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"Stream of Consciousness: A LiveJournal Collection" Reviews/Comments [ 95 ]
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 Reviewed By: SplendentGoddess [MediaMiner Member]  On: October 29, 2009 20:32 EDT
Rating(s):
Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
I really liked "A Lesson in Appearances". I found it 100% canon, because Inuyasha would know how to sip tea properly, and without breaking the stupid china. His mother had been a Hime, after all. Just because he didn't give a rat's ass most of the time didn't mean he had forgotten his mother's lessons. Kagome's actions were also spot-on, I'd say, as well as the nervous husband and wife. We don't have to know them to know how just about anybody would react to the sight of Inuyasha handling their finest china. Well done!
 Reviewed By: SplendentGoddess [MediaMiner Member]  On: October 29, 2009 19:56 EDT
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Overall Rating: 10 of 10
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People were offended by "To Hoodwink a Homosexual"? Why? I found it kind of funny, in a crack-fic sort of way. You didn't make Jakotsu any more flamboyant than Takahashi did. I could see some people not sharing in your sense of humor and finding the drabble stupid or pointless, but offensive? Pfft. Like I said, I found it kind of funny; I wasn't expecting that twist at the end there. Makes me want to rent Silence of the Lambs, 'cause I'm having a serious 'WTF?' moment, in an amused sort of way.
 Reviewed By: FrameofMind [MediaMiner Member]  On: October 26, 2009 01:57 EDT
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Congratulations! Your story "A Final Act of Healing" has been nominated by the Inuyasha FanGuild for Best Lemon for the Third Quarter of 2009. If you would like to track the progress of your story through the voting process, or simply find out more about the IYFG and perhaps join yourself, you can find everything you need to know on our website: www.inuyashafanguild.com (Inuyasha Fan Guild dot com) If you have any other questions, don't hesitate to contact our moderators at IYFGModerator@gmail.com (IYFG Moderator at g mail dot com). Congratulations again! -- IYFG Beta Group
 Reviewed By: Eluwei [MediaMiner Member]  On: October 13, 2009 20:49 EDT
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Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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For happier this way. You are evil. It was wonderfully funny. Poor Sess.
 Reviewed By: SplendentGoddess [MediaMiner Member]  On: October 13, 2009 11:59 EDT
Rating(s):
Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10
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I really liked "Remorse", it brought a more serious, more "real people" perspective to what was originally more or less just a backdrop for a porno. It's clear to me that even though he went a little overboard and caused his wife actual pain, it was just very rough spanking and fucking...not like he had literally turned into a wife-beater and was punching or kicking her. It was also instantly clear, even to his wife, how tremendously he regretted his actions, and I think it was very valiant of her to forgive him. That's not to say that he didn't deserve some type of punishment, and I love what you had her do for her revenge. She basically forgave him completely for her pain, and got him back for leaving her unsatisfied in the sex department. I'm sure she'll untie him...eventually...but one must make sure he has truly learned his lesson. After all, just because she forgave him this once doesn't mean she would necessarily forgive him again and again.
 Reviewed By: Harmony Sunsinger [MediaMiner Member]  On: October 07, 2009 01:03 EDT
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ROFLMAO!! And that didn't win at least a CUDDLE from inucomedyclub?? *snort* That director should talk to some of US; WE have no problem getting these horny IY characters to start humping each other. However, sometimes we can't make them stop, lol...
 Reviewed By: SplendentGoddess [MediaMiner Member]  On: October 06, 2009 11:55 EDT
Rating(s):
Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10
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"A Quiet Moment" is really nice; short and sweet, which I think is perfect in this instance. I could say Inuyasha's lucky Kagome didn't fly off the handle at his remark about having her find somebody else to rub her back, but I'm sure he never would've joked like that in the first place unless he knew she could take his humor in stride, which she did, brilliantly. I like pregnant Kagomes that are not too overly crazy-emotional, although they have their time and place, too, if we wanted to torture the poor hanyou for some reason or another. But generally speaking, I prefer more understanding Kagomes, like yours in this piece. Nicely done. As for "Buzzin' at the Cast Party", it seems only fitting to do a female version of chapter 16, so I'd say it had its place in this collection. I must also say, even with as much music as I listen to, and the number of 'names' I've heard 'it' referred to over the years, I have never…ever…heard the term "washing machine" LOL. And this might sound a bit scary, but part of me actually agrees with Kikyou!
 Reviewed By: SplendentGoddess [MediaMiner Member]  On: October 06, 2009 11:43 EDT
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Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10
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LOL, oh bloody hell, what a way to start the morning. "Quest for Ratings" is very unique. I've read several different spoofs over the years in which the characters know they're characters, including everything from them appearing on talk-shows, to arguing with the author of their particular fanfiction like how any number of traditional cartoon characters can sometimes interact with an overgrown, pencil wielding hand, but even though this one had some elements of the later near the end there, I really don't think I've ever read a story before in which it was a bombshell to the characters to discover what they truly were. It had a sort of "Truman Show" quality to it, but yet at the same time, that stunt with the bathing suits revealed that not only were their characters fictional, but they themselves were. Also loved that nod to Star Trek you tossed in there, which provides a segue for the best comparison I can come up with for your story. It reminds me of any number of instances in Star Trek: The Next Generation, in which a Holodeck character was made aware of what it truly was. Let us hope Kagome does not turn into another Professor Moriarty in her quest for power over Rumiko Takahashi. LOL. Now I'm off to read chapter 22 and 23…
 Reviewed By: Ivellios [MediaMiner Member]  On: October 06, 2009 08:33 EDT
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Overall Rating: 10 of 10
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So what made you think of the cast party drabble? I like the names they gave to their parts, especially Yura's because Queen is awesome!
 Reviewed By: youkaineko [MediaMiner Member]  On: October 01, 2009 23:09 EDT
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In the motion picture industry they have a way of marketing their upcoming movie releases known as teaser. A teaser is the 30 second promo designed to whet the apatite. It is often a snippet from the single scene that is edited down to be the most concentrated concise version of a larger scene that in its self is part of a much larger story. "Leveling the Playing Field" feels like a teaser. So my only question is when does the movie hit theaters?
 Reviewed By: SplendentGoddess [MediaMiner Member]  On: October 01, 2009 19:40 EDT
Rating(s):
Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
Oh goodie, three more chapters! I really liked "Leveling the Playing Field"…sneaky ol' Kaede! That's what Inuyasha gets for asking her to make such a thing, and I'm sure the predicament will be beneficial to both of them in the end. I would love to know how they landed after Kagome osuwari'd the both of them. As for "A Small Victory", yay! Good old-fashioned smut! You're right, it would work just fine as an original piece, but I'm sure everyone enjoyed envisioning their favorite couple. I know I did. And "Somber Tears" is so touching, in a really heart wrenching kind of way. I'm assuming Kagome probably only has the flu, but "only" can't really be taken too lightly back in a time period where the flu was often deadly. Hopefully she's sporting a more advanced immune system from starting out her life in the 20th century. She'll rise above this, even if it is driven from her concern for Inuyasha's feelings, rather than her own well-being.
 Reviewed By: Inumimi [MediaMiner Member]  On: September 24, 2009 18:27 EDT
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I love all of the stories (Mr. Winkie is too funny), but I particularly liked Final Act of Healing and a Solemn Memory. Really beautifully written.
 Reviewed By: Harmony Sunsinger [MediaMiner Member]  On: September 23, 2009 18:41 EDT
Rating(s):
Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
How on Earth could the one from FirstTweak with the drums not won anything?!? Man, that was a very original and brilliant take on the theme! I'd have given it first!
 Reviewed By: SplendentGoddess [MediaMiner Member]  On: September 23, 2009 12:05 EDT
Rating(s):
Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
LOL, "Naming Mr. Winkie" was definitely good for a chuckle. I'm scratching my head as to how such a conversation could have come about, but at least Inuyasha's reaction to Kouga's choice was pretty in-character. Also, considering he had just up and ran into Kagome's room naked that one time, he probably wouldn't be too adverse to dropping his drawers, especially if he knew he could back up his claim, LOL. "Kagome promptly fainted"...Oh bloody hell, hehehe. What was he, like 7" with wrinkles? He would clearly be flaccid in this particular situation, but you gotta love those blessed few who are both a shower and a grower. As for "A Solemn Memory"...I'm assuming because nobody else is around that this takes place near the beginning of their journey, so it's still just the two of them at this point? I think this piece is beautifully written, and really makes you think about the cruelties of that time period that I'm sad to say you are definitely not exaggerating. It's horrible what happened to that infant, but I love Inuyasha's outlook at the end, how he got Kagome to see that she was doing the exact same thing she had just praised him for, and how he too will not die alone. Well done!
 Title: Chapters 13, 14 & 15
Reviewed By: SplendentGoddess [MediaMiner Member]  On: September 19, 2009 00:47 EDT
Rating(s):
Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
Me again... Okay, "Seeing Double" was absolutely perfect. It was funny, romantic, and had a touch of naughtiness. Little off-canon details (such as Sango and Miroku's wedding prior to the defeat of Naraku) don't bother me in the least. I think Kagome's character was dead-on in this piece based on how she would react were Inuyasha ever to actually get that drunk, and Inuyasha's character while being that drunk was pretty dead-on, too. Thanks to the manga we do know that he 1.) claims that he is not drunk when he is, and 2.) experiences double vision while he's 'not' drunk. Like I said, perfect, although...it does make me want see a "morning after" sequel. Now, "H.I.G.H." was slightly less realistic, but are slapsticks ever really all that realistic? Funny is as funny does, and I still can't get over your description of the "Bugs Bunny-esque" smooch Inuyasha laid on Kagome, LOL. As for "A Final Act of Healing", once again you are incorporating a slightly off-canon background, since Kohaku did not remain in Kaede's village after the mission, and your wordage can also be taken to suggest that he had only met Rin in the village and had not already known her from before while traveling with Sesshoumaru. Nevertheless, especially for your first attempt at a non-Inu/Kag lemon, I think you did a good job with this one. It focuses more on his emotional healing than it does the lemon itself, but I think it should in this instance. Unconventional lemons are hard enough to write on their own, and once you throw in some actual depth so that it's no longer just for the smut factor, it's very easy to find yourself in uncharted waters, very quickly. This one-shot did not read as though you were uncomfortable with the pairing while writing it. In many ways, being a writer is like being an actor. Regardless of how you really feel, the bottom line quickly becomes "How will the readers feel?" I feel happy for Kohaku, so job well done.
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