| "All by myself" Reviews/Comments [ 55 ] |
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Reviewed By: Sinistra [MediaMiner Member] On: March 13, 2002 02:27 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I told you I wanted to read it. Thank you for sending me the link. I am very happy now I had the time and chance to read this fic. This fic would have to have been one of my faves now.
Your style of writing is pretty cool and so is your explanation of the scenes. Very well written and a very awsome story. Keep it up. |
Reviewed By: KANDI On: January 27, 2002 02:10 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
that was really great...it just made me want to cry. |
Reviewed By: The Stark [MediaMiner Member] On: January 18, 2002 10:08 EST
Comment/Review:
This is another great fic. I have found myself fascinated with the Bulma/Vegita relationship since the advent of Mirai Trunks, and his starteling revelations.
I remember laughing out loud the first time I heard it, but over time, and seeing how they evolve through the series and into GT, I was amazed at the level and
depth of achievement the writers attained with these characters. However, I think it is the fans that really create that missing flavor, that humanness (pardon the expression)
that comes with life. I enjoyed your fic very much. I have read seveal here that seem to hit that mark of "keeping to character", but yours, so far, has been the
strongest. I liked the idea of the one night stand, the emotions and the lust, and how each realized that this was "it"....Bulma's being a single mother (for a time),
and how her parents handeled it. (They always did seem pretty open minded). The repercussions of the relationship, and how both responded.
Vegita never looses his cockiness (uh, no pun intended). He also shows a side of uncertainty. Of regret, doubt, and even though he is the great Price of the Saiyans...he's
confused in his relationships -- just like the rest of us! I liked the fact that you explored the character but kept within character. I have read some fics where Vegita becomes
loving, soft, tender...every time he sees Bulma. Somehow, that seems simply out of place. It's too much power for one woman to have over him; and I'm not sure he is capable
of showing that type of emotion the first time out. Perhaps once time elapses and he evolves, but it seems to sudden otherwise.
Also, that is not how it is shown on the series -- at least as I perceive it. He always seems rather brusque with her,
though it is evident he also cares for her.
I thought the overall fic was inviting, well written, involving. It certainly had a very powerful love scene! (I'll never look at the ceiling the same way again).
I liked both viewpoints, too. |
Reviewed By: Ashley Akaihi [MediaMiner Member] On: January 13, 2002 10:05 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
That was simply beautiful! *Claps, then pauses for a second to wipe tear away from eye* ^-^ I loved it! Oh, and i just happened to be listening to Papaya's "Butterfly" from DDR during the "And you sing I… I… I… " part...so i got the "Aiyiyi" into it! |
Reviewed By: Jesa Jaisai On: January 12, 2002 23:38 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really enjoyed this! I love V/B lemons (I collect them and write them) and nowadays it's very difficult to find one that's as good as you write. You portrayed the characters very accurately, especially Vegeta. This was a very sad fanfic. You know a fanfic is well written when it has enough emotion to capture the reader and bring them to near tears! I want to thank you on your good work! And keep it up. |
Reviewed By: Fanilia On: January 04, 2002 08:10 EST
Comment/Review:
Told you I'd be back. What I said in the post and more. Both POV were very well written to give me the sense of the emotions of both. I liked the ceiling vs what the same old bed would have been. It did added a sense of danger to the scene. I will read some of the other fictions you have written since I like the style of this one. |
Reviewed By: D-chan [MediaMiner Member] On: January 02, 2002 21:06 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is one of the most intelligently written, yet dramatic fics that I have ever read. The two POVs provide a perfect foil and keep the reader at the edge of their toes and full of emotion.
BRAVO!
~D-chan
Email: AlloraColleen@aol.com |
Reviewed By: Isshi ( ransurotto@hotmail.com ) On: January 02, 2002 17:16 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow!!!! You did it again Ember!! ^_^ You have to write more!! You can't leave us at that!! *Grins*
Keep up the great work! *^_^* [Your still a genius writter!] |
Reviewed By: Susan On: December 26, 2001 18:06 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This was absolutely awesome. You made me feel like I was experiencing everything that they were going thru. Absolute genius. I think I reviewed the first chapter on FFN, but I'm not sure (too much turkey), and I'm too damn lazy to go looking for it right now. Anyway, great stuff, like everything else you've done. Keep on writing. Peace |
Reviewed By: gokusgirl [MediaMiner Member] On: December 21, 2001 14:11 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is so sad, but well written! I felt her saddness and pain as I read the flashback. You did a fantastic job on this, pat yourself on the back! And please do email when you update! (gokusgirl_2000@yahoo.com) |
Reviewed By: Firaga [MediaMiner Member] On: December 17, 2001 08:04 EST
Comment/Review:
wow! that was good! :) keep it up! vegeta was SO in character it broke my heart |
Reviewed By: bballin On: December 14, 2001 20:51 EST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
geez, what's up vegeta's ass? this is very realistic to the dbz world. i love it!! keep it going!! |
Reviewed By: me On: December 14, 2001 20:49 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
ok, you know what? i want more...excellent!!! |
Reviewed By: majinsk8rvegeta [MediaMiner Member] On: December 11, 2001 23:37 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i especially liked all the hentai parts. it was very entertaining...i wish i could think of parts like that...by the way who's song was that?
Either i missed it or u didn't mention it. Hope to see da next chapter!!
Email: majinsk8rvegeta@yahoo.com |
Reviewed By: connie On: December 11, 2001 22:54 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
aww, this is soo sad, i can't believe vegeta said that to bulma at the end, and then he threw her clothes at her and told her to leave. that's him definitely, the characters aren't ooc which is something i really like, and you portray them very realistically. hmm, now i'm wondering, if you'll explain his thinking in the next chapter. Surely he didn't mean to hurt her. and is he coming back? well anyway great job. hurry with the next chapter! |
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