| "The Source Of All Things" Reviews/Comments [ 130 ] |
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Title: Back in business!
Reviewed By: vox dei On: October 07, 2004 22:26 EDT
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I'm glad you've returned your attention to this fic! As I've said before, very original. Your Heeros are pretty unique- both this one and the one from 'The Arrangement'. This is good, I find them remarkably genuine/credible. So things are finally coming into focus, and Heero, Duo and Wufei are not out to kill each other. Poor Trowa- Quatre has become a computer. Be honest with your readers- is Svale a partial self-insert (with all that groping...) J/K. Keep up the great work!
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Reviewed By: Enna Namo [MediaMiner Member] On: September 26, 2004 03:30 EDT
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Yes, a new chapter. Oh, I like it very much. I wish Duo and Wufei would hug each other and admit that they are both lonely. But it is a start that Wufei thanked Duo for rescuing him and saving his life. If Duo would apologize to Wufei for using him as a puppet, I guess that would help Wufei accept him as an ally faster. I wonder what kind of powers Svale has that Duo doesn't want her to use them. hehehe, even Wufei seemed to be impressed by Duo's warning of getting spanked. lol. You really need that long for the next chapter??? Weeks??? sniff, sniff, ohhh, what about cookies? Would cookies make you write faster?
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Reviewed By: GoldenRat [MediaMiner Member] On: September 26, 2004 02:31 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wai! This is going to be such a happy little group of fighters. I can tell ;-p
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Reviewed By: Bane's Desire On: September 26, 2004 01:10 EDT
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So glad you're finally coming back to this story. Thank heavens it's memorable enough that I didn't have to go back and re-read it after such a long time from your last posting. It doesn't look as if the 2x5 or even the 2x5x1 pairings are going to happen any time soon. The animosity between them is so strong, it's hard to imagine either Heero or Wufei softening any time soon. Hurry and type the next chapter.
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Reviewed By: Droom On: July 24, 2004 10:38 EDT
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Out of curiosity (sp? oO); is there a possibilty of Relena showing up? I wondered about that yesterday, and now I'm torn between wanting her to show up and, well, NOT wanting her to show up. ^^
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Reviewed By: Droom On: July 23, 2004 10:22 EDT
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There! I finished reading it! And was also very happy to learn we're only half way through the story concept now, it's great. Very different from the Arrangement, but I love it still. "On one side of the cirque, Chang and Duo were facing off - well, the Dragon was facing off, Duo was leaning with insulting casualness against a stone, laughing in his face." This bit had me grinning like a maniac, probably because I could visualise it perfectly. :) Very interesting and wicked cool story you've come up with. ^^
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Reviewed By: RaceUlfson@pacbell.net On: July 05, 2004 02:25 EDT
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Another fascinating chapter. I love the byplay between Wufei and Duo... and the bittersweetness of that between Trowa and Quatre. I adored Zero panicing about the end of the universe in a mere many billion years. I can't tell you how delighted I am that this fic is only half way done! I look forward to the rest.
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Reviewed By: turtle_fire On: July 04, 2004 04:14 EDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Never tell a lie? I don't think it is wise! Hey, you'd got us to fell in love with a liar Duo, and now no more lies? Injustice!!!! But can you make him manipulative without telling a lie at least? Is "Maxwell" really in Jushin's vocabulary? I keep thinking the coffee when you say "House Maxwell". Isn't Heero 'the Source of all thing'? Please update soon. It is such a joy reading your fic.
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Reviewed By: priscel [MediaMiner Member] On: June 24, 2004 14:25 EDT
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Ya know I was afraid this was the end!! But I'm SOOO happy it isn't. *notices a plot bunny bouncing by* it's pink?! *grabs it and spray paints it blue* much better (^_^) I think the progress of the story is going very well and I can't wait to read more!
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Reviewed By: black beauty On: June 20, 2004 19:02 EDT
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The pace is great, although you could move a bit faster with the plot, as long as you don't skimp over the Duo and Wufie part. The plot, so far is clear enough, we know more about Duo and Wufei, but it wouldn't hurt to start seeing some insight into Heero. After all a 5x2x1 fic would not be complete if we can't see some kind of interest on Heero's behalf. Keep up the AWESOME job and update soon.
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Title: Perfect fic!
Reviewed By: turtle_fire On: June 20, 2004 02:51 EDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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I am so glad that it is only half way through, this fic is so good that I don't want it to end, ever. I won't mind if you post at least one chapter a day. After a few intense chapters, I am glad you are going to slow things down a little. Don't forget to heat up the love scenes though. I wonder how the experience changed Heero, will he emerge smarter and better in courting Duo? By the way, if someone has sex with Duo, will he be having it with the entire Jishin race too since all of them are now inside Duo? Imagine millions of Jishins having an orgasm at the same time! ;D Well, if the dead ones could not feel it, than there are at least a few millions of Peeping Toms inside Duo head. It has been a long time since you throw us a lemon or lime, write on!!!!!!!!
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Reviewed By: MeLaiya [MediaMiner Member] On: June 19, 2004 03:46 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Actually the pace is perfect...in fact you can go faster if ya want to. I love your writings this and "The Arrangement" are my favorites but I pretty much love whatever you put out there. Keep up the good work. TaTa
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Reviewed By: Cephalanthus [MediaMiner Member] On: June 18, 2004 19:57 EDT
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Woo-hoo! Still reading, still enjoying... no suggestions for future development because I'm just having so darn much fun following where you lead. Keep up the amazing work!
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Title: Justice
Reviewed By: Enna Namo [MediaMiner Member] On: June 18, 2004 15:06 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
What needs more developing? Well, the 2x5, but that is hopefully to come. I would like to know whether or not Quatre is going to keep Zero or not. And who or what is Heero? The story isn't going neither to fast or to slow, it is just fine with me. Fast where fast is needed and slow when you need it slow. Poor Duo, having to deal with so many other souls in his mind. It is a miricale that he is acting sane for the most time. And now he has to face a really pissed of Wufei. And that after he protected Wufei from being taken over from Juusan.
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Reviewed By: priscel [MediaMiner Member] On: June 16, 2004 12:46 EDT
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*giggles about 2x5* well wuffers is being kind of mean... him calling Duo trash and all. but it would be interesting if somehow it worked out for them. but hey, the affection that Duo's showing to heero could that also lead to something? Ya!! jusan's onworld, and i'm anxious to see what happens now... I think that Duo and heero are now the only ones powerful enough to knock Juju off planet. can't wait!
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