| "Blood-Red Eyes" Reviews/Comments [ 217 ] |
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Reviewed By: luvli guurl [MediaMiner Member] On: July 06, 2003 12:33 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 3 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 3 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
ok this is an okay fic. it just needs something else. its not bad or anything but its not great. it seems like basically just one long lemon some lemons lasted for more than one chapter for gods sake. you could add a little something else maybe besides sex. |
Reviewed By: Re: chap 15 On: July 06, 2003 08:50 CDT
Comment/Review:
Naraku IS a hanyou. |
Reviewed By: Sistergaia On: July 06, 2003 07:06 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I realy enjoyed your story. I cant wait for you to continue. The lemon sectons were very well done, espechaly for a first attempt. Although there seemed to be some missing sentences at times. Not that I can complain about spelling or gramer. ; ) |
Reviewed By: Yumiki-chan [MediaMiner Member] On: July 05, 2003 22:29 CDT
Comment/Review:
YYYAAAATTTTTTAAA!!!!!! I can't wait 'Til you get the next chapter out!!! I wonder what he will do to her and I just KNOW that the next lemon will be a GREAT!!!!!! PLEZ up-date SSSSOOOOOOONNNNNNNNNN!!!!!!!
lol,Yumiki-chan |
Reviewed By: Julie K On: July 05, 2003 22:21 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'm really enjoying this story. You do a fabulous job with the lemons! I love the little plot twists. I can't wait to see what type of punishment Inuyasha has instore. My only complain is that the fight scenes are a little confusing. It's hard to tell exactly what's going on. I admit I haven't gotten very far into the Inuyasha series and I'm not familiar with all of Naraku's "children", but I just got a bit confused as to who's doing what, especially in the last chapter. I think you've used a few to many pronouns. Perhaps a bit more detail would help too. I think that would make the fight scenes a bit more exciting and easy to follow. Other than that I really enjoyed the story. I hope you post more soon! |
Reviewed By: Ithilwen [MediaMiner Member] On: July 05, 2003 19:03 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Gets wordy in places.
? Sess was still around from the previous night, right? Is Naraku's appearance a coincidence, or did he detect that Kouga and the brothers Inu were all in the same place?
Inuyasha does look different when he goes full. Couldn't Kagome see him? And I thought your version of Demon-Inu didn't talk.
"...he saw the sky, then nothing." (Silence for the great villian, who dies aptly.)
A couple of the paragraphs get awkward. Sesshoumaru using Tennseiga on Kohaku is a chilling moment, but the way it's tangled makes it hard to tell. It might be better if Sesshoumaru holds out the sword, THEN Sango panics and has to be held back, THEN he slices the pallbearers.
Ee! I can't wait to read more. Whetever Inuyasha has in mind, it's probably quite different from what we've seen.
I'm still wondering what Kanna's motives were. Even if she only wanted her freedom, she must have some plans.
Nice peg on Rin. |
Reviewed By: Ithilwen [MediaMiner Member] On: July 05, 2003 18:47 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
WOHOO!! (Does the Dance of the Joyous Update.)
I'm having trouble figuring out what happens when Kanna's mirror breaks. Is everyone paralyzed? Are they just shocked? Can Kouga, his henchguys, or Kagura hear what Kanna is saying?
And you're using "hanyou" to refer to not only Inuyasha, but also Naraku and his offspring?
Why are Inuyasha and Kagome so eager to believe Kanna?
There are also some minor editing errors. |
Reviewed By: kag-chan On: July 05, 2003 13:58 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
OMG!!!!!!!!That is the BEST fanfic I've ever read . Keep up the GREAT work, if you could please continue this story that would be great! Ja ne! |
Reviewed By: dark angle cat On: July 02, 2003 19:14 CDT
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first i loved it
second who the hell like the bitchy kikyo
i looooooove (^V~) |
Reviewed By: Dark cat [MediaMiner Member] On: June 16, 2003 19:09 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love it |
Reviewed By: Sorrow On: June 10, 2003 02:32 CDT
Comment/Review:
Oh you have to write more you have to what well he do. come on please write more sniffle please |
Reviewed By: kagome On: June 10, 2003 01:39 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love it! I hope you continue soon! Some of the chapters are missing chunks i think. |
Reviewed By: LadyMulti [MediaMiner Member] On: June 02, 2003 18:59 CDT
Comment/Review:
^-^ Good story. Do continue it. |
Reviewed By: Blazewing On: May 27, 2003 03:20 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really like this fic, and hopefully you'll update soon! ^_^
One thing that gets me though, are the chunks that seem to be missing in a few chapters - for example, ch. 10 where Kag and Inu are talking about pups. There was one other part of that chapter where a chunk was missing, but I can't remember what was happening except that it was before the pup talk. I can't help wondering what's happening in the missing parts because they seem to be important to the story.
Would you mind emailing me the complete chapter with the missing parts fixed? Pretty please with sugar on top? My email is: jadetarma@hotmail.com
Arigato! And keep writing! |
Reviewed By: Wild Kat On: May 18, 2003 21:42 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I LOVED this story!
Please, PLEASE, write more chapters after chapter 14!!
This is one of the BEST stories that I have ever read!!!
Will Kagome disoby Inuyasha's rules?
What will happen? |
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