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| "The Ultimate Antidote" Reviews/Comments [ 173 ] | | Pages (12): [ « ‹ 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 10 11 12 › » ] | Title: Bump in the Jean
Reviewed By: Matty [MediaMiner Member] On: September 08, 2004 04:30 CDT
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I've realized that a long, long time ago. Remember what I stated numerous, numerous times through out this posting. This is, at the very best, a rough draft. I've made no attempts to go back and correct things, and I won't make any such attempts until my muse dies. I know of a ton of things I need to fix/fill in. Plot holes galore, forced issues I'd rather take back, rework, and spread out over a series of chapters before things blow up. I know this, hell I've been expecting people to bitch about more then just Jean, but it goes to show you just how much practical knowledge people have of the series when not even one person commented on the fact Wanda was with the Brotherhood, and Tabitha too no less, when in the series Mystique was the one who got Wanda out of the looney bin, and when the guys betrayed Tabitha, siding with Mystique over something rather trivial, she left the Brotherhood of her own accord. There's tons of stuff like this I need to go over, fix, and rewrite. Hell, that's probably ten, to twelve chapters of stuff I need to create just to expand the story, fixed forced issues, and create a back drop to the main plot itself. Yeah, I got my work cut out for me, but thats way ahead in my schedule, whenever my muse dies. Who knows when thats going to happen? Heh.
| Reviewed By: taxzombie [MediaMiner Member] On: September 08, 2004 04:21 CDT
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Nope, didn't like the Ranma/Jean part. It was fine for a while but the last part just feels forced. I don't feel it works well at all. That's the only 'bump in the road' I've come arcoss. Everything else has been top notch.
| Reviewed By: taxzombie [MediaMiner Member] On: September 07, 2004 23:09 CDT
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Now that was a heck of a first day in school. Nice to see some humor in this story. Some good chuckles and a good too. Well written, keeps me as a reader well engaged. One of the best if not the best X-men/Ranma crossovers I've had the pleasure of reading to date.
| Title: Fate of Takahashi and Sho
Reviewed By: Matdeception [MediaMiner Member] On: September 07, 2004 22:43 CDT
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Is left in the side story, which will deal generally with Ryoga and his little situations through out Japan. You won't be seeing them die here, at least, it's doubtful. Matdeception
| Reviewed By: taxzombie [MediaMiner Member] On: September 07, 2004 22:03 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Not enough. I'm still out for blood. I want the entire Agency Nero chopped up into little itty bitty pieces. The line where Kasumi continues to haunt me. The death of an innocence crys out for vengence. I'll be following this one it the last period. By the way I do hope you've got some nice slow nasty death's planned for Takahashi and Sho, I'm really looking forward to reading when they get taken down. Congrats, you've got me good and fired up. I'll be up all night if needs be to read what you've posted to date.
| Reviewed By: taxzombie [MediaMiner Member] On: September 07, 2004 20:23 CDT
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Lordy, Lordy, I'd say may kami-sama have mercy on thier souls but I don't think even he will forgive them killing Kasumi. As for the rest of that misbegotten back of walking excrement - it's time to flush! And Ranma's got his hand on the handle. I'm just curious how much of Japan is still going to be above water when he gets done. You've definately got me doing a slow burn.
| Reviewed By: McClown On: September 07, 2004 18:56 CDT
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Holy shit this story rocks, Bit hevey on the gore side at the start but its great now. Just where the hell is nodaka tho?
| Reviewed By: Gopu On: September 07, 2004 12:56 CDT
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I meant to ask. Are you going to have her drain Jean to get her point of view on what happened?
| Reviewed By: Gopu On: September 07, 2004 12:52 CDT
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Great chapter
| Title: Daaaaamn!
Reviewed By: Lynx_spiel On: September 07, 2004 04:46 CDT
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Heh, what a way to find out about that.
| Reviewed By: Shadowbakasama [MediaMiner Member] On: September 06, 2004 16:57 CDT
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Doing great so far, I'm checking your story every day. As for Ranma getting laid, well back in Nerima that sort of thing would get the entire cast after him in one way or another. Mousse would be for it if it wasn't with Shampoo, all the fiancees except the one getting some would be after him, except Akane who would be after him anyway for being a hentai. Ryouga and Kuno would be after him no matter what. Colonge would be after him if it wasn't Shampoo. Genma and Soun would be after him if it wasn't Akane, and dragging him kicking and screaming to the alter if it was. So in Nerima any sex had to be Top Secret and on the side, but can you imagine the sexual tension of having 3 hot chicks throwing themselves at you everyday? Now in the US he isn't engaged to anyone, and casual sex is OK and won't get him killed or married, just beat up. I think that Emma will be the next to seduce him, if she can, followed by Rouge, if and when she gets up the nerve, and finally Nabiki will rope him into an orgy with her and Wanda, leaving Tabitha maybe seducing him if she feels left out or gets really horny. Putting all that sex aside, for a longer lasting matchups I'd say Ranma+Rouge, Lance+Kitty, Risty(Mystique?)+Pietro, Tabitha+Toad, and Nabiki+Wanda+Kurt, leaving Scott trying to score with Jean.
| Reviewed By: Gopu On: September 06, 2004 15:47 CDT
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Great chapter. I'm really enjoying this
| Reviewed By: Chi Vayne On: September 06, 2004 13:41 CDT
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Emma Frost
| Title: Jean knocked up?
Reviewed By: Matdeception [MediaMiner Member] On: September 06, 2004 10:46 CDT
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Wanda's ability to affect probability is a weak explanation of her powers. She is perhaps one of the strongest mutants ever introduced into the Evo verse pre-Apocolypse. Now, you need to ask yourself, is it in her favor to knock Jean up? Even I don't think she's emotionally capable of doing something like that, even if only for revenge. What she did should be obvious, but you won't see the effects for a few weeks yet. I'll be fun, and a perfect excuse for a cluster fuck if I've ever seen one. Besides, Pregnancy is a bit too far fetched IMO, still, I won't say yea or nay for it until I reach the point I'll deal with the situation. If the writing lends to it, then sure, but I personally wouldn't count on it.
| Reviewed By: Kaze-kun [MediaMiner Member] On: September 06, 2004 07:54 CDT
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Hmmm,i sense a disturbance in the force...What did Wanda exactly do to Jean? I know her powers alter probab....oy vey,pregnant Jean anyone?
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