| "Third Time's the Charm" Reviews/Comments [ 82 ] |
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Title: Beautiful
Reviewed By: HopelesslyEscaflowne [MediaMiner Member] On: July 25, 2006 02:44 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Very interesting fic. The only thing I didn't like about the plot so far was that Inuyasha and Sango had a past sexual relationship. :P I'm not a fan of that coupling which is probably why I was turned off by it, even though it only happened in the past and was a colossal mistake, lol. Them sharing a bed was also sort of weird, lol. Anyways, other than that I like how the plot is going so far. I do think that we need to see more of what Inuyasha is thinking. For some reason I feel that Kagome's thoughts are more thorough and explicit. Sure, Inuyasha is a man of few words, but not in his mind he doesn't have to be. ^^ I definitely think that in your next chapter we should see what Inuyasha was thinking in that little make out session at Kagome's apartment. More description also couldn't hurt in general. I also noticed how you clearly state how Kagome reacts to Inuyasha's touch but never how Inuyasha reacts to Kagome's touch. Overall I found the story very creative. I only had a couple of questions though. Is everyone purely human? If not, does Inuyasha have puppy ears or claws? Any special powers? Just wanted to clarify and I hope you write many more chapters and keep up the good work! ;)
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Reviewed By: Suikidoen On: July 24, 2006 18:29 CDT
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YAY! you must write more!!!!
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Reviewed By: silveraliora [MediaMiner Member] On: July 24, 2006 11:05 CDT
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I really like this chapter! i can't wait for the next one! please update soon!
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Reviewed By: KK On: July 24, 2006 09:59 CDT
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That was so cute I loved it! So are they gonna go on another date or are they gonna become official? And if they become official are they gonna start hanging out alotso Kagome doesnt have too wait all the time(lol)?OOOOO I cant wait til next chap, Im too excited!Anyways update soon! thanks, your number one fan!
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Title: chap.10
Reviewed By: pup [MediaMiner Member] On: July 24, 2006 09:52 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Woah!!! That was like... so soon but it fits the story flow. Uberly HOT! Me like it... Grins.
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Reviewed By: silverwolf halfbeast [MediaMiner Member] On: July 24, 2006 04:50 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is a good story hope you update soon. Keep up the good work.
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Reviewed By: rainydays (nsi) On: July 24, 2006 03:40 CDT
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Thanks for the update! Good chapter... I wonder if Inu is going to start being himself around Kagome. I can't wait for another update!! :o)
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Reviewed By: geurin On: July 23, 2006 22:08 CDT
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PLEASE WRITE MORE!!!!!!!! i loved it so far but you really should continue it i hope you plan to do just that>.
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Title: chap.9
Reviewed By: pup [MediaMiner Member] On: July 23, 2006 09:54 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
AWESOME!!! Gods... u make me fantasize myself. Laughs... dis s uber fluffiness. I like it. =] Do u have an account on FF.net?? I hope u can answer... ^^
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Reviewed By: inufan13 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 23, 2006 01:31 CDT
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haha cuutee! i am gonna read more. only n ch. 6 but i am tired. lol. keep up the writing u are excellent. i am adding this story to my favourites. if u have time can u check out my current novel called battle for michenta on my page? lol thnxx hugabug_bug@hotmail.com
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Reviewed By: InuYashasLover(offline) On: July 23, 2006 00:19 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love this please hurry and update!
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Title: WOW
Reviewed By: KK On: July 22, 2006 22:45 CDT
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Ok remember how I told you that I love you before well now I REALLY love you if your were a guy I would marry you, but your not(well thats what I think neways)and Im not bi or les no offense to people who are, its jus I dont swing that way anywayz that was really good and I DARE YOU TO UPDATE anyways buh bi and write more
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Reviewed By: doujo (dlg) On: July 22, 2006 14:42 CDT
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Great chap!! They finally had their first real date ^^ Update soon! *as usual* =)
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Reviewed By: rainydays (nsi) On: July 22, 2006 08:32 CDT
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aww! They are head over heels for each other, how sweet! :o) I am glad they had their first real alone date. Very good chapter! I can't wait until the next update! I am curious to see what you will do with the story... like if there is a conflict coming up or if you will introduce Kikyo or Kouga in the story. I can't wait!
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Title: aww man
Reviewed By: Kagome Suteki Higurashi [MediaMiner Member] On: July 22, 2006 05:20 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Aww come on why the short chappie oh well I can wait but please update soon
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