| "The Swim of Things" Reviews/Comments [ 109 ] |
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Reviewed By: Lord_Inuyasha17 [MediaMiner Member] On: March 27, 2006 13:04 PST
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That was really good I liked all six chapters and can barely wait till you update. I know your busy and some of the chapters are 30 or more pages long. The plot is impecable and I cant count the number of times I'vce busted out laughing at Asuka's little actions. Keep up the good work! ~Sayonara~
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Reviewed By: Rahhel [MediaMiner Member] On: March 26, 2006 10:49 PST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I do like the characterization. The story is developing smothly and not to fast, which I appriciate. U have to write a new chapter soon.
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Title: KICKASS
Reviewed By: Bryce On: March 24, 2006 21:07 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really liked it. FINALLY! an author who uses correct grammar...i rarely find that on this site...your style of writing has also drawn me into the story as well...though i will say i saw a few grammar mistakes, they were minor and not worth mentioning...good story.
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Reviewed By: Psiberkiwi On: March 11, 2006 05:02 PST
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Oh, this fic is good... this is really, REALLY good! Keep it going! BTW, on the subject of your text graphic (very nifty, I must say), if you set the format of ALL lines to 'centre', it should work. (Currently, the last line appears to be set to 'left'.) I hope this helps, but above all... I LOVE READING THIS FIC!!
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Title: Ch.6
Reviewed By: Peacemaker(not logged in) On: March 05, 2006 15:52 PST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Another fantastic chapter and if you are looking for a prereader; I would be more than happy to help. Just drop me a line through my email. Keep up the good work and update when you have time please.
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Reviewed By: Takuninuyasha On: February 28, 2006 17:34 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
SHINJI AND ASUKA 4EVA Karuro can go @#$& himself E Tu Rei Touji & Class Rep good Gendou nowhere to found Very choice
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Title: Great
Reviewed By: Craig Ikari On: February 28, 2006 17:27 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Awesome changes from the every day Fanfic 1. Karworu is not gay(Extremely cool) 2. Rei doen't go after Shinji. ANd she's getting mouthy (Very funny) 3.Mana is in it Yet Shinji Don't give a shit(Always good.) 4.Keiko Cute as can be. 'Asa' 'Shini' 'stooge' all cute.
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Title: Ch.5
Reviewed By: Peacemaker(not logged in) On: February 26, 2006 13:59 PST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Ch.5 is a great chapter and the secret is finally out in the open. Thank you for letting us know about the updating, not many authors do and I appreciate it. Keep up the good work and update when you have time please.
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Title: Ch.4
Reviewed By: Peacemaker(not logged in) On: February 18, 2006 13:38 PST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Another fantastic chapter and the character development is coming along nicely. A little shorter then the rest but I'm not complaining. Keep up the good work and update when you have time please.
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Reviewed By: duggyd33 On: February 13, 2006 16:31 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
You have here a very entertaining funny and amusing story here. The OOCness here is nagated by the clear changes told by the author so we can accept the changes first because its after TI, 2nd its a natural progression for children to slowly grow up and 3rd having Kaji and Misato also maturing clearly now that they are parents. I'm really anxious for how Rei will develop here as Shinji and Asuka become closer. Whom will the author put in Rei's sights as a love interest as she claerly is becoming more of a normal Teenage girl here. Good use of their friends as catalysts but I think we need to see more of the teens out and about on dates or get togethers. I remember a trip to Okinawa which the three former pilots did attend. Maybe thats one thing that need to be explored. Plus I think we need to see how the surviving Ex-Nerv personnel are doing! So far a very intriguing and entertaining story. You should consider publisung on www.fanfiction.net You'll get more reviews there and more readers. dennisud
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Title: ch.3
Reviewed By: Peacemaker(not logged in) On: February 11, 2006 14:21 PST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Another fantstic chapter and I would like to thank you for the fast update. Keep up the good work and update when you had time please.
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Reviewed By: Ogremensch On: February 10, 2006 16:40 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Just read the first two chapters, thoroughly enjoyed your depiction of Kaworu, so many people just go with the sort of image shown in the "Girlfriend of Steel" comics and I really couldnt help smiling at the idea that he was a crafty bastard! hehe Also, i really appreciate the way you are gradually showing the characters emotional progression instead of just hopping right into the happy go lucky OOC settings that is entirely to prevelant in alot of fics, Asuka's battle with pride, Shinji and Rei's slow emergence from their respective shells, etc. In otherwords, im not drowning in WAFF, lol. I was also impressed, pleased and satisfied with the length and pace of the chapters and I really am anxious to read more! if you need a prereader/ editor, feel free to give me a shout at m2vr1k@yahoo.com, I'd be more than happy to help out in any way i can. Keep up the good work! Andrew
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Title: ch.2
Reviewed By: Peacemaker(not logged in) On: February 05, 2006 13:26 PST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Another very well written chapter and this story is coming along very nicely. Keep up the good work and update when you have time please.
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Reviewed By: MitoFreak On: January 30, 2006 14:37 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Very well written story. It was very honest, which is something that was never really part of the series, hardly ever were any of the characters that honest in the anime. But it was nice to see them that way. Keep writing.
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Title: A fantastic start
Reviewed By: Peacemaker(not logged in) On: January 30, 2006 12:55 PST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This story is looking great and I was wondering if it was going to have more than one chapter? Keep up the good work and update when you have time please.
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