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| "Redemption" Reviews/Comments [ 90 ] | | Pages (6): [ « ‹ 1 2 3 4 5 6 › » ] | Reviewed By: aknkkskd [MediaMiner Member] On: June 02, 2007 18:57 CDT
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i can't believe you did that to Bakura i would go crazy if i had to live with Seto no matter how cute he is. keep it up
| Reviewed By: Paniwi [MediaMiner Member] On: June 02, 2007 07:26 CDT
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whoo, some chapter. The first part was HOT, very, very...very HOT. The way you ended it was beyond hilarious, Seto really has an innate ability to irritate and hurt Bakura, doesn't he? Wingless freak, it says something about how you're portraying Seto's character that he'd stoop so low in his annoyance. I am quite curious as to how Seto will fare on earth, as well as Marik's move. *snigger* pissed of Marik for the win. Bakura really should stop being so pissed at him *slaps him* he's on your side, you idiot! Also I loved the banter between Bakura and Seto, Heh, Seto is going to give Marik a run for his money in that field. Can't wait for more!
| Reviewed By: sglily [MediaMiner Member] On: June 02, 2007 00:04 CDT
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OK. Whew. First off, let's just say that I actually knew where Seto was headed! But, from there, I was seriously wondering where you were headed with the story, my dear! I have to say that I loved Bakura's reflections on his time spent with Ryou. And that how even after a short time being around Ryou, Bakura's mind is starting to wander into territory beyond the innocent peck on the cheek. Somehow I don't think he is the only one "going there" and exploring what it would be like to be more intimate with the other! Bakura's mindless obscenity laced rants are hysterical! OK... the shower scene... good Lord! That water was sure hot, hot, hot! Among other things, I should add! Yeah, Ryou was a bit out of character - going from a blushing, teasing, sort of fumbling with style phase into a rather demanding whore minus a whip! Now, don't get me wrong, a whorish Ryou who can be dominating can be quite delicious... as Bakura seemed to get off on, too! It just cracked me up after the whole "encounter" was rudely interrupted and revealed for what it was. There were no pink elephants to be found that time, eh Bakura? God Bless Bakura's very vivid imagination! But damn Seto's inopportune banging! Seto is a cold fish, isn't he? And, he has a hell of a lot of nerve running to Bakura and expecting information, help, or anything for that matter from the angel he had personally de-winged. The only thing that made Seto's visit worthwhile was for Bakura to receive further conformation that God still watches over him and cares. I loved Marik's reaction to the news of Seto's arrival on Earth. There will be Hell to pay... yes, I do believe so! Great chapter!
| Reviewed By: Aislynn Goldleaf [MediaMiner Member] On: May 31, 2007 15:13 CDT
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It was good to see Ryou 'let his hair down' so to speak. And yes, it was overdue. I'm glad he's taking Bakura's advice to 'let his friends stew for awhile', but I think, with everything that happened on their second date... I think Ryou's forgotten all about the massive round of apple-o-gee's coming up!
| Reviewed By: Kajunkai On: May 30, 2007 15:03 CDT
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Wow, I've absolutly fallen in love with this story. I love how you've taken the whole angel/demon cliche and reinvented it (and done a good job of it too). The friendship dynamics are great in this fic and I can't wait to read more yami/hikari interactions. Eagerly awaiting more!
| Reviewed By: aknkkskd [MediaMiner Member] On: May 28, 2007 22:19 CDT
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it was so fluffy very cute can't wait for the next chapter
| Reviewed By: sglily [MediaMiner Member] On: May 27, 2007 11:43 CDT
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Oooooh... an assertive Ryou is like... an aggressive Ryou... simply to die for! And, Ryou let it be known to his friends that he was not happy with their decision to coddle him... how dare they have him followed on his date with Bakura! You know, I really didn't want to feel sorry for the trio of interlopers but the way you wrote it, I couldn't help but to wince. Wow. Ryou was pissed! They knew they had overstepped their bounds after Ryou was done with them. You go, RYOU! I loved the chance encounter with Ryou and Bakura. Very interesting that they tend to meet after Ryou has been upset and or extremely irritated/agitated. Isn't Ryou supposed to be the calming influence to Bakura? ; ) It's a little twist that, intentional or not, really works. The impromptu date was perfect. The conversation was light when it needed to be. Bakura remained quiet to let Ryou vent. I really liked the fact that Bakura "voiced" the opinion that he had never thought of Ryou as weak. And the teasing sexual banter was hilarious! That kinda caught Bakura off guard, didn't it? A teetering, on edge Bakura is just as yummy as an aggressive Ryou! The park scene was lovely. It's all those tender moments that make the bond between the two characters stronger and will ulitmately make any more intimate happenings all the more meaningful. I loved the fact that it was Ryou who kissed Bakura first. Romance... it's such a beautiful thing... Ryou stalking Bakura... now, that's funny! Now we need to be privy to The Phone Call... I think this was my favorite chapter thus far... Nicely done!
| Reviewed By: Black Angel Reaper [MediaMiner Member] On: May 27, 2007 09:54 CDT
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=^.^= I might be kinda weird, but seeing Ryou mad was really exciting and cool. And all the fluffy moments were awesome as well. Overall, a very good chapter! XD I loved Bakura's hentai mind...
| Reviewed By: Paniwi [MediaMiner Member] On: May 26, 2007 09:35 CDT
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pink elephants...thanks a lot, I have work tonight, people are going to ask me why I wear such a stupid grin on my face. I loved it! You expressed Ryou's anger towards his friends well, somehow I got the feeling Joey's 'slip-up' wasn't completely accidental, but that might be me. You dealt with that scene quite well, methinks. And of course, who else but Bakura would he run into. It was nice of Bakura to take him to the sushi-shop and let Ryou spill his beans. It shows that Ryou does trust Bakura and so far has told a lot about himself. Trouble looming on the horizon, I wonder how you plan on letting Ryou in on Bakura's past and...well, race, it screams angst. And hey...oh, pink elephants. What can I say, priceless, perfect...had me laughing like a moron. It was perfect! Ahem, yes, back now. Also, the walking back to the park was nice. And Ryou initiating the kiss as they stood so nicely close, it was a very good moment. Very sweet and very well written. Eagerly awaiting more as always.
| Reviewed By: sglily [MediaMiner Member] On: May 23, 2007 22:32 CDT
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Malik cracks me up! He's such a busybody! And even though I am not a big fan of Yugi in general, I find that I like yours. He seems, along with Ryou, to be the calming influence (aka the voice of reason!) in the group especially over Malik's more... boisterous and flamboyant personality. The conversation involving Marik, Yami, and Akeifa was filled with little tidbits of information. Very well done. And then Ryou must spill about his date! The biggest point made here through all the wonderful bantering and dialogue was that the group can see that Ryou is finally acting happy and content with himself - and he's more confident. Marik's little talk with Bakura was incredible. Hell, I kept forgetting that Marik was supposed to be "The" devil! It seems that Bakura has been given the green light, so to speak, to proceed with pursuing Ryou... or... more accurately, allowing Ryou to pursue him! I'm glad that you have explained that the love that Bakura and Akeifa had was an angelic love and different from the range of emotional and physical aspects of human love. The conflict that Bakura was going through in this chapter was expressed superbly. It was evident that he held inside a tremendous amount of guilt for having feelings for Ryou. And, on a lighter note... do I intimidate? ; ) You know, if you stay true to your characters, let them talk to you and through you, those kinds of scenes will be perfect! I really look forward to Ryou contacting Bakura a second time for another date!
| Reviewed By: aknkkskd [MediaMiner Member] On: May 20, 2007 19:52 CDT
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Bakura cried that is so cool you made evil mean Bakura cry and made it not take away form his evil mean image so cool
| Reviewed By: paniwi (nli) On: May 20, 2007 06:30 CDT
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oooh, what a nice chapter. I liked the part where Ryou and his friends were talking. Ryou getting distracted at the phone was very funny. And, phew, Malik really is pushy, isn't he? he needs someone special to mellow him a bit. I'm beginning to create a really big soft spot for Joey, he's so sweet! Also, the talk in hell was fun, Ah, joey and Akeifa...very two favorite side-characters. Also...of course, the heart to heart. I loved how you pulled it off, I wonder if Marik will be able to wind up Bakura to the extent he did before. There's more understanding between them now. I liked seeing Marik's more serious side and I also liked that you made the point that God's punishment still hurts all of the fallen deep inside. Well, here's my rambly two cents again. Happy writing!
| Reviewed By: aknkkskd [MediaMiner Member] On: May 17, 2007 21:41 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i love your fic its great. the plot line is so fun, with just the right amount of seriousness. i also like your view on heaven and hell, rottingt in hell for eternity doesn't seem very nice. bye
| Reviewed By: sglily [MediaMiner Member] On: May 13, 2007 20:46 CDT
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Wow. Ryou has some mighty pushy friends - eh, but their hearts are in the right place! However, stalking Ryou while the poor guy is on a date? That's sort of low! And Malik had the balls to make Yugi do basically his dirty work? Well, it would seem that Marik and Malik are truly a match from hell when it comes to playing "cupid"! Interesting that Ryou's date started off with a confrontation with the ex. Duke just doesn't comprehend the word "no", does he? I'm sure that he doesn't hear that word often in reference to himself or his wants. I'm glad that you allowed Ryou to fight his own battle there. Besides, we all know that the fiestier side of Ryou is a major turn-on to Bakura! The date was sweet... short and sweet. Lots of "getting to know you" type chatting. I think it was only natural that Ryou would invite Bakura into his apartment after their date. Once again, I was pleasantly surprised when Bakura turned the offer down gently enough and then left the ball in Ryou's court again - that Ryou remains the one pursuing Bakura - to arrange for another date. Very nicely done! Oh, and nice pics! I especially liked the Bakura/Ryou one...
| Reviewed By: paniwi (NLI) On: May 12, 2007 08:27 CDT
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*squeels* oh such a sweet chapter! The part with the clothing was fun, Malik's comments were just so hilarious. It struck me as important that Malik sent out Yugi to watch the couple, and Marik sent out Yami. There's a line to this, even though it just had to go this way. Of course there was the little run-in with Duke, displaying Ryou's stronger side, which Bakura apparently liked and of course...the date. It was cute, their conversation was immediately rather deep, Ryou saw through Bakura well, perhaps better then the other way around, aura's or not. The little conversation between Yugi and Yami was amusing, even though I sometimes find your angels/fallen a little...stuck up. Oh well, they're important so they have earned that right, I suppose. Mmh, but now trouble seems to be rising as someone will be holding tags on our dear adversary...and Seto at that. This just begs for trouble! Now all I'm wondering about is the 'shimmering almost-ascended soul' will she play a role, or was that just to show how things work down there?
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