| "Vegeta and the Great Shopping Adventure" Reviews/Comments [ 64 ] |
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Reviewed By: Susan On: April 11, 2002 01:17 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
YYYYYYAAAAAAYYYYYYY You updated!!! I guess Vegeta "showed" Goku (^_^). Looks like Bra is gonna get her cookies after all-lol. Can't wait to see what disaster awaits dads and sons. |
Reviewed By: Rogue On: May 11, 2002 16:24 CDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
Yeah!!! Go Vegeta!!!! WOOOHOOO!!!! That's ma boy!!
Teach them a little respect! If only I were a Saiyan!! Man, I would kick some serious a$$ out there. Shopping, driving, I'd take back every parking space ever stollen from me and heaven have mercy on the next person to cut me off!!!
I love Vegeta and I would be just like him. Who says power corrupts? I'm already corrupt, I'm just lacking a little in the power department. I already have the mindset now I just need the muscle. GIVE ME THE MUSCLE!!!!! pleeeaaaaaassse
i want the muscle soooooooooo bad :( |
Reviewed By: oroborus [MediaMiner Member] On: March 18, 2002 03:20 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oh, this definitely has overtones of the time Goku and Piccolo were trying to get their driver's licences.
This is funny material, no doubt about that. However I think that if you spent some time on this story, tightening up some the phrasing and improving the spelling and typos (ironically, I just typed 'imporving'), that it would be time well spent. |
Reviewed By: Greybus [MediaMiner Member] On: March 18, 2002 00:54 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
ROTFL!! Oh man, I know where Goku and Goen are coming from. Any guy who has had to by embarrassing femenine hygene rpoducts for their girlfriend/wife/mother understand. Who is Summer and why does she have her own evening? Man that is great. I especially like the bread aisle joke. Yeast... |
Reviewed By: Papa Bear On: March 17, 2002 14:10 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Nice job! Like where this is going keep it up! |
Reviewed By: Vampiric_Angel [MediaMiner Member] On: March 16, 2002 16:36 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Lol, doesnt get any better than seeying Vegeta having to buy stuff like that. Perhaps Bulma can make him lick out the toilet bowl next?
!!!!!!!!!Keep it up!!!!! |
Reviewed By: Kandy On: March 16, 2002 03:38 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is so funny. You should most definitely continue this story, or at least until you have the same amount of chapters as "When You Least Expect" there is enough dramatized stories already. I need some comedy in my live. Keep up the good work, and write more chapters. |
Reviewed By: Susan On: March 16, 2002 00:46 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
LMAO!! I think stupidity runs high in the Son family. Goku's conversation with Goten while on aisle 3 was rich. I'll be laughing about Summer and her Evening for a long time to come. Vegeta's lack of patience and Trunks definition of the word wimp was too much. LOL. I bet that poor kid behind the counter wished that his mom had used b.c. pills instead of bringing him into the world to have to deal with Vegeta. Please write more soon. This is just too funny. Peace |
Reviewed By: Greybus [MediaMiner Member] On: March 13, 2002 22:30 CST
Comment/Review:
The inclusion of Kakarrot. Very nice. This is looking good. |
Reviewed By: Mans On: March 11, 2002 03:26 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Well i loooved the story line. Especially Vegeta doing shopping and the way trunks is.
the down part is that some times its hard to read becuase of the tags in bwteen the writing. try going to the site and reading it your self u'll no what i mean
the story was grrrrrreaaaaaaatt
keep it up and u might be writing future story lies of the show!1
take care and HURRY UP WITH THE NEXT CHAPTER
Ali |
Reviewed By: Mans On: March 11, 2002 03:26 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Well i loooved the story line. Especially Vegeta doing shopping and the way trunks is.
the down part is that some times its hard to read becuase of the tags in bwteen the writing. try going to the site and reading it your self u'll no what i mean
the story was grrrrrreaaaaaaatt
keep it up and u might be writing future story lies of the show!1
take care and HURRY UP WITH THE NEXT CHAPTER
Ali |
Reviewed By: Susan On: March 11, 2002 01:50 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
ROTFLMAO!!! "It'll be refreshing to see a Saiyan with a job"-LOL ChiChi said a mouthful. I love Trunk's horror at having to go shopping with daddy. Goten's miserable, Goku's pissed and Veggie would rather be having a root canal. What a lovely foursome. I can't wait to see what happens at the drugstore. The poor pharmacist has no idea of what is about to happen to him and his establlishment. Great job JB!! |
Reviewed By: Psyfire [MediaMiner Member] On: March 06, 2002 21:44 CST
Comment/Review:
LMAO!! I love it.. The kids reaction to having to go out with Daddy is just PRICELESS!!! |
Reviewed By: Mon2k2 On: August 09, 2002 09:42 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
its real hilarious n i hope u write sum more!! i luv the way u hav set it out n great plot to da story!!!!! b |
Reviewed By: Susan On: March 01, 2002 01:22 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
LOLLOLLOL!! Great first chapter. I loved the fight, the kids' reaction and Veggie's disgust with the whole damn thing. And you used my little Vegetasei line too-I'm so flattered! This fic will kick ass just like the others you've done. I have a feeling that before Veggie's day is thru he's gonna want to get the dragonballs and wish Frieza back, so that Frieza can take him out PERMANENTLY! Thanks JB |
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