| "The Swim of Things" Reviews/Comments [ 109 ] |
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Reviewed By: USAVet [MediaMiner Member] On: August 10, 2008 12:04 PDT
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Another fine chapter. The trip was a great idea and I loved the interactions between everyone, including Li-mei's vengance. Well written and very enjoyable.
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Reviewed By: XDorsaiX On: August 03, 2008 10:38 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This fic is quite possible the best Evangelion fic ever written, period. It has all the best pairings and the writing style is superb. Keep up the good work. Can't wait for the next chapter!
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Reviewed By: USAVet [MediaMiner Member] On: July 18, 2008 19:01 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This story has been a total joy to read from the start. It has been very interesting to watch the relationships and characters grow throughout the chapters. I find it very well written with few if any errors. I must admit I find myself getting a bit impaitent for any updates you make. I'm looking forward to where you take this and how you round things out. I'm also curious if you are ever going to end this one ;) No hurry on my part because the number of paths that you can take from your writing is astounding. Keep up the good work. Keep writing along.
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Reviewed By: mcgahr On: June 29, 2008 01:16 PDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Discoveried your story last week, had a big week catching up and enjoyed every aspect :-). Impress with your ability to plan & develope your story lines over many chapters, impressed with your effort to reference different cultures (Japannese, German & USA), impressed and grateful with your dedication to writing such quality & quantily of pross on a regular schedule. Off to reread the story and wait your next chapter
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Title: More of a comment
Reviewed By: A-Z On: June 11, 2008 14:10 PDT
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I agree with your in-chapter remark about gun otakus being annoying; but not for the reason you suggested. They are annoying because they are armchair experts rather than practical professionals. Incidentally, I also agree with your featured stance that guns are for killing. Hell yes! It's why I own so many! Same with the edged weapons I own, matter of fact. And since I bet you are going to wonder 'does that mean you use them for that purpose?' I will have to say 'whenever the need, opportunity or occasion allows, Y-E-S!'
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Reviewed By: A. Nonymous On: June 11, 2008 00:15 PDT
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Mmmmmm... another fun chapter. The off-camera conversation is intriguing, but to be honest, it's probably all the more intriguing because it is off-camera. After all, we know exactly how each girl feels about the topic, and the talk was probably just a re-hash of similar talks that they (at least, Asuka and Hikari) have had many times before. At least Aunt Asuka has had some experience the last couple of years to get her over some of her fears about raising a child. I've always wondered if Asuka would prefer a ruby to a diamond--I suppose a pink diamond is something of a compromise. :) Keep 'em coming... we'll be here waiting.
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Reviewed By: Deadberserker [MediaMiner Member] On: June 10, 2008 19:58 PDT
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Good to see you updating. This chapter was on par with the rest or your work and I look forward to your next update. Thanks for writing this and posting the updates with some consistency.
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Reviewed By: Clouddancer1014 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 10, 2008 08:21 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I've taken an interest in "The Swim of Things." I'm not doubting your dedication or anything (anyone who can write thirty above average length chapters is obviously extremely dedicated), but I am curious as to when you will be releasing the next chapter. --An impatient reader.
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Reviewed By: Deadberserker [MediaMiner Member] On: April 21, 2008 22:04 PDT
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Glad you didn't leave us hanging, the wait was nothing compared to other authors so no problems. Like always great chapter, I'm impressed at the over all average length it shows a certain amount of dedication and as long as you get the chapters out every few months and don't wait a year between updates you good.
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Title: CH30
Reviewed By: Tezza1502 On: April 21, 2008 06:37 PDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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Once again, you have dropped an awesome chapter in our laps. The wait was worth it!! The cat's out of the bag, and so let slip the kittens of interrogation! And it was nice to see Rei's friends being so supportive. And that they were willing to put her to rights over her concerns. It was all handled well. 'Though, the newly public couple are in for a heck of a time from their classmates. Not to mention Kaede's reaction when she finds out. sigh Longer waits between chapters. It sucks, but what can you do? Writing fanfiction is only a hobby for most of us. Real life takes precedence, no matter how nice it would be to have it otherwise. On the up side, the longer the wait the better the quality. Keep up the awesome work & see you next time! T
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Title: No worries...
Reviewed By: A. Nonymous On: April 20, 2008 16:41 PDT
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Was getting a little worried about you after we passed the 2-month mark without any word, but that's fine. Life has a way of keeping us busy, and I doubt anyone begrudges you for it. We'll be here 'till the end. The tieback to the scenes we never got to see in earlier chapters was amusing, and the various... methods of entertainment... were amusing and sometimes surprising. While it is tempting to ask if girls really talk like that, such a question, it seems, is probably rather rhetorical. The nightmares were a nice touch, too. Sometimes, it seems as though they've left those years behind, and yet, such things *should* leave a permanent, if hidden, mark on all of them. While it would be interesting to see everyone's reactions if the truth were to be revealed... it might force the story into a totally different direction, one that loses the innocence (said tongue-directly-in-cheek) that has made this story almost unique. Either way--we'll be here waiting until the last chapter, and probably begging for more after that. :)
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Reviewed By: dennisud [MediaMiner Member] On: April 20, 2008 15:38 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Finally Rei blossoms in her social and familial relationships. I agreee the frank talk she had with Asuka and Rei sure makes her so much more real to us readers. Course now we'll have a build-up to her and Ken's first time while I'm sure they'll get the teasing and some more prejudiced remarks which i think will be dealt with by the sextet! Nice job!
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Title: 29
Reviewed By: Tezza1502 On: March 12, 2008 06:20 PDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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I think that this was by far the funniest chapter you have written in recent memory. From Asuka & Shinji describing the way they learnt to ski to getting busted by their teacher during their 'private time', was pure gold. Add to that the various conversations between the groups of boys and girls, i.e.: teasing the crap out of each other. Great stuff! -- So, Rei & Kensuke's little secret is about to be bust wide open. 'Bout damn time!! Can't wait to see how the other two couples close ranks around them. Should make for an interesting read. As always. Hanging out for the next chapter! T
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Title: Mehr! Mehr!
Reviewed By: A. Nonymous On: February 11, 2008 01:12 PST
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Around the first of every month, I start coming to MM.O to look for my fix. Romantic comedies shouldn't fit so well with Eva... and slice-of-life fics shouldn't stay fresh after exceeding the length of most novels... but this one does. Can't wait for mehr next month... Rei make need to spend the night in one of those warming cabins to get away from the class.
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Reviewed By: dennisud [MediaMiner Member] On: January 06, 2008 19:32 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I suggest "Keeping" the pace you have for Kensuke and Rei while maybe getting the other two couples to be mire 'intense' if you want. So far the pacing is top notch, and the use of ACC's is great. The only thing i think you should consider is another pregnancy, either for Misato or someone else. A girl going through pregnancy give a whole lot of plot devices to use! dennisud
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