| "Foundations of Neo Genesis" Reviews/Comments [ 97 ] |
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Reviewed By: Luffy's girlfriend On: December 21, 2008 18:01 EST
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
You should surprise Inuyasha and the rest of the group he leads by taking advantage of Kagome's archery. I don't know, I feel that the profession Kagome recieved is giving her too limited potential in this story, perhaps because she couldn't join or help them out due to her restricted biology researches. Perhaps if her bow skills were more efficient in this alternative universe, she could be more useful than a talented biologist in a different world. A scene that could bring this out can be a very difficult prey that's hard to catch up with that not even Inu could deal with it and then it's brought down thanks to her aim with her bow (she could have created it herself out of wood?) straight into its eye or its forehead. And down it goes. Maybe this would also help this very cynical Inuyasha to look at her in a different light too. *hint hint* Oh, and I agree with many commentators around here, death to Chanda. She's not that useful in the battlefield and.. well, what's the female version of a douche? Ah yes, a Sakura Haruno. There's already one too many of those out there. Spare us one Emerald, please. :( *sorry, had to fix typo.
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Reviewed By: Luffy's girlfriend On: December 21, 2008 17:59 EST
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
You should surprise Inuyasha and the rest of the group he leads by taking advantage of Kagome's archery. I don't know, I feel that the profession Kagome recieved is giving her too limited potential in this story, perhaps because she couldn't join or help them out due to her restricted biology researches. Perhaps if her bow skills were more efficient in this alternative universe, she could be more useful than a talented biologist in a different world. A scene that could bring this out can be a very difficult prey that's hard to catch up with that not even Inu could deal with it and then it's brought down thanks to her aim with her bow (she could have created it herself out of wood?) straight into its eye or its forehead. And down it goes. Maybe this would also help this very cynical Inuyasha to look at her in a different light too. *hint hint* Oh, and I agree with many commentators around here, death to Chanda. She's not that useful in the battlefield and.. well, what's the female version of a douche? Ah yes, a Sakura Haruno. There's already one too many of those out there. Spare us one Emerald, please. :
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Reviewed By: Harr On: December 21, 2008 17:42 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Please update soon! The suspence is bothering me every day! Also, merry Christmas!
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Reviewed By: HentaiSoulja Shoujo On: September 28, 2008 12:33 EDT
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Oh thank you thank you thank you I love all of your stories and was thinking that you were not going to update but you proved me wron and normally I would hate that but... hmm mut be a new moon tonight
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Reviewed By: Feudal Teller of Tales [MediaMiner Member] On: August 12, 2008 21:41 EDT
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Oh please, please! Be merciful and tell us more! Also I just read the whole thing over again; getting a bit desperate here.
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Reviewed By: inu16 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 28, 2008 21:28 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE update soon I really like it so far. By the way are kagome and inuyasha going to become a couple?
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Reviewed By: Treyzen On: July 14, 2008 06:50 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Man I hope Chanda will kick the bucket soon. She's so friggin' annoying.
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Reviewed By: KowaiiMusume [MediaMiner Member] On: June 26, 2008 13:19 EDT
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So happy to see you update. I love this story. Thanks for the great chapter. I look forward to more.
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Reviewed By: Midoriko-sama [MediaMiner Member] On: June 26, 2008 08:39 EDT
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You updated! You updated! You updated! *joins the victory dance by the fire* I miss you sweety! You really should speak up some more and come bother me on AIM more often! Now that you've abandoned me on the CC list too *puts on dramatic pose* I'll see you even less! Come say hello if you see me online m'kay? I promise I'll do the same! --- This one was a great chapter too - I really like how Sango and Inuyasha are hashing out their difference a lot more thoroughly than we saw elsewhere... their different upbringing and ingrained prejudices are really being brought out and taken care of. If a healing process ever happens, it will be a slow and laboured one. I do so hope we'll see more of you. but hey, you know I'll be here to read your chapter whenever you bring it out.
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Reviewed By: silverwolf halfbeast [MediaMiner Member] On: June 26, 2008 02:35 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
It is good and well to see this story again... I almost forgotten all about it, well until you updated that is... This chapter was very well written and the best ending... Hope you update and keep up the good work. Peace...
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Reviewed By: Grimdir On: June 24, 2008 22:32 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I was surprised to see this alert show up, needless to say, I was thrilled. I love the story, extremely original and well written (Wouldn't mind seeing this done as an original piece either instead of a fanfic). Great job on the chapter, and hope to see you keep writing it.
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Reviewed By: Sovereignty [MediaMiner Member] On: April 15, 2008 07:18 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
this story is really great... but it sucks that it hasn't been updated in such a long time... I was actually looking for this story and happened to look at you other stories (Student Teacher Relationships) and I hope you write more!!!!!!
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Reviewed By: sublimetrickster [MediaMiner Member] On: August 24, 2007 18:01 EDT
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This is great. I've seen it but never got around to reading it until now. All the aspects of it are greatly thought out. I love the giant birds, I can totally imagin their behaviour and movements. I'm also happy you went the rout where the second group never came (or has been delayed, or maybe they just landed off course???) The food, the setting, the power struggles, all very realistic and exciting. Inuyasha is definetly fit for this expedition. Poor Kagome seems a little weak, but I'm glad Inuyasha recognises her usefulness. (by the way she's super cute when she's excited about biology). I did feel that the beginning seems a little asexual in the interactions of the characters, I was begining to wonder if they had hormon surpresants or something, but chapter 15 changed all that. I must say I was a little surprised when Kagome questioned if Inuyasha would rape her though. You might want to think about going back and putting something in about male behaviour leading up to then that would make her suddenly concerned about it. Overall I'm totally loving this and look forward to an update, I've faved it just to be sure I get notified ;) Keep up the hard work.
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Reviewed By: Hyena On: August 10, 2007 18:29 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
UUUPPPDDDDAAAAATTTEEEEEEEEE thank you.
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Reviewed By: Hiru-chan On: August 03, 2007 05:16 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great story as always! Please update soon! :D
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