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| "A Light in the Darkness" Reviews/Comments [ 95 ] | | Pages (7): [ « ‹ 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 › » ] | Reviewed By: Vampkestrel On: January 01, 2003 05:55 EST
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great so far i liked that you added in a part with goku and chichi ^_^ can't wait for the next chapter | Reviewed By: Lychee SSJ [MediaMiner Member] On: December 28, 2002 20:29 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
mmmm,lemon...next chapter soon? please? with hot fudge and a cherry? | Reviewed By: Cooey On: December 27, 2002 08:50 EST
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I've just found out about your new posting home. What's happening with ffn is a drag, hey. Re-reading your fic is as enjoyable as ever. Thanks. | Reviewed By: Just Another Saiyan Wannabe [MediaMiner Member] On: November 20, 2002 20:14 EST
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This is quite good. I am adding it to my favorite stories list. What is a beta-reader anyhow? Is it like a proofreader? | Reviewed By: The crazy One [MediaMiner Member] On: November 20, 2002 13:17 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
While at home and sick, I thought I'd review again! OK, well it's great there is probably nothing you could do to make it any better than it already is.
You should have more reviews, *Curses those who don't reveiw* Muwahahaha!
Alrighty, well hope ya update soon!
~Lots 'o' Love~
*Crazy One* | Reviewed By: Jess124 On: November 19, 2002 20:09 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great lemon! | Reviewed By: vegetachanlover On: November 08, 2002 13:13 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
you decided to give up on the PG-13 version!?!?!!?! i'm glad...i thought that it would be just too horrible...i mean, i know that you have the talent to do something when laking out the lemon, but i think that if they had a problem with your style of writing and all of the other authours, then i think that they should have dealt with it in a different way. i think that, in my personal opinion, that it's better as a total nc-17, than as a sorry excue for a pg-13. i'm glad that you've made this decision! bye! | Reviewed By: vegetachanlover On: November 08, 2002 13:04 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i liket his chapter. now, to answer your questions. i think that:
one is fanfic-orientated
two is right, maybe not a LOT, but every so often
three is not right...there is no evidence anywhere that he actually cheated on her, just small hints, like what bulma said in the trunks special, that is what she thought was going on
four is, i don't think, true...it never really is said that she's a bad cook, and durring dragonball, she cooks...so it can't be all that bad...but then again. for a long time, goku was the only one eating her food, so...you never know...
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five is...well, i think that that is made up by fanfiction...i'm not sure if they LIKE to fight eachother, i think that it just kinda...happens...given their background differences...
i think that that was a good quiz...bye! | Reviewed By: vegetachanlover On: October 27, 2002 18:33 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i really like this chapter...i think that it's one of the funnier earlier chapters...and it provides us with a nice break in the lemon...don't get me wrong, i love lemons...but reading chapter after chapter of it can be a little...monotonus...but not your...b/c in your lemon chapters, they contain valuable parts to the story plot, and i like how you've done that. bye! sarah | Reviewed By: Heerosgurl On: October 26, 2002 01:36 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
OMG, u are making a sequel?!?! Sugoi! I can't wait. lol. Keep posting! You are a great writer. By the way, maybe this had something to do with the Ranma idea, but when you had the 73rd chap up on ff.net, there was something about Yamcha's brother and a wandering syndrome...yeah. I haven't done (as in refrenced anything) for Ranma, which is what I normally do whenever I find a great new anime, so I don't know about the...wandering thing.
SO! If you could e-mail me to just quickly clarify, you can e-mail me at lunarianprincess2789@hotmail.com, or if it will be revealed later, that's cool too.
Keep posting/writing!
~Heerosgurl | Reviewed By: Donna On: October 24, 2002 18:39 EDT
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I don't think that any of them are canon ... although the whole cheating thing I think might have been caused by the FUNimation dub, because I heard that they translated what Trunks said as wrong, or something like that! | Reviewed By: butterflyV On: October 24, 2002 18:17 EDT
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In response to you little quiz:
(you have to remember I live in Australia and we've only seen one section of Dragonball and we won't get DBZ #5 until sometime next year, so I'm only answering from what I've seen and/or read.)
1) Unless they do spar in #5, it's hard to answer.
2) No.
3) I don't think he cheated on her as such, but he was caught out in a situation when Marron tried to hit on him and he gave in.
4) Can't answer that with a simple yes or no cause I've never seen the episodes where she has to cook, so I'll take your word on that one with the little not you left on your last chapter.
5) I'd say yes because he loves her temper and spirited nature which would be one of the things that he grew to love about her.
For the record, I absolutely can't stand people who act like Marron. I cringed every time I heard her say anything, and I really felt sorry for the poor woman who had to give her a voice! | Reviewed By: KT On: October 23, 2002 16:28 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Love this fic!
Yeesh! Third time I've read this, and *still* only my first review (sorry!).
I think the whole 'Bulma can't cook' thing started with that scene on Namek in the capsule house. Krillin is trying to persuade Dende to eat something despite the fact that "it isn't very good". In the anime, Bulma takes offense at this (at least in the dub) but in the original manga, it's implied that the food is bad because it's processed, pre-packaged stuff... and she has no problem with this at all.
A note on Yamucha's fear of girls - this is also seen in the (I suspect 'anime-only') scene when Maron flirts with him at Kame house. He's polite, but he's definitely not reciprocating!
We also don't actually *know* if he ever cheated - after all, we get that information from Trunks, and he got it from his mother. We only know that's what *she* believed happened...
Anyway, I'm going to enjoy reading this again - this time with a little space between the chapters - the other times I read it over a couple of days in many-hour long slots ^_~ | Reviewed By: Bulma Wannabe [MediaMiner Member] On: October 22, 2002 14:37 EDT
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I used to read this story on FFN. It's what got me hooked to DBZ fan fiction. Excellent work!! | Reviewed By: eeviloverlord [MediaMiner Member] On: October 21, 2002 02:55 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Let's see if I can get this done this time without my computer going spuh. I must admit, that I first started reading this story 'cause of the Bulma/Vegeta stuff. But I'm still reading it because of the *rest* of the story too! ^_^ And I *so* like that Yamcha's not a cheating jerk in this! heh I never could see it. *G* And seeing Bulma cooking in chapter 5 reminded me of something else...in the Dragonfist movie, Trunks tells Tapion that Bulma's a good cook. At least, in the translation I've seen he does. So there! I love the story so far, and it's been really nice to re-read it again from the beginning. You guys keep up the good work! | | Pages (7): [ « ‹ 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 › » ] |
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