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Title: OMFG!!!
Reviewed By: bubbles-sama [MediaMiner Member] On: May 08, 2005 02:10 EDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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PLEASE UPDATE PLEASE UPDATE PLEASE UPDATE PRETTY PLEASE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! This is such a good story!!!! I'm hanging here!!!! You are probably the only author that has portrayed the characters accurately. A lot of other people make up a bunch of crap that isn't based on anything. Did that make any sense? It's hard to explain. Anyways I think that out of all the stories I have read, this one is well written, and well-thoughted-out. I love how believable this is. My heart is hurting!!! This is so awesome! You have done your homework! Way to go!!!! Now UPDATE!!!
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Title: Its me Rinicat
Reviewed By: Simply a Lady [MediaMiner Member] On: May 08, 2005 01:57 EDT
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Wooohooo...after fanfiction booted me for the the third time I was about ready to cry because it meant I would miss your story. But I remembered you had it here thank god! Still good and it moves me... Anyhow before you wonder...that's my name as well Simply...
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Title: woah
Reviewed By: phalon22 (nsi) On: May 06, 2005 17:13 EDT
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Okay this story is great so far, I like the whole situation you've arranged and I don't think any of this is really out of character or I have read too many AU/Future fics. But great job, I really wonder what Sess has to say to Kagome. Please update soon!
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Reviewed By: Sorcha [MediaMiner Member] On: May 05, 2005 00:44 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I am really enjoying this story. You have a good grasp of the characters, in my opinion. You have a mature writing style that conveys your meaning in an enjoyable manner. Update soon.
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Title: FFARG Review
Reviewed By: xfiledino [MediaMiner Member] On: May 04, 2005 00:43 EDT
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I'm a big InuYasha fan, so I can see where you're coming from. The only thing I had a problem with was that the entire first chapter was nothing but a long conversation. I did read all the way to Chapter 5, and found that the story did blend nicely together. At first I was rather puzzled as to why Sesshomaru was even in the story, until Chapter 5 when it sort of explains it. But now I'm left to wonder how Kouga plays into all of this. Overall, I think it is a good piece. I can understand Kagome and Sango's feelings, and I wasn't left wondering where they had come up with those ideas. As you had said, this seems to be a piece about all of their feelings, and I know that getting them to the ultimate act could potentially be hard. Keep up the good work, I want to see more of this one!!!
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Reviewed By: ~EquineBabe~ On: May 04, 2005 00:05 EDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love your story..Please continue and update soon!!!
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Reviewed By: Revera_04 On: May 02, 2005 00:57 EDT
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O! I love this Story ...update!!...damnit
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Title: ffarg review
Reviewed By: angelica incarnate [MediaMiner Member] On: April 30, 2005 14:28 EDT
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You have a nice start here and I will probably continue to read after I leave you this review. You have excellent editing skills or an excellent beta. You obviously took a great deal of time to make sure grammer and spelling were both accurate. I think I saw one or two small typos, but honestly this is some of the cleanest work I've seen in a long time. Some things to watch are sentence structure/phrasing. Yes, you are following all the grammatical rules I can think of, but some of your sentences were stilted or awkward. They were almost run-on sentences--you seem to have a tendency towards lengthening a sentence by adding more information after a comma. Wherever I noticed this occuring, it was technically correct, but not the smoothest reading. Hmm, an example Kagome had confidence that Inuyasha would fully recover once he regained his hanyou form at sunrise, but in the mean time, his breathing had been a bit labored and he was a little feverish. I believe the second comma could be there, but the sentence reads better without it. Try reading the sentence out loud with exaggerated breaths wherever you add a comma, it helps. Otherwise, aside from the slight surprise I recieved from Kagome's frankness, I think you have a solid piece started and I hope all goes well for you. Thanks for sharing!
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Reviewed By: Kicnlus_inuforeva [MediaMiner Member] On: April 29, 2005 19:58 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
this is awesome!!!!!!!!!! please update!!!! its been two days! *sniff sniff* its sooooo sad! please more inu/kag stuff! soooo sad poor lil inuyasha!!! EVIL SESS MAKE HIM GO AWAY!!...please? this is soooooo cool u gotta make more!
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Reviewed By: Cookie15 On: April 29, 2005 12:06 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I think I like your story so much because it has a different feel than many other fics. I like that you've focused more on the emotional issues of the characters. You're doing a great job of writing the characters as you might expect them a few years down the road. You've pulled me in and I can't wait to see what will happen next. I'm a little bit concerned for Houjou if Kagome goes to that party though. ;)
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Reviewed By: chaos_kyes_fallen_angel(nsi) On: April 29, 2005 00:38 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
all right, so i just read all five chapters. your writing is very good, and can easily hold my attention- i didn't find any flaws in spelling or grammar, that i can remember, and i also found no flaws in your conception of the series, thankfully. (for instance, how inu can only turn demon without his sword for as far as we have seen). Also, I think you have the bunch pretty much all in character. sango's shyness, miroku's perversity, inuyasha's temper. Shippou is a bit more mature than ive seen him portrayed so far, especially now that its been two years later than the actual series has progressed. then again, kagome's influence has allowed him to act as a child again, so i suppose its all up to interpretation. in any case, it was obviously well written as i have so much to say about it! good job, and im adding you to my favorites so i can be sure not to miss your next update! thanks for this chapter, hope to see another soon.
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Reviewed By: inu luver 2004 not signed in On: April 28, 2005 21:13 EDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
It was another great chapter... thank you so much for updating so soon. Your story has a beautiful flow to it... please keep writing. Your talet is very refreshing!!! All the tension is great!!
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Reviewed By: tinky On: April 28, 2005 15:50 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
your story rox!
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Reviewed By: Sirei [MediaMiner Member] On: April 28, 2005 05:39 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I wouldn't raise my hand... I have to say I not only pity Inuyasha but I also understand him... He never really told us that he chooses Kikyo over Kagome just that he has to go to hell with her if that is to be his destiny. But you implied that he already has feelings for her and hold himself back to not only not hurt her but also to not hurt himself if she rejects him. He had for all his life (as far as I know ca.200 years in the 3rd movie even if his age is equivalent to 15) only meet rejection from people who came near him even his brother except his mother who has suffered because he existed. Isn't it just normal that he doesn't want her to suffer the same as his mate? And at the same time he learned to love her and trust her and his dog (-demon) instincts tell him to protect what is his. I think he is not only confused and hurting but also lonely because he can't let them close to him for fear they would die also. They will die because illnesses and age where youkai are immune or at least a lot different. I like your story really much but i just wish that you would describe Inuyasha's POV a little bit more espescially now where KNOWS that Kagome would reject if he had ever tried to be his mate.(At least he believes that ne?)I think his youkaiside will have a word to say too ne? Because it already claims Kagome as his as we can see in this chapter.And if Kagome mates with someone else i think Inuyasha would really die.. Anyway thanks for this story and update soon
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Reviewed By: Inu-Shinta [MediaMiner Member] On: April 28, 2005 01:32 EDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
I hhope that Inuyasha will get a chance to talk to Kagome soon.
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