| "Father, Mother, Lover" Reviews/Comments [ 121 ] |
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Reviewed By: firedryad [MediaMiner Member] On: February 25, 2003 16:22 CST
Comment/Review:
interesting... id like ryou with bakura, n yami with yugi pls. honda the bad guy? hmm... -_o |
Reviewed By: Yuki On: February 25, 2003 16:11 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This short? Oh well. Hay, I know you did not copy Dave Peltzer but I just said it sounded like the story. You know what? I found out I am like Ryou. You know how?
Bakura:Your hair is turning white at age 11.
Ryou: Your shy and never fight.
Marik:Your not flat.
Malik:People stand up for you.
Yami: You said you wanted to make friends in middle school but are too shy.
Yugi:Are going to make friends with the floor and wall.
Yami:You are a writer.
Bakura:And lets not forget that people say you look 18 and not 11 years old.
Marik:Oh! and how people thought you where a boy.
Yami:Cuz you wear baggy jeans and shirts mostly.
Yugi: Your hair cut.
Ryou:Your hair is spike and not as long as 1 foot.
Malik: People like you but you reject them.
Ryou: You dont have a dad and hate him.
Bakura: And lets not forget you dont trust anyone and your mom wont marry cuz you dont want a dad.
Yuki: Ummmm...Well.....I.....OK! I was going to say I was like Ryou cuz I am nice!... But you just had to let the world know how I am! I dont care how wierd I turned to be! I LOVE IT!
Ja'ne! |
Reviewed By: firedryad [MediaMiner Member] On: February 24, 2003 17:08 CST
Comment/Review:
hmmm... not bad... its definetly not ur best either though... i sort of like it... hmmm... |
Reviewed By: Yuki On: February 24, 2003 08:43 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love this sooooo much! Write more! And I think mybe it should be both Joey and Tristan. Oh and did you get this story idea from Dave Pelzer? I love his books! I read all of them and Have some of them too! |
Reviewed By: Saphirerose [MediaMiner Member] On: February 23, 2003 22:40 CST
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Sorry I din't say it in the last but I think you should have Joey as the one working for their fathers. I was thinking that Joey's father is said in a lot of fanworks to be abusive so maybe you could have Joey abused and be forced by his father to help. Anyway that just my idea and I can't wait for the next chapter. |
Reviewed By: Saphirerose [MediaMiner Member] On: February 23, 2003 22:29 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This was so cute. Much different than the last agasty chapter, not that that was a bad thing. I really like how one chapter you do aganst and the next you do something more upbeat, that way I don't get too depressed. Anyway I can't wait for the next chapter. |
Reviewed By: Saphirerose [MediaMiner Member] On: February 23, 2003 21:33 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This was a very good chapter though very disturbing. Also thank you for explaining the couples, I was a bit confused. Also I have a question, did you get your idea for this story from The biographies of Dave Peltzer? Anyway please continue soon. |
Reviewed By: Yuki On: February 19, 2003 14:57 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
OH MY GOSH! HOW COULD YOU LEAVE IT THERE! That was a good part. Wait! Everything is good!^_^
Bakura:Why am I soft?
Yami:Why.....? *sigh* Nevermind..
Yugi:I LOVE IT!
Ryou:ME TOO!
Bakura and Yami: *looks at the two hikaris*
Ryou and Yugi:^_^
Yami: I guess it it ok for me to be a parent...Oh Hack! I LOVE THIS FIC!
Bakura:Ya! I DONT CARE IF I AM SOFT! THIS IS GREAT!
Yuki:Ummmm....Yaaaa...cool...Write more! ^_^
Yami:Ja!
Bakura:Ja!
Ryou:Ja!
Yugi:Ja!
Yuki:Ya! Ja Ne! |
Reviewed By: firedryad [MediaMiner Member] On: February 16, 2003 20:43 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
finally, u havent updated in a while, i was worried... this is really really good. 4-spme pls? or mabey yamixyugi bakuraxryou. bakuras very OOC, its weird to see him like this, n poor yugi! update SOON!!!!!!! |
Reviewed By: Yuki On: February 16, 2003 20:42 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
How can you stop it there!? It was getting good! Poor Ryou! Goodness Child! How did this story come up to you? You are great at this! I love the fic. And the other fics you wrote! |
Reviewed By: AngelicMouseGirl On: February 16, 2003 20:36 CST
Comment/Review:
Ooooh! It's getting good! More soon please! ^_^ Arigato!^_^ Yay Ryou & Yuugi get to live to together now! ^-^ |
Reviewed By: bakurasgirl On: February 08, 2003 20:45 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
very good. I love coming back for more!! keep it up! |
Reviewed By: Sakura-no-Tamashi [MediaMiner Member] On: February 09, 2003 14:57 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love it I hope Yugi comes in! I oce Yugi/Ryou there are so few of them. Also Bakura and Yami is another rare cuple! Please continue! I can't wait till chapter 4. |
Reviewed By: Danielle (again) ^.^ On: February 12, 2003 20:05 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
PLEASE UPDATE . CHAPTER 3 WAS GREAT . I'LL BE CHECKING EVERYDAY FOR AN UPDATE!!!!!! |
Reviewed By: LovelyWhite On: February 13, 2003 21:59 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
NOO! The Story Is Over!!!
I Must Read MORE!!! Please
Continue With This Great Fic!
PLEASE!!!!!!!!!Im BEGING You! |
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