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| "Stream of Consciousness: A LiveJournal Collection" Reviews/Comments [ 95 ] | | Pages (7): [ « ‹ 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 ] | Reviewed By: Harmony Sunsinger [MediaMiner Member] On: October 07, 2009 01:03 EDT
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ROFLMAO!! And that didn't win at least a CUDDLE from inucomedyclub?? *snort* That director should talk to some of US; WE have no problem getting these horny IY characters to start humping each other. However, sometimes we can't make them stop, lol...
| Reviewed By: SplendentGoddess [MediaMiner Member] On: October 06, 2009 11:55 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
"A Quiet Moment" is really nice; short and sweet, which I think is perfect in this instance. I could say Inuyasha's lucky Kagome didn't fly off the handle at his remark about having her find somebody else to rub her back, but I'm sure he never would've joked like that in the first place unless he knew she could take his humor in stride, which she did, brilliantly. I like pregnant Kagomes that are not too overly crazy-emotional, although they have their time and place, too, if we wanted to torture the poor hanyou for some reason or another. But generally speaking, I prefer more understanding Kagomes, like yours in this piece. Nicely done. As for "Buzzin' at the Cast Party", it seems only fitting to do a female version of chapter 16, so I'd say it had its place in this collection. I must also say, even with as much music as I listen to, and the number of 'names' I've heard 'it' referred to over the years, I have never…ever…heard the term "washing machine" LOL. And this might sound a bit scary, but part of me actually agrees with Kikyou!
| Reviewed By: SplendentGoddess [MediaMiner Member] On: October 06, 2009 11:43 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
LOL, oh bloody hell, what a way to start the morning. "Quest for Ratings" is very unique. I've read several different spoofs over the years in which the characters know they're characters, including everything from them appearing on talk-shows, to arguing with the author of their particular fanfiction like how any number of traditional cartoon characters can sometimes interact with an overgrown, pencil wielding hand, but even though this one had some elements of the later near the end there, I really don't think I've ever read a story before in which it was a bombshell to the characters to discover what they truly were. It had a sort of "Truman Show" quality to it, but yet at the same time, that stunt with the bathing suits revealed that not only were their characters fictional, but they themselves were. Also loved that nod to Star Trek you tossed in there, which provides a segue for the best comparison I can come up with for your story. It reminds me of any number of instances in Star Trek: The Next Generation, in which a Holodeck character was made aware of what it truly was. Let us hope Kagome does not turn into another Professor Moriarty in her quest for power over Rumiko Takahashi. LOL. Now I'm off to read chapter 22 and 23…
| Reviewed By: Ivellios [MediaMiner Member] On: October 06, 2009 08:33 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
So what made you think of the cast party drabble? I like the names they gave to their parts, especially Yura's because Queen is awesome!
| Reviewed By: youkaineko [MediaMiner Member] On: October 01, 2009 23:09 EDT
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In the motion picture industry they have a way of marketing their upcoming movie releases known as teaser. A teaser is the 30 second promo designed to whet the apatite. It is often a snippet from the single scene that is edited down to be the most concentrated concise version of a larger scene that in its self is part of a much larger story. "Leveling the Playing Field" feels like a teaser. So my only question is when does the movie hit theaters?
| Reviewed By: SplendentGoddess [MediaMiner Member] On: October 01, 2009 19:40 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oh goodie, three more chapters! I really liked "Leveling the Playing Field"…sneaky ol' Kaede! That's what Inuyasha gets for asking her to make such a thing, and I'm sure the predicament will be beneficial to both of them in the end. I would love to know how they landed after Kagome osuwari'd the both of them. As for "A Small Victory", yay! Good old-fashioned smut! You're right, it would work just fine as an original piece, but I'm sure everyone enjoyed envisioning their favorite couple. I know I did. And "Somber Tears" is so touching, in a really heart wrenching kind of way. I'm assuming Kagome probably only has the flu, but "only" can't really be taken too lightly back in a time period where the flu was often deadly. Hopefully she's sporting a more advanced immune system from starting out her life in the 20th century. She'll rise above this, even if it is driven from her concern for Inuyasha's feelings, rather than her own well-being.
| Reviewed By: Inumimi [MediaMiner Member] On: September 24, 2009 18:27 EDT
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I love all of the stories (Mr. Winkie is too funny), but I particularly liked Final Act of Healing and a Solemn Memory. Really beautifully written.
| Reviewed By: Harmony Sunsinger [MediaMiner Member] On: September 23, 2009 18:41 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
How on Earth could the one from FirstTweak with the drums not won anything?!? Man, that was a very original and brilliant take on the theme! I'd have given it first!
| Reviewed By: SplendentGoddess [MediaMiner Member] On: September 23, 2009 12:05 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
LOL, "Naming Mr. Winkie" was definitely good for a chuckle. I'm scratching my head as to how such a conversation could have come about, but at least Inuyasha's reaction to Kouga's choice was pretty in-character. Also, considering he had just up and ran into Kagome's room naked that one time, he probably wouldn't be too adverse to dropping his drawers, especially if he knew he could back up his claim, LOL. "Kagome promptly fainted"...Oh bloody hell, hehehe. What was he, like 7" with wrinkles? He would clearly be flaccid in this particular situation, but you gotta love those blessed few who are both a shower and a grower. As for "A Solemn Memory"...I'm assuming because nobody else is around that this takes place near the beginning of their journey, so it's still just the two of them at this point? I think this piece is beautifully written, and really makes you think about the cruelties of that time period that I'm sad to say you are definitely not exaggerating. It's horrible what happened to that infant, but I love Inuyasha's outlook at the end, how he got Kagome to see that she was doing the exact same thing she had just praised him for, and how he too will not die alone. Well done!
| Title: Chapters 13, 14 & 15
Reviewed By: SplendentGoddess [MediaMiner Member] On: September 19, 2009 00:47 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Me again... Okay, "Seeing Double" was absolutely perfect. It was funny, romantic, and had a touch of naughtiness. Little off-canon details (such as Sango and Miroku's wedding prior to the defeat of Naraku) don't bother me in the least. I think Kagome's character was dead-on in this piece based on how she would react were Inuyasha ever to actually get that drunk, and Inuyasha's character while being that drunk was pretty dead-on, too. Thanks to the manga we do know that he 1.) claims that he is not drunk when he is, and 2.) experiences double vision while he's 'not' drunk. Like I said, perfect, although...it does make me want see a "morning after" sequel. Now, "H.I.G.H." was slightly less realistic, but are slapsticks ever really all that realistic? Funny is as funny does, and I still can't get over your description of the "Bugs Bunny-esque" smooch Inuyasha laid on Kagome, LOL. As for "A Final Act of Healing", once again you are incorporating a slightly off-canon background, since Kohaku did not remain in Kaede's village after the mission, and your wordage can also be taken to suggest that he had only met Rin in the village and had not already known her from before while traveling with Sesshoumaru. Nevertheless, especially for your first attempt at a non-Inu/Kag lemon, I think you did a good job with this one. It focuses more on his emotional healing than it does the lemon itself, but I think it should in this instance. Unconventional lemons are hard enough to write on their own, and once you throw in some actual depth so that it's no longer just for the smut factor, it's very easy to find yourself in uncharted waters, very quickly. This one-shot did not read as though you were uncomfortable with the pairing while writing it. In many ways, being a writer is like being an actor. Regardless of how you really feel, the bottom line quickly becomes "How will the readers feel?" I feel happy for Kohaku, so job well done.
| Title: An unfortunate assignment
Reviewed By: CatLover260 [MediaMiner Member] On: September 15, 2009 01:30 EDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
As soon as I read the assignment I knew Miroku would end up trying to grope Shippo. I loved that Shippo was getting teased about the fundoshi though, that is pure hilarity. I expect that he should get points deducted for hitting the "subject" with a bucket though. He should get scolded for not coming up with a more original idea. Keep them coming.
| Title: The Way to a girl's heart
Reviewed By: CatLover260 [MediaMiner Member] On: September 15, 2009 01:26 EDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I am with you on that ice cream cake. Your flavors are much better then Hojo's. Though I can see Inuyasha not eating cake for a long time because he is wary of what the flavor might be. It was a funny piece though. I do also foresee another broken date in Hojo's future.
| Reviewed By: SplendentGoddess [MediaMiner Member] On: September 11, 2009 01:30 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Jeeze, am I gonna be the only one reviewing this collection? What's the matter with everyone else? Anyway, on "The Way to a Girl's Heart", ha! That's what he gets for just up and eating her cake like that. One could wonder at the trouble that would ensue if Inuyasha had taken it upon himself to eat something of Mrs. Higurashi's, instead. Although, if we read between the lines, I'm sure Inuyasha could smell both Hojo and Kagome on the cake and had realized it was a gift to her from the 'weak human', which was probably the real reason why he was seemingly so thoughtless in the first place. As for "An Unfortunate Assignment", I love how Miroku tried to twist it all to be poor Shippou's fault, just because he hadn't been forewarned. What's Miroku doing still groping other young ladies now that he's a married man, anyway? Or does this take place in limbo somewhere between chapters 506 and 558? All you said for the setting was that it's set after 506, so I was just wondering how far after. No girls around tended to suggest, at least for me, that it's later when Miroku and Inuyasha are out on assignment somewhere, and Shippou just happened to be tagging along. Either way, great work on the last two installments. Keep 'em coming!
| Title: Sunrise...
Reviewed By: SplendentGoddess [MediaMiner Member] On: September 03, 2009 11:49 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
After reviewing all of your original postings, I can't not comment on the new addition. I can totally see this actually happening, and in some small way it's sad, to know he had to become so tough and independent from such a young age, but considering the hand he was dealt, I applaud his demeanor in this fic. Smooth confidence, knowing how much more powerful he is than the puny, honorless humans that would rather slay a child than offer him something to eat. And look, he didn't kill anyone, just punched the one guy out real hard. Probably broke his jaw, but otherwise I'm sure he'll be fine. Even as a ten-year-old boy, Inuyasha truly was the better man.
| Title: Very well done...
Reviewed By: SplendentGoddess [MediaMiner Member] On: September 02, 2009 02:16 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
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Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
They were all very good, so I've decided to leave a comment encompassing all of them. I love how in "The Other Side" the dimensional portal gets explained away without explanation. Oh, there's a dimensional portal, oh okay, it all makes sense now, LOL. I also loved what Sango pulled at the end there, Miroku deserves to stew over that one for a bit, though I hope she doesn't make the poor guy suffer too long. I think "Making Up" came out beautifully, even if the whole thing wasn't as funny as you were originally going for. It was still a nice 'how d'you do' for all the Inu/Sess fics out there. I'm not usually into the 'talk show' themed crack-fic idea, but "The Jakotsu Show" was funny in its own right. I really loved the two different Kagome introspectives in both "My Little Bubble" and "Am I Tarnished?", though if I had to pick a favorite between the two it would be the latter, and not just for the smut factor, but basically because it's sort of like the happy(er) sequel to chapter four. And speaking of sequels, I want to see what happens next in "Evil Has No Age Requirement", that one was pure genius. I totally empathize with Inuyasha in "My Empty Head" because that's exactly how my mind works whenever I want to stop thinking about something. Was it intentional that your last line in that chapter matched the next chapter title? Either way, "Happier This Way" clearly had nothing to do with the preceding chapter, and I find myself wondering how on Earth Rin got a hold of the sacred jewel, and why it was just lying there in the first place. I also found it ridiculously amusing that she basically turned into Elmyra Duff. I hope some other readers out there are also familiar with Tiny Toon Adventures and will get the same visual I did. Poor Jaken better hope he never does change back, or it'll be somebody else's slow and gruesome death that Sesshoumaru will start plotting. Last but not least, "Selfishness" *sings* "And I will do anything for love...but I won't do that!" I know some people are having fun with that challenge and are changing things up a bit, but I loved how your last chapter of this collection (for now) stayed loyal to the original feelings of the song. He will do anything for Kagome, except let her memory go. I'm glad to know that twenty-five moons from when this chapter takes place his waiting by the well will finally be over. All in all, very well done. I look forward to future additions to this collection.
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