHAT WILL HAPPEN!!! THANKS.
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Reviewed By: ama_tori [MediaMiner Member] On: July 05, 2005 01:27 CDT
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OMFG! i'm actually logged in!! :O lol, *sigh* i wish i was rin in that situation... i'd luv to have yashie as a brother/father figure... romantic would be awesome fine too :P *stares dreamily at life-sized pic of yashie*
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Reviewed By: ice_princess_1185 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 03, 2005 23:42 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love it, I love it, I LOVE TI!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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