| "The Swim of Things" Reviews/Comments [ 109 ] |
| Pages (8): [ « ‹ 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 › » ] |
Reviewed By: Rahhel (not logged) On: December 24, 2006 12:32 PST
Comment/Review:
Great, to get a new chapter at Christmas.
|
Reviewed By: dennisud [MediaMiner Member] On: December 24, 2006 11:32 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really like how your making this natural and real. I also like how the characters are developing, and hope this continues! dennisud
|
Title: WOW!!!!!!!
Reviewed By: AxS freak On: December 16, 2006 13:04 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
that's the only thing i can say. Even if the relationship between Asuka and Shinji seem to be a bit slow, it's because both of them have personal issues to solve, but after that it's easy to see why that couple is one of hottest ever. By the way i like how you have worked on Rei. Most of the writers just plug feelings into her, you on the other hand had taken this slow, making her to discover the world around her and building her personality very well. Keep writing.
|
Title: Chapter 2
Reviewed By: D12aknal On: December 13, 2006 09:24 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Excellent chapter. I just want you to know, I love you man, in a completely legal way. Heh, chew on that for a few minutes. Anyways! Touji beat the hell out of Kaworu, ooooohh.... I have wanted someone to do that for the LONGEST time. The relationships that are being portrayed are being handled extremely well by you. You are adding in the right amount of humor to this, and of course, keeping everyone "in character" at the same time. Oh, and there's Mana bashing! I never did care for her as a character... keep it up. You've really got something here!
|
Title: ^_^
Reviewed By: Draknal [MediaMiner Member] On: December 13, 2006 06:54 PST
Comment/Review:
Awesome! I read two pages into the first chapter of this fic and thought to myself, wow... I love this guy! One, you have my favorite coupling of all time, two you bash Kaworu, because everyone knows he DESERVES it, and three, everything seems to have worked out pretty well after 3rd impact, for now anyway. I shall happily continue reading and reviewing this story. I am glad I stumbled upon this site.
|
Title: chapter 15
Reviewed By: Peacemaker [MediaMiner Member] On: November 28, 2006 07:44 PST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Yay, another great chapter and Asuka has become a cheerleader hehe. The story is coming along great and I look forward to new chapters whenever they come out :) Keep up the good work and update when you have time please.
|
Reviewed By: dennisud [MediaMiner Member] On: November 23, 2006 16:30 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
It seems your setting up three conflcts to come and I wouldn't be surprised if they crossed paths here. As this Kowaru and Mana are the resident bastards! I was a bit surprised that you didn't put Ken and Rei together for the parenting assignment, but I see why you didn't. So far a great saga! dennisud
|
Reviewed By: tomdj1701 [MediaMiner Member] On: October 23, 2006 14:58 PDT
Comment/Review:
Great update, keep up the great work
|
Title: two more great chapters
Reviewed By: Peacemaker [MediaMiner Member] On: October 22, 2006 16:06 PDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This story is really coming along great and I see myself looking forward to your updates hehe. I could have sworn I left a review for the last chapter as well but I guess not so I am leaving a double review :) Great job on them both and please keep up the great work and update when you have time!!!
|
Reviewed By: dennisud [MediaMiner Member] On: October 22, 2006 11:23 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
You did a great job with the announcer's dialogue and the way your using your ACC's here is excellent! Hope you continue the quality of each chapter, the only critique and this applies more to the earlier chapters is a bit too much decription and more dialogue and narrative! So far a great epic! dennisud
|
Reviewed By: anonimus1 On: October 21, 2006 13:17 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great story. chapters a bit large, but not boring. your should publish this story in FF.net to have a lot more reviews because this story deserves.
|
Reviewed By: tomdj1701 [MediaMiner Member] On: October 09, 2006 20:01 PDT
Comment/Review:
nicely done, looking forward to more of this one
|
Title: chapter 13
Reviewed By: dasot710 [MediaMiner Member] On: October 02, 2006 14:21 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i would normally complain when an author strays from shinji and asuka but you seem to make it work. i hope you dont get flamed for writing almost a whole chapter about kensuke. You write enough about the other characters (shinji and asuka) that i do not have to wonder what the hell are the other characters doing. This is actually the first fanifc where i am actually interested in what happens to kensuke the first fanfic of which i read the kensuke parts instead of skimming over them. You are doing a great job!!!
|
Reviewed By: dennisud [MediaMiner Member] On: September 24, 2006 19:51 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Its nice to see the supporting cast and what they go through, and the banter Rei and Kensuke have is great, and belivable. Both working at the restaurant is also very nice and a good way for both to accumilate to their coming adult hood and the responcibilities that come with it! dennisud P.S.- the only critique is tha lack of more dialgue, to keep up with the large amount of narration!
|
Reviewed By: denisud On: August 20, 2006 11:53 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
so far a god yarn with enough angst and drama to balance out the humor and such. I see using Hikari to 'help' Asuka will bee seen in future chapters, and having a Kimono'ed Rei working in the same place as Ken leaves alot of things open. Plus Kowaru can get to Shinji in many ways, threats verbally, physically, and emotionally to those around him might be just as effective as his ambition to be closer to him. Rei and Asuka are the obvious targets here, with Rei single and Asuka being Shinji's girlfriend, she can be a target of opportunity. And Don't forget Kensuke here he is their friend and will keep an eye on Rei as well! Great so far! dennisud
|
| Pages (8): [ « ‹ 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 › » ] |
