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| "Broken" Reviews/Comments [ 78 ] | | Pages (6): [ « ‹ 1 2 3 4 5 6 › » ] | Reviewed By: crzyboachic [MediaMiner Member] On: August 03, 2005 01:56 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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This is really good. Keep updating. Your one of the few people who always update. I can't wait to see what happends when Tsunade finds out
| Reviewed By: rhea On: August 01, 2005 07:47 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oh man, this was awesome, keep writing. I loved the dark themes used, it was really emotionally well done. I had a little internal struggle with the idea of Naruto having his eye cut out but he grew it back, which sounds a little wierd, and that made it ok. I have a thing against making major changes to a characters appearance, but otherwise, everything about it was great, i can't wait to see how this turns out, keep it going!!
| Reviewed By: Adan11 On: July 16, 2005 10:43 CDT
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This is a really really great story, and chapter 15 was good, but it sort of feels like you ended it really soon. Like, are they ever going to go back to Konoha? And if they don't, how is everybody else dealing with it? I like how you brought in Neji and them, but since he's the only one that knows that Sasuke's on Naruto's side, the other people would probably attack and some might not be as trusting. I love this story, so please continue it and don't stop right here. ^_^ Luvs, Adan
| Title: WHAT DO YOU MEAN IT'S OVER?!
Reviewed By: Choi-sama On: July 09, 2005 19:04 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
And why did you explain everything so much for Neji? It was too... explained. You should make the ending more dramatic. Or emotional. Or, you know, SOMETHING! Just not all... explainy. -__-" (Yeah, my vocabulary is as wide as the ocean...) But yeah, I loved this story. It had probably the best plot out of all the Naruto fanfics I've read so far. But the end, well, it just like crushed any "cool-ness" or "memorable-ness"that Sasuke had going on. And Neji! What's he doing, always hanging around? (Actually, it was kinda cool how you ditched Sakura/Kakashi/whomever and made Neji do something and supply angst.) OK, sorry. I'm rambling! (Again!) Basically, I think you should redo the ending. Or just edit it a little, as in no, "Neji, turn around and look at the bed." Or "We killed Orochimaru this-and-that way..." I mean, come on! Neji didn't even ask any questions! So... yeah, just... edit... little edit... ^__^
| Reviewed By: kai01 On: June 23, 2005 05:00 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
yes the snake is dead and they escaped!! sooo what happens next? update soon!
| Reviewed By: Adan11 On: June 14, 2005 16:25 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really enjoyed this fic! I'm wondering though, what happened to the people in Konoha? Did they just decide to abandon Naruto and Sasuke? I'd think that lot's of people, especially Kakashi, Iruka, Tsunade, and Sakura would follow them and try to get them back. If Orochimaru was destroying so many villages, news would probably get around pretty fast to Tsunade about Kyuubi, so people there (some at least) would know that Naruto was in Sound. And what happens to Hoshi? Was he eventually going to escape too, or was he just helping them and then he was going to stay in Sound? Or does he get killed? I liked him, personally, he reminded me a lot of Haku. You can't really tell his gender either! *loves Haku* Haku's hair is gorgeous! Anyway, I really really love this story! It's very addicting to read. I just spent a long time sitting here reading the whole thing. >< my eyes! So please, please update it soon! Much love, Adan
| Reviewed By: angel of silence On: May 13, 2005 14:07 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
hi! first of all, when are you planning on updating the story???? don't leave us waiting much longer, 'k??? well, I really like your story so far, though violence is not really my thing... anyway, I think you could explore more how the people in konoha, naruto's friends I mean, are feeling about this all... I mean, it's been so long he's gone, how does hinata, tsunade, kakashi, sakura, iruka, hell, even jiraya, and the other genin if u want it, feel about it??? and also how do they feel about sasuke's departure after naruto?? and why didn't anyone just follow him, since he simply walked after the kyuubi after it left konoha?? also, is anyone looking for them, or did they move on with their lives? I really think you have a talent for writing, but also think you could tell us a little more about the other characters and what's going on on their minds. well, plz update soon, can't wait to read more!!! ^_^
| Reviewed By: yamiyugikun [MediaMiner Member] On: April 26, 2005 17:00 CDT
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Hi Blackarora, thank you for reviewing my fic and letting me know about the formatting. I fixed it up. Great, deep, detailed writing style. You really captured the violence and angst of having Naruto get beat up. The detail of describint the action was great too. I almost felt as if I got beat up with him. Poor Naruto! He'd better kick their asses! Anyway, what's it like to be in the Navy? I thought about joining a few years ago. What do you do all day on a ship out in the gulf?
| Reviewed By: melody [MediaMiner Member] On: April 15, 2005 09:27 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
*bawling her eyes out* Poor Naru-kun!!! *huggles* ^^ I really like this story...... I just hope that we get a bit of "fluff" sometime soon. You've written this so well that I'm not sure my stomach can handle too much more, lol. ^___~ Keep up the good work, and update ASAP, kk? Ja ne!!!
| Reviewed By: kai01 On: March 27, 2005 01:06 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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Sasuke don't give in!! You need to save naruto from the snake!!! Damn Oro is just evil and a pediphile!! (sp?) Anyways, great update and update soon!!
| Reviewed By: princess kitana [MediaMiner Member] On: February 24, 2005 02:23 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really enjoyed your fic so far!! Poor Naruto!! Damn you guys for doing that to Naruto!! I hope everything gets straighted out between Naruto and Sasuke!!! I want them to be friends!! UPDATE SOON!!!
| Reviewed By: akuma_river [MediaMiner Member] On: February 18, 2005 00:32 CST
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coolsa.
| Reviewed By: Youmahime On: January 31, 2005 07:13 CST
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Wow... just... wow man. You're sick. But I guess I'm not much better since I read it. Heh... That's some real sadism there... well, keep up the good work.
| Reviewed By: Ghonchi [MediaMiner Member] On: January 20, 2005 11:30 CST
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still a very awesome story.... but you should make sure that you have those dotts that tell you when someone is speaking. or maybe, you should get a beta, I would be happy to do it.
| Reviewed By: Ghonchi [MediaMiner Member] On: January 06, 2005 13:31 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Love this story! It's really creepy, the way you succeded to make all Narutos wounds so detailed... I had to stop my self from seeing all those things in my mind, otherwise...I would have got nightmares... Please! keep up the super good work!
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