| "Let's get it on" Reviews/Comments [ 65 ] |
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Reviewed By: belgianrabbit On: October 04, 2006 20:58 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'd give it a 10 if you finally get Aja and Yoji fucking. The buildup in these chapters are gat. When they finally do it, be sure there's a bowl of cherries nearby so we can see if Yoji really can tie a stem with his tongue.
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Title: Ch. 2
Reviewed By: pyrzm [MediaMiner Member] On: September 25, 2006 15:59 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
"Hey, Ken," he whispered. "*What*?" Ken hissed back. "Do you think my outfit makes me look, you know -- cheap?" Yoji could feel Ken's incredulous stare piercing the darkness. "I don't know, Yoji," he whispered. "Do you think this warehouse makes my ass look big?" ROTFLMAO!!!!!! I love this story. The dialogue is excellent.
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Reviewed By: moimoi-chan too lazyt to sign in On: September 20, 2006 23:04 CDT
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yay you updated! now go update again... :)
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Reviewed By: deunank [MediaMiner Member] On: September 19, 2006 11:40 CDT
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I started making notes of the particularly funny bits, but then ended up copying the whole chapter. One example: "he's weird and ill-tempered." Love everyone! Ken's great, Yohji's cute, Aya's cute! Obviously I'm a bit giddy over this chapter.
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Reviewed By: RedQueen [MediaMiner Member] On: September 18, 2006 23:28 CDT
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hmm, a lot of American-type references. interferes a bit with the suspension of disbelief. but, i understand why they're there, and it's not problematic, really. ken has such great lines. and aya...he's so alluringly crack-headed. i love him in this story, and i find myself highly anticipating everything that comes out of his mouth. nuch love for this!
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Reviewed By: Blythe [MediaMiner Member] On: September 18, 2006 22:37 CDT
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I've never wanted to hug Ken before, but now, I really do! He has the BEST lines! Chapter three was wonderful and I am so looking forward to more. I like the little informative sound bytes that Aya's feeding Yohji before cutting him off again. Alas, doesn't he realize that will only feed the addiction? Can't wait to see what's next!!
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Reviewed By: glinwulf On: September 16, 2006 17:21 CDT
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You've got a great start--looking forward to more.
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Reviewed By: deunank [MediaMiner Member] On: September 14, 2006 07:55 CDT
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LOL! This is wonderful! I love the end of Chap. 2 - excellent snarkiness and great line from Ken. And navel gazing!!!! That was awesome.
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Reviewed By: Blythe [MediaMiner Member] On: September 11, 2006 15:35 CDT
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This thoroughly enojoyable thus far and certainly shows a lot of promise! Some of your expressions are hysterical! I'm really looking foward to seeing more of this!!
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Title: Let's get it on
Reviewed By: orlisbunny On: September 11, 2006 10:07 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
This was angsty but loads of fun! Humour when you least expect it! Angst! Action! Good stuff! Can't wait to see how the story unravels.
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Reviewed By: wedjateye On: September 10, 2006 21:13 CDT
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Very enjoyable - some wonderful lines. The Starbucks limbo, Ken's ass monkeys and "I'm no ballistics expert". Very funny. Yohji's internal voice is highly entertaining too. More would be good!
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Reviewed By: bewsbud [MediaMiner Member] On: September 10, 2006 12:25 CDT
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I adore the sense of humor you gave Ken (I don't think I ever want to be your opponent in a battle of wits *g*). Above all I appreciate your interpretation of Aya's character. It's refreshing to see a writer avoid the cold hearted, self-absorbed, socially challenged, 'fanfic-Aya' stereotype! Your charaterizations and fluid writing stlye have me really looking forward to reading more of your work.
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Reviewed By: RedQueen [MediaMiner Member] On: September 09, 2006 23:18 CDT
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ken keeps scene-stealing. it's awesome. and aya's views on limbo...priceless. in fact it's really really good from beginning to end. er, the end of chapter 2. i certainly hope that's not the end. i think fic pimpage is called for...
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Reviewed By: moimoi-chan [MediaMiner Member] On: September 06, 2006 16:10 CDT
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yohji and ken have some great lines together...actually Ken by himself is great "I'm no ballistic expert..." It's nice for once to not see a retarded Ken (I'm guilt of that) and this fic is just so appealing!
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Reviewed By: Omni-sama [MediaMiner Member] On: September 06, 2006 15:06 CDT
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Oh, I'm liking this. I'm liking this very much. Also, your Ken is hilarious. I love it!
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