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Title: ch3 crash Reviewed By: VenusLegacy [MediaMiner Member] On: February 11, 2008 01:28 CST Comment/Review: aww Goku is so cute in this chapter,lol.Although I can understand why he would be so scared. I liked the last line as well, Vegeta awestruck and not knowing why.
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Reviewed By: Zofo [MediaMiner Member] On: February 10, 2008 18:23 CST Comment/Review: This is one of my favorite fics and I thought you had abandoned it so I'm delighted that you haven't. The interactions between Goku and Vegeta have been in character for the most part given the circumstances, and delightfully humorous at other times. Your take on Saiyan society, origins and politics is very interesting and I also like how you are portraying Vegeta battle himself between his need to give his race a better future and his historic craving of power. Goku is also portrayed well, keeping his sense of fairness even to the point of going against Vegata despite his feelings. I look forward to your next update.
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Title: ch2 roomies Reviewed By: VenusLegacy [MediaMiner Member] On: February 10, 2008 04:03 CST Comment/Review: Wow, this trips seems like it's going to be a whole load of chaotic fun, can't wait to find out what happened next. Also, I noticed that the first chapter is listed as (ch 2 roomies) is this meant to be (ch 1 roomies) or is the first chapter missing?
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Reviewed By: Webtester01 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 06, 2008 01:15 CST Comment/Review: Nice chapter! I'm glad you were able to update again. I look forward to seeing the development of the new city.
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Reviewed By: shivalatina [MediaMiner Member] On: June 15, 2006 14:55 CDT Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Comment/Review: I really like this story. I hope you finish it soon. I'm curious on how every thing is going to go with this new world and their new relationship.
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Title: UPDATE Reviewed By: chibigoku [MediaMiner Member] On: April 19, 2006 07:37 CDT Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10 Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10 Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10 Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10 Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review: pleeeeeeeeeeaaaaaaaaasssse update soon, i want to know what happens next, this is just so awesome, i'm totally hooked on this fic! ^-^;
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Reviewed By: NewKitty aka NewUnshelteredLife On: September 27, 2005 14:29 CDT Comment/Review: You've not given up on this have you?!
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Reviewed By: redmakesmehot On: July 28, 2005 15:38 CDT Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10 Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10 Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10 Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10 Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review: dude, i freaking love this story, im really sad that you havent updated it in for like ever, but i do love this story and im still waiting haha. thanks
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Reviewed By: HSaiyajin On: June 10, 2005 20:23 CDT Comment/Review: ur going to kill me with this!! [groan of frustration] gaaah!
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Title: Finally finished Reviewed By: rose of vegetasei On: June 07, 2005 10:00 CDT Comment/Review: Wow. What a great plot. It'll be interesting to see where the rest of the story goes now. It was nice to see Goku and Vegeta reflect a bit on their wives and the difference in their relationship with them compared to with each other. But I would say you may want to be more careful in proofreading. I found some spelling and grammar errors. Such as "lead" versus "led" (the later is the past tense of lead, while lead pronounced was led is the mineral). Also there were those loopholes that I had pointed out before. Other than that, this is a great story.
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Title: chapter 9 Reviewed By: rose of vegetasei On: June 06, 2005 13:20 CDT Comment/Review: Making my way through the fic. ^_^ I found an inconsistency, I believe...you have Goku in Saiyan armor in this chapter but in the previous chapter I could have sworn he wore his orange gi. But the armor seems more fitting. I think on some of your sentences you use too many words in describing like "breathed hot breath"...that's a bit much..."breathed hotly" or "hot breath tickled against Goku's body" something like that sounds better and doesn't make the sentence seem so choppy. But you write well, it's just needs a little more work in some areas. Can't wait to continue reading.
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Title: Finished to chapter 6 Reviewed By: rose of vegetasei On: June 03, 2005 15:13 CDT Comment/Review: I only had time to read up to chapter 6 but plan on reading the rest. Oh, and like Vegeta didn't plan on that happening...it's a conspiracy...why else did he have vaseline? LOL This is a wonderful fic. Quite interesting and well written. You have a nice style and the events flow very well. And the two Saiyans' need to find more of their kind makes a lot of sense too. I found a glaring mistake though in chapter 2 I believe: "Without thinking, Gohan grabbed Vegeta by his torso and lifting him up in the air"...when did Gohan enter the picture? Last I checked there was only Goku and Vegeta on the ship ^_~ Can't wait to read more.
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Title: The Odd Couple Reviewed By: Viandra [MediaMiner Member] On: May 31, 2005 19:03 CDT Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10 Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10 Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10 Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10 Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review: Wow, that was amazing. I accidently stumbled across your fic today and could not stop reading it, until I was through. It`s breathtaking and easily held me captive. I enjoyed reading it very much and am looking forward to you continuing with it. You`ve got a way in writing that tickles ones imagination and thus the whole fic reads as if you are watching a film. The story is great and the characters are well defined. Keep up that excellent work. It defenitely was worth every hour I spent on my PC reading it. You really are talented and just have acquired a new fan. Many thanks and best regards, Viandra
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Reviewed By: lordofthepies On: May 30, 2005 10:52 CDT Comment/Review: Reconciliation...from the hands of Vegeta- who'd have thought? It seemed that Goku was more surprised by that than his ascension. I loved the detail in this chapter, from where it was used to describe Vegeta's fighting style (which was so true to the show! He does head butt people, and I found that to be a very nice piece of detail. Its the little things that count. The general way he fought I found very true to the show), the way you actually showed the link between Kakarotto and Raddoon, which was a detail I appreciated reading, rather than writing it so it was just stuffed to the side. It was interesting to see the way they reacted to each others impending doom- even at the end. I loved the bit where Vegeta realised he'd ascended too- his reaction was so easy to picture. The scene at the end was wonderfully done too- I liked the way Vegeta's apology was lead up to, and his frustration in saying it- yet again, details which make the scene all the more pictureable, (Is that a word?...) and the emotions realistic. And your commissioned piece by Rena Sama is awesome too.
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Reviewed By: HSaiyajin On: May 22, 2005 00:19 CDT Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10 Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10 Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10 Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10 Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review: GAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAH! I can't believe that you could be soo evil as to leave me hanging by a thread over the treacherous cliff!! Grrrrh [anyways!] The story is coming along great! And I wish that you hadn't ended so abruptly on this chapter...
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