| "Dream Weaver" Reviews/Comments [ 69 ] |
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Reviewed By: SirPsychoSexy [MediaMiner Member] On: July 22, 2003 08:17 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
*applauds ch. 2 and 3*
This fic...not only is it sexy so far, but it brings up some very nice philosophical questions as well: What is reality? Where do dreams take us? etc.
And I had a very vivid piccy of the figures mating and Kurama growing embarrassed b/c that was one of his wet dreams...XD
The only thing you need help on is your Japanese^^. I don't think Hiei would be caught dead using watashi for himself...most guys use boku or ore (the latter is the more arrogant, rougher "I", used, I think, bu all 4 Tantę). In the future, if you need J help for your fics, give me a call. ^^
All in all, a good fic so far! *claps* |
Reviewed By: Neko_Youkai [MediaMiner Member] On: July 22, 2003 01:05 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
First off, WOW! This story was awesome! ^__^ I really enjoyed it! I was hoping for a conclusion, but that's alright. I'm a fanfic writer myself *grins* I might try my hand at an ending... We'll see. I also wanted to applaud you on your response to the person who reviewed this story going by 'me'. I'm right with ya on that, and very proud of what you said. Narrow-minded people bug the crap out of me. So yea, now that I sound like a total space case. I'll be going now, but once more, AWESOME fic! I'll be looking forward to any new ones ^__^
~Neko_Youkai |
Reviewed By: SirPsychoSexy [MediaMiner Member] On: July 21, 2003 15:36 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
*applauds*
Wonderfully original idea! And the way you wrote it...damn...I want to read more...I swear, I strongly identified with Hiei here. Very very few fics make me do that..feel the, erm, touching...*blush*
*applauds* You have made my day. I will return.
-SPS |
Reviewed By: kely On: July 20, 2003 20:11 CDT
Comment/Review:
end it happily poor poor hiei desevres a happy endng and make that weaver have a bad funny ending or something like getting stuck in a two year olds head |
Reviewed By: Ally_Hearts On: July 20, 2003 19:09 CDT
Comment/Review:
HOW COULD YOU DO THIS TO ME?!?!? u.u...i want a happy ending!! Sadly i can't write my own cause i sux at writing stories can't seem to some up with a good plot. N E WAY...plz i beg up plz finish it....i'll cry if u dun..u.u
(ain't it pathetic how i get so worked up over a fic |
Reviewed By: me On: July 18, 2003 14:29 CDT
Comment/Review:
OK i would like to start by saying i hate yaoi and yuri. I'm tired of people acting like Kurama and Hiei are a couple of homo sexuals. and Yusuke Kuwabara etc. etc. In any case Kurama and Hiei and the others are STRAIGHT ok. Why can't u people get it through ur filthy stupid gay assed brains.Ok my analasis is any one who writes gay stories ARE gay. Thats all i have to say |
Reviewed By: Rose Kitsune [MediaMiner Member] On: July 16, 2003 13:02 CDT
Comment/Review:
Ack! another unfinished fic! How can u do this to me!! I agree with Kaoru27, just do two endings. That way, both sides are happy, and i don't freak out. See? Everyone wins. Or, if people do send in their own ideas for endings, maybe you could post those? Just a thought |
Reviewed By: Trina On: July 16, 2003 00:53 CDT
Comment/Review:
how could you be so mean i hav no emagination what so ever that's why i don't write storys i read them. I realy liked your fic too and it's going to be ruined by my crapy imagination. If i made you sad or mad i'm very sorry but with all that hard work and you don't make a ending ch. o well i guess i'll be depressed 4 a while but i realy liked your fic it was a wonderful story till the end. |
Reviewed By: nightkiller On: July 15, 2003 22:08 CDT
Comment/Review:
...[continueing from past rating....SCREWED UP COMPUTER!!]....
anywayz...itz one of da best stories i've ever read....but plz do rite another chapter...some of us are too lazy to do that *cough cough8..hehe....
but itz really fantabulous....keep up the good work... |
Reviewed By: nightkiller On: July 15, 2003 22:04 CDT
Comment/Review:
this fic is GREEAAT!! woOt! *ahem..sorri..high on sugar..^_^*
itz |
Reviewed By: nightkiller On: July 15, 2003 22:04 CDT
Comment/Review:
this fic is GREEAAT!! woOt! *ahem..sorri..high on sugar..^_^*
itz |
Reviewed By: Kitty-Yasha On: July 12, 2003 13:54 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
..Let them get together come on! after all this Hiei and Kurama torture at least let them have thier night.. heh heh heh Lemon!!! after all you did say "SM:Come bask in the pretty Yaoi feilds! Weeee!!!" so lets. Lets go to the Yaoi fields and find a lemon! ^-^ Great job i love your writing so ... goooood... |
Reviewed By: Mystic Mushroom On: July 11, 2003 19:02 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 6 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
I dont know how to explain my rating...it just seemed right. I liked the fic, though it could have been a bit longer...
I don't think there should be a lemon...or a sad ending. Perhaps you could have a lemon chapter with no important plotish things, and then a clean "aftermath" chapter that dosen't directly mention them having sex, but includes a flashback or something of a cute, but in character, moment were Hiei tells kurama that he loves him? Readers could take it as either fluff and sex, or just fluff.
if that confused you, you want to clear up a few things, or just would like to say hi or something...my email is chichifryingpan@hotmail.com |
Reviewed By: purplechaos04 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 11, 2003 17:06 CDT
Comment/Review:
Once there was this little girl and she read a story named "Dream Weaver" but the mean author of the story only wrote four chapters! So this little girl cried and cried and cried... and you get the picture. Shame on you, you evil author!
It's an excellent story though, really. Your use of imagery is great and the character's thoughts and actions are totally understandable. I especially liked the Dream Weaver's convo with Kurama in Ch. 3! It was awesome. I also liked the way you wrote a things, like "Ningenkai’s single satellite" and "Ruin a perfectly good REM cycle…"
Awww, you picked on Kuwabara! *snicker snicker* He's an awesome character, and one of the most couragous charas in the show, but picking on him is fun. And easy. But he isn't really stupid at all... maybe just a little. ^_~
Oooh, I never thought of this: "Kurama was a sensitive being, though he hated to admit it, and would not risk rejection. He did not wear his heart on his sleeve as most did. He protected his emotions just as much as Hiei did, though he replaced them with a calm, passive front." That makes perfect sense! I understood the part with Hiei but I never thought that Kurama felt similar but just reacted differently!
BTW, in the Demon Triad the first opponent was actually a transvestite, but they dubbed that out. Of course Yusuke, being the pervert that he is, was the one that figured out that she was a he.
They dub out *everything.* -_-
One little mistake, Botan is a "ferry girl" not "fairy girl."
I wish you'd continue this!!! =( |
Reviewed By: Llewlyn [MediaMiner Member] On: July 10, 2003 22:18 CDT
Comment/Review:
Since my computer decided to submit the review before I finished, here's the rest ^_^. I love your story!! Your writing is amazing, and the story is creative. It's great! I feel Hiei's pain, and Kurama's suffering, and the Dream Weaver is just cool. Can't wait for more!!
Oh yeah... LEMON PLEASE!! |
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