| "Let's get it on" Reviews/Comments [ 65 ] |
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Reviewed By: gretel_chan [MediaMiner Member] On: October 11, 2006 20:56 CDT
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I'm really enjoying this story. Your storytelling through dialogue is fantastic - It's something I struggle with, and it's refreshing to see it done well.
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Reviewed By: LilyMoonsAlias [MediaMiner Member] On: October 10, 2006 14:56 CDT
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"Milkbone moment", "Full scrotal contact", "gluey tart". God, I love you. I laughed so hard I was gasping. More! I need more!
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Reviewed By: RedQueen [MediaMiner Member] On: October 10, 2006 04:34 CDT
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oh yeah. 'give it up...let's fuck already.' real good come-on to use with a crazy, homicidal swordsman. i can see why yohji's so successful with the womenfolk. while they're gaping with incredulity, he divests them of their clothes. heehee! aya beats ken for the best lines in this chapter. i love that he knows the manliest tartans. though, i do love it that ken's wearing a tartan nightshirt in the first place. hell, this whole story is love.
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Reviewed By: Serena1985 [MediaMiner Member] On: October 09, 2006 02:36 CDT
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Damn he got 'Knocked the fuck out"! So is that Aya's way of saying ok lol. can't wait to read more and see if Yoji can tame the crazy red-head. Update soon pretty please!
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Reviewed By: belgianrabbit On: October 04, 2006 20:59 CDT
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That was supposed to be "great," not "gat," in that last review.
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Reviewed By: belgianrabbit On: October 04, 2006 20:58 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'd give it a 10 if you finally get Aja and Yoji fucking. The buildup in these chapters are gat. When they finally do it, be sure there's a bowl of cherries nearby so we can see if Yoji really can tie a stem with his tongue.
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Title: Ch. 2
Reviewed By: pyrzm [MediaMiner Member] On: September 25, 2006 15:59 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
"Hey, Ken," he whispered. "*What*?" Ken hissed back. "Do you think my outfit makes me look, you know -- cheap?" Yoji could feel Ken's incredulous stare piercing the darkness. "I don't know, Yoji," he whispered. "Do you think this warehouse makes my ass look big?" ROTFLMAO!!!!!! I love this story. The dialogue is excellent.
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Reviewed By: moimoi-chan too lazyt to sign in On: September 20, 2006 23:04 CDT
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yay you updated! now go update again... :)
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Reviewed By: deunank [MediaMiner Member] On: September 19, 2006 11:40 CDT
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I started making notes of the particularly funny bits, but then ended up copying the whole chapter. One example: "he's weird and ill-tempered." Love everyone! Ken's great, Yohji's cute, Aya's cute! Obviously I'm a bit giddy over this chapter.
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Reviewed By: RedQueen [MediaMiner Member] On: September 18, 2006 23:28 CDT
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hmm, a lot of American-type references. interferes a bit with the suspension of disbelief. but, i understand why they're there, and it's not problematic, really. ken has such great lines. and aya...he's so alluringly crack-headed. i love him in this story, and i find myself highly anticipating everything that comes out of his mouth. nuch love for this!
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Reviewed By: Blythe [MediaMiner Member] On: September 18, 2006 22:37 CDT
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I've never wanted to hug Ken before, but now, I really do! He has the BEST lines! Chapter three was wonderful and I am so looking forward to more. I like the little informative sound bytes that Aya's feeding Yohji before cutting him off again. Alas, doesn't he realize that will only feed the addiction? Can't wait to see what's next!!
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Reviewed By: glinwulf On: September 16, 2006 17:21 CDT
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You've got a great start--looking forward to more.
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Reviewed By: deunank [MediaMiner Member] On: September 14, 2006 07:55 CDT
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LOL! This is wonderful! I love the end of Chap. 2 - excellent snarkiness and great line from Ken. And navel gazing!!!! That was awesome.
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Reviewed By: Blythe [MediaMiner Member] On: September 11, 2006 15:35 CDT
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This thoroughly enojoyable thus far and certainly shows a lot of promise! Some of your expressions are hysterical! I'm really looking foward to seeing more of this!!
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Title: Let's get it on
Reviewed By: orlisbunny On: September 11, 2006 10:07 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
This was angsty but loads of fun! Humour when you least expect it! Angst! Action! Good stuff! Can't wait to see how the story unravels.
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