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Title: Ch 5-10
Reviewed By: forechunkukee [MediaMiner Member] On: August 08, 2005 23:53 CDT
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Ah jeez, this e-mail bug is killing me...can't believe I missed your last 5 updates...well in any case, awesome job so far, I'm impressed! After "Hot-Flash", things seemed to have cooled a bit, but thats understandable because I can tell you're striving to build a pretty strong relationship between Ikari and Shimano, and I believe thats a good thing because too often lemons turn out to pointless sex (if its well written though, then I don't mind. Check out Dream Machine, awesome PWP because its written out pretty well). I really don't have any complaints about this, chapter length aside, but that makes total sense to me. You just updated 5 times in the past week alone. Keep up the good work here, this looks very promising to me. Peace! d('')b
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Title: Chapter 10
Reviewed By: D.J. On: August 08, 2005 13:02 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Seems pretty good. I would like some longer chapters though. And also how would Kensuke know about Gendo's mannerisms? He doesn't work at Nerv and hasn't ever seen him.
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Title: Chapter 10
Reviewed By: WarpWizard [MediaMiner Member] On: August 08, 2005 12:16 CDT
Comment/Review:
You should change the name of the fic to "Parkour Training". Just kidding. :)
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Reviewed By: A-Z Mk II On: August 08, 2005 05:08 CDT
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So far, so good. The chapter length is slowly but steadily dropping, and the focus seems to be shifting away from 'hentai', but that is not necessarily a bad thing. Good work, and I look forward to more.
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Title: ch.10
Reviewed By: Peacemaker [MediaMiner Member] On: August 08, 2005 02:25 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Another chapter if i do say so myself. Keep up the good work and update when you have time please.
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Title: 10
Reviewed By: JErosion On: August 07, 2005 23:27 CDT
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a bit shorter than your previous chapters but then again it's the weekend and you update regularly so i can in no way complain. The effect of Motowa on Shinji is most positive. IT makes me curious to see if you'll have her play skip school and tag along with Shinji when he goes to his mothers grave.
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Title: ch.9
Reviewed By: Peacemaker [MediaMiner Member] On: August 06, 2005 17:14 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Man you update reaaly fast and I just want you to know that I really appreciate it. Keep up the good work and update when you have time please.
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Title: 7,8 &9
Reviewed By: JErosion On: August 06, 2005 02:06 CDT
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wow you actually made a Gendo Ikari that wasn't an complete asshole, it's nice seeing him assuming a father like role, heh now that tweedle dee and tweedle dum are in the picture lets hope they don't get in the way too much. but with the 11th angel come and gone, Shinji is definately going to need her. And your right with your current pace you have plenty of times to develope there relationship without them hitting the sheets yet. cheers
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Title: 3 new chapters
Reviewed By: Peacemaker [MediaMiner Member] On: August 05, 2005 19:17 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I read ch. 6, 7, & 8 at the same time and they are all very good. The story is moving along nicely and I can't wait to see where it goes. Keep up the good work and update when you have time please.
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Reviewed By: Ravenz2008 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 05, 2005 13:20 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is an excellent work of fiction! Your original character is well created and fits right into things. I hope to see more work from you in the future. -Raven
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Title: ch. 5&6
Reviewed By: JErosion On: August 05, 2005 00:00 CDT
Comment/Review:
i think the thing i like most with this fic is the fact that it's chapter 6 and they haven't had sex yet, granted the sex is there just under the surface. I kinda interested to see how other will react to Shinji spending time with Motowa, especially Touji and Kensuke. But then again i rather read more about the two of them that those goobers anyway.
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Title: More Positive Progress
Reviewed By: darkfriend [MediaMiner Member] On: August 04, 2005 23:37 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'm starting to like this fic more and more...It reads very well and the development is coming along at a good pace. I'm personally most interested to see how you tie this in with the Eva storyline canon. As the series progreses from here Shinji gets progressively more depressed due to his increasingly traumatic battles with the angels. How will his demeanor change if he has a stable, happy relationship with a well-adjusted girl? Will you try to work his relationship with Motowa around his depression from the anime or will we see a happier Shinji than in the series? Most intriguing...
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Title: Really great so far.
Reviewed By: Nick2951 On: August 04, 2005 18:26 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is really great so far. I liked it when Shinji touched the sensitive area by accident. I look forward to the next chapter.
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Title: Nice Piece of Work
Reviewed By: Daniel Shinigami. On: August 03, 2005 01:14 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I Don't Usually Read Hentai Fics, but yours has definitely caught my interest. It's nice to see one of my favorite Anime Characters get together with an original. Great Story and Grammar Too.
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Title: great story
Reviewed By: Peacemaker(not logged in) On: August 02, 2005 19:48 CDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I like this story very much becuz you don't see many stories about shinji with a new character. I read them all at once and they are all very well done. Keep up the good work and update when you have time please.
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