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| "Entrapment: A 21st Century Adventure" Reviews/Comments [ 85 ] | | Pages (6): [ « ‹ 1 2 3 4 5 6 › » ] | Reviewed By: renniemama [MediaMiner Member] On: July 12, 2011 13:51 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'm loving this, I read up to the July 6 post in one day and I can't wait for more. I think your effort for accuracy is awe inspiring, and i can see your dedication. I'm glad our heroes are free and I want to know what they do next! | Reviewed By: ToryTory On: July 06, 2011 21:26 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Still loving this story! Wonderful chapter! | Reviewed By: Cricket42(not signed in) On: July 06, 2011 18:28 PDT
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Thanks for the update and good luck on the bar!!!!!~Cricket42 | Reviewed By: xFinalActsGirlx On: July 06, 2011 17:04 PDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Really loved this chapter. I absolutely hated the suspense of it though, where Inuyasha and Kagome were just talking, I was just like WHAT ARE YOU DOING GET OUT OF THERE BEFORE THEY CATCH YOU AGAIN! Don't get me wrong the moment was cute and much needed I was just really worried for them. :)Thanks for the update and good luck with that exam! | Reviewed By: SplendentGoddess [MediaMiner Member] On: July 06, 2011 16:11 PDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
No bad cliff hangers at all, that was an awesome place to pause the story if it's going to be on hold for a little bit while 'real life' gets a turn. I'm so relieved that all went so smoothly! Kagome was smart to risk hitchhiking, because wandering through the side roads forever on foot would have surely gotten her captured again, or if not, then at least possibly lost and half frozen and starved come night fall. Sensing Inuyasha was then by far the smartest thing she did, even though her original plan to go to the mall was definitely also wise, but yeah, why wait? Realizing she could feel Inuyasha's direction, I would have gone straight to him if I were her, too, and that was just pure luck and genius that she ended up finding that open door. And here she'd thought her luck had run out when that goon had spotted her! All Inuyasha needed was to know that she was out and (relatively) safe at his location to stage his own breakout, and I'm glad Tetsusaiga was right there, and the jewel shards. I hadn't forgotten that they were going to steal the shards, but I'd thought it was going to be another plot twist, like they could get back to her house only then to discover the shards were missing and have to go back out and face their enemies to find them, but of course we do still have the worry that Kagome's family might not be okay since somebody had obviously broken in. Still, I agree with the logic that one shouldn't needlessly cause a crime scene, so most likely her family is unharmed, and probably even unaware there was a break in if the guy knew what he was doing, but Kagome was very wise to not call them right away, the phone very well might be bugged. Plus Inuyasha's got to get himself a new set of clothes, pronto. They just need to sleep it off for a night deep in the woods and gather their thoughts, then that way you can also gather your thoughts, LOL. But yeah, instead of just being weird, now he'll be recognized as the Crimson Cat, so probably they should sneak to the mall, then as much as Inuyasha will hate it he'll have to stay in the shadows within 'sensing' range of Kagome, so she can quickly buy him or maybe both of them a change of outfit, and a bag to put their other clothes in. This story is definitely not over yet, so even if it takes you longer than normal, I'm certainly looking forward to seeing what you think of next, and what your ideas are for how to end this bad boy. Oh, and I love that little scene with Sango at the beginning, too; it's nice to remember them and realize that they are obviously troubled by Kagome and Inuyasha's disappearance, as well. Good job! And congrats on the nom! Totally deserve it! | Reviewed By: Miss_Marilyn69 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 06, 2011 14:38 PDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Man oh man what a fun story, I'm so happy they're safe. So I'll wait for the real world to premit your muses to have free time again without complaining. Until next time great story!! | Title: Congrats!
Reviewed By: jaimed1968 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 19, 2011 10:43 PDT
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This piece has been nominated at the Feudal Association! Founded in 2005 by author/artist, Dark Avenger, the Feudal Association consists of writers, artists, and enthusiasts of the InuYasha fandom. But aside from that, we are also proud to say that we are an awards guild that recognizes fan-fiction and artwork. Several times a year we nominate, vote, and hand out honors to some of the best creations in the fandom. Our official website can be found here: http://feudal-pulpfiction.net/feudal/ The current nominations pages are here: http://feudal-pulpfiction.net/feudal/nominations/sample-page/ Check them out to see what you were nominated for! Our Yahoo Group, where the nominations and voting occurs, can be found here: http://groups.yahoo.com/group/FeudalAssociation/ **Please note that FA membership is closed during voting. Congratulations and feel free to join and/or help us spread the word about our group! ~ The Feudal Association **Please Note: You may receive this notice more than once if you've been nominated for several awards. They will appear as reviews on your nominated works. | Reviewed By: xxxshikonxxx [MediaMiner Member] On: June 14, 2011 22:22 PDT
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WOOOOOOOOOHOOOOOOOOOO!!! You go girl! Kagome really had a great idea using woman's best weapon...And i loved the part when she made those dogs run with their tails between their legs. Now i hope that the other "dogs" won't catch her after her 2 hour head start. Love the story! Waiting for more chapters! | Reviewed By: xFinalActsGirlx On: June 14, 2011 16:44 PDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Loved this chapter! As for the escape there's always the old hide behind the door and wait til they come through and bash them over the head. But then again that one is like way obvious so they probably anticipated that one. And of course the suduction which you did do. So no. Your escape was the best idea...not to mention entertaining. :) | Title: *big sparkly eyes*
Reviewed By: Miss_Marilyn69 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 14, 2011 14:13 PDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
please...may I have some more (that last bit had a british accent) | Reviewed By: SplendentGoddess [MediaMiner Member] On: June 14, 2011 13:32 PDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Good, Kagome's had a two hour head start. She's a smart cookie and will definitely steer clear of the main roads, unless it looks like she can grab a quick hitchhike. Glad she put that extra oomph into scaring the dogs, that might have just been the end of her if they hadn't been too afraid to track her down at master's orders. I really couldn't think of another way for her to escape, either. I mean, just like Kagome herself knew, actually going through with something like that would be out of the question, but as soon as it dawned on her that she could fake it and just pretend long enough to incapacitate him I was cheering for Kagome. It was definitely the most logical course of action, all things considered. Maybe if she had bided her time longer before, before she'd already made two failed attempts, then there might have been a third possible option, but if that were the case then as her first attempt it probably still wouldn't have been successful. She wouldn't have known of the dogs, for one thing, or that her miko powers frightened them. We learn by doing. And you know, it never even dawned on me, all the chaos it would case had her call truly made it to the police, but you raise an excellent point and now I'm relieved the authorities aren't involved. She better think of something, though, since a certain somebody on the 'hunt' has visions of gasoline and lighters in her future. *Shiver* Well I know that won't happen, but I'm certainly looking forward to seeing what does happen next. Keep up the awesome work! | Reviewed By: =) On: June 14, 2011 12:56 PDT
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supposedly she has kikyou's powers -- that means selective barriers that will only allow certain people in or out, she could create shikigami --a wonder why she never tried to learn, or maybe she has... kagome can also avoid roads and live off the land where those guys can't track her. she may even run into some old friends who quite possibly could still be alive or exist even in a different form depending on what part of the country she's in (she still smells the same and would be recognizable) and one would imagine that the reason she had never seen/sensed any youkai in tokyo because they prefer less populated areas. she could ambush a lone man looking for her if she was on the look out and had a good shot -.- arrows are very silent. she won't need to grope around to find where they have inuyasha if she runs into a few 'old' friends. | Reviewed By: xFinalActsGirlx On: June 06, 2011 17:04 PDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Yay! Another chapter! I really liked this one! though I always fear the worst for Inuyasha and Kagome. Clearly not the case...yet? Anyway it was sweet the time they spoke together on the phone. Can't wait for the next one! | Reviewed By: SplendentGoddess [MediaMiner Member] On: June 06, 2011 16:55 PDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oh Kami! I can understand Kagome's need to try to escape, especially since she's right and in the long run they would almost definitely kill her anyway. At any point when they're done with Inuyasha, at least alive, and want to move on with dissection, that would be the time they kill Kagome because she's no longer needed...however long that might take is anyone's guess, but I wouldn't just sit still if I were her, either. If she can get outside again, at least now she knows the dogs are wary of her powers; maybe she could keep them at bay. And they've got to know something about Tetsusaiga, because he transformed it on the rooftop trying to shield himself from the poison darts, so even though they can't figure out how it works I'm sure they plan on keeping it around, hoping they can eventually unlock its secrets. Yay for keeping Hijin Ketsusou a secret! Love that you're tossing the romance in during all the craziness, that Inuyasha's youkai side is getting all possessive of Kagome and on the surface he doesn't fully understand why. Silly Inuyasha... Better hope he doesn't actually transform, though, at least while he's still in the cage, since they have the higher strength darts now and could probably put him down before he killed all of the guards. Something's gotta give, though, since it looks like they're all at a stalemate right now. Poor Kagome, I hope she doesn't get beaten up too badly or whatever that bastard has in mind. Keep up the awesome work! The suspense is killing me, but I know you're not sadistic enough to actually kill off our hanyou and miko. No matter what horrors they endure they will survive in the end, and I'm sure how they do so will be epic. Looking forward to it! | Reviewed By: Kawa-Misuterii [MediaMiner Member] On: June 06, 2011 15:16 PDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is excellent, very suspenseful. | | Pages (6): [ « ‹ 1 2 3 4 5 6 › » ] |
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