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| "Broken" Reviews/Comments [ 78 ] | | Pages (6): [ « ‹ 1 2 3 4 5 6 ] | Title: WHAT DO YOU MEAN IT'S OVER?!
Reviewed By: Choi-sama On: July 09, 2005 19:04 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
And why did you explain everything so much for Neji? It was too... explained. You should make the ending more dramatic. Or emotional. Or, you know, SOMETHING! Just not all... explainy. -__-" (Yeah, my vocabulary is as wide as the ocean...) But yeah, I loved this story. It had probably the best plot out of all the Naruto fanfics I've read so far. But the end, well, it just like crushed any "cool-ness" or "memorable-ness"that Sasuke had going on. And Neji! What's he doing, always hanging around? (Actually, it was kinda cool how you ditched Sakura/Kakashi/whomever and made Neji do something and supply angst.) OK, sorry. I'm rambling! (Again!) Basically, I think you should redo the ending. Or just edit it a little, as in no, "Neji, turn around and look at the bed." Or "We killed Orochimaru this-and-that way..." I mean, come on! Neji didn't even ask any questions! So... yeah, just... edit... little edit... ^__^
| Reviewed By: kai01 On: June 23, 2005 05:00 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
yes the snake is dead and they escaped!! sooo what happens next? update soon!
| Reviewed By: Adan11 On: June 14, 2005 16:25 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really enjoyed this fic! I'm wondering though, what happened to the people in Konoha? Did they just decide to abandon Naruto and Sasuke? I'd think that lot's of people, especially Kakashi, Iruka, Tsunade, and Sakura would follow them and try to get them back. If Orochimaru was destroying so many villages, news would probably get around pretty fast to Tsunade about Kyuubi, so people there (some at least) would know that Naruto was in Sound. And what happens to Hoshi? Was he eventually going to escape too, or was he just helping them and then he was going to stay in Sound? Or does he get killed? I liked him, personally, he reminded me a lot of Haku. You can't really tell his gender either! *loves Haku* Haku's hair is gorgeous! Anyway, I really really love this story! It's very addicting to read. I just spent a long time sitting here reading the whole thing. >< my eyes! So please, please update it soon! Much love, Adan
| Reviewed By: angel of silence On: May 13, 2005 14:07 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
hi! first of all, when are you planning on updating the story???? don't leave us waiting much longer, 'k??? well, I really like your story so far, though violence is not really my thing... anyway, I think you could explore more how the people in konoha, naruto's friends I mean, are feeling about this all... I mean, it's been so long he's gone, how does hinata, tsunade, kakashi, sakura, iruka, hell, even jiraya, and the other genin if u want it, feel about it??? and also how do they feel about sasuke's departure after naruto?? and why didn't anyone just follow him, since he simply walked after the kyuubi after it left konoha?? also, is anyone looking for them, or did they move on with their lives? I really think you have a talent for writing, but also think you could tell us a little more about the other characters and what's going on on their minds. well, plz update soon, can't wait to read more!!! ^_^
| Reviewed By: yamiyugikun [MediaMiner Member] On: April 26, 2005 17:00 CDT
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Hi Blackarora, thank you for reviewing my fic and letting me know about the formatting. I fixed it up. Great, deep, detailed writing style. You really captured the violence and angst of having Naruto get beat up. The detail of describint the action was great too. I almost felt as if I got beat up with him. Poor Naruto! He'd better kick their asses! Anyway, what's it like to be in the Navy? I thought about joining a few years ago. What do you do all day on a ship out in the gulf?
| Reviewed By: melody [MediaMiner Member] On: April 15, 2005 09:27 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
*bawling her eyes out* Poor Naru-kun!!! *huggles* ^^ I really like this story...... I just hope that we get a bit of "fluff" sometime soon. You've written this so well that I'm not sure my stomach can handle too much more, lol. ^___~ Keep up the good work, and update ASAP, kk? Ja ne!!!
| Reviewed By: kai01 On: March 27, 2005 01:06 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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Sasuke don't give in!! You need to save naruto from the snake!!! Damn Oro is just evil and a pediphile!! (sp?) Anyways, great update and update soon!!
| Reviewed By: princess kitana [MediaMiner Member] On: February 24, 2005 02:23 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really enjoyed your fic so far!! Poor Naruto!! Damn you guys for doing that to Naruto!! I hope everything gets straighted out between Naruto and Sasuke!!! I want them to be friends!! UPDATE SOON!!!
| Reviewed By: akuma_river [MediaMiner Member] On: February 18, 2005 00:32 CST
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coolsa.
| Reviewed By: Youmahime On: January 31, 2005 07:13 CST
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Wow... just... wow man. You're sick. But I guess I'm not much better since I read it. Heh... That's some real sadism there... well, keep up the good work.
| Reviewed By: Ghonchi [MediaMiner Member] On: January 20, 2005 11:30 CST
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still a very awesome story.... but you should make sure that you have those dotts that tell you when someone is speaking. or maybe, you should get a beta, I would be happy to do it.
| Reviewed By: Ghonchi [MediaMiner Member] On: January 06, 2005 13:31 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Love this story! It's really creepy, the way you succeded to make all Narutos wounds so detailed... I had to stop my self from seeing all those things in my mind, otherwise...I would have got nightmares... Please! keep up the super good work!
| Reviewed By: akuma_river [MediaMiner Member] On: January 05, 2005 00:34 CST
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I don't know what I can say. For a subject I have to be honest and call it twisted. What those vermin did to Naruto is absolutely horrible. Unfortunately if Naruto was of the real world and that kind of power and demon inside him, I think it would happen. For format it needs work, the grammer too, I saw a lot of mistakes. For the content of the story, I say its good. The story is unusual I have read stories of where Naruto is Itachi's hooker. And even that as bad as it was (in how Naruto was treated) does not compare to this. Frankly and I don't want to seem rude, but this belongs in the NC-17 category. It covers too many details of what is happening. May even give some nightmares. For what its worth, I like this story, its unusual and it is a story that people can get hooked to. For Naruto's sake please have at the end something that can resemble a happy ending. I don't think many fans will like it going through all this angst and then to not have somekind of happy ending. But like I said I like the story. Continue. coolsa.
| Reviewed By: A.M.T [MediaMiner Member] On: January 04, 2005 22:46 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
.......O_O My god....This is just....woah...If that snakey-guy does anything to Naru-chan right now~! Grr...>_
| Reviewed By: Ghonchi [MediaMiner Member] On: December 17, 2004 05:44 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow... This story is just so...wow! You are really good at the details, and I hope you are going to complete it....!
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