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Reviewed By: Ogremensch On: February 10, 2006 16:40 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Just read the first two chapters, thoroughly enjoyed your depiction of Kaworu, so many people just go with the sort of image shown in the "Girlfriend of Steel" comics and I really couldnt help smiling at the idea that he was a crafty bastard! hehe Also, i really appreciate the way you are gradually showing the characters emotional progression instead of just hopping right into the happy go lucky OOC settings that is entirely to prevelant in alot of fics, Asuka's battle with pride, Shinji and Rei's slow emergence from their respective shells, etc. In otherwords, im not drowning in WAFF, lol. I was also impressed, pleased and satisfied with the length and pace of the chapters and I really am anxious to read more! if you need a prereader/ editor, feel free to give me a shout at m2vr1k@yahoo.com, I'd be more than happy to help out in any way i can. Keep up the good work! Andrew
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Title: ch.2
Reviewed By: Peacemaker(not logged in) On: February 05, 2006 13:26 PST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Another very well written chapter and this story is coming along very nicely. Keep up the good work and update when you have time please.
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Reviewed By: MitoFreak On: January 30, 2006 14:37 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Very well written story. It was very honest, which is something that was never really part of the series, hardly ever were any of the characters that honest in the anime. But it was nice to see them that way. Keep writing.
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Title: A fantastic start
Reviewed By: Peacemaker(not logged in) On: January 30, 2006 12:55 PST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This story is looking great and I was wondering if it was going to have more than one chapter? Keep up the good work and update when you have time please.
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