| "The Odd Couple" Reviews/Comments [ 82 ] |
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Reviewed By: redmakesmehot On: July 28, 2005 15:38 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
dude, i freaking love this story, im really sad that you havent updated it in for like ever, but i do love this story and im still waiting haha. thanks
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Reviewed By: HSaiyajin On: June 10, 2005 20:23 CDT
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ur going to kill me with this!! [groan of frustration] gaaah!
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Title: Finally finished
Reviewed By: rose of vegetasei On: June 07, 2005 10:00 CDT
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Wow. What a great plot. It'll be interesting to see where the rest of the story goes now. It was nice to see Goku and Vegeta reflect a bit on their wives and the difference in their relationship with them compared to with each other. But I would say you may want to be more careful in proofreading. I found some spelling and grammar errors. Such as "lead" versus "led" (the later is the past tense of lead, while lead pronounced was led is the mineral). Also there were those loopholes that I had pointed out before. Other than that, this is a great story.
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Title: chapter 9
Reviewed By: rose of vegetasei On: June 06, 2005 13:20 CDT
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Making my way through the fic. ^_^ I found an inconsistency, I believe...you have Goku in Saiyan armor in this chapter but in the previous chapter I could have sworn he wore his orange gi. But the armor seems more fitting. I think on some of your sentences you use too many words in describing like "breathed hot breath"...that's a bit much..."breathed hotly" or "hot breath tickled against Goku's body" something like that sounds better and doesn't make the sentence seem so choppy. But you write well, it's just needs a little more work in some areas. Can't wait to continue reading.
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Title: Finished to chapter 6
Reviewed By: rose of vegetasei On: June 03, 2005 15:13 CDT
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I only had time to read up to chapter 6 but plan on reading the rest. Oh, and like Vegeta didn't plan on that happening...it's a conspiracy...why else did he have vaseline? LOL This is a wonderful fic. Quite interesting and well written. You have a nice style and the events flow very well. And the two Saiyans' need to find more of their kind makes a lot of sense too. I found a glaring mistake though in chapter 2 I believe: "Without thinking, Gohan grabbed Vegeta by his torso and lifting him up in the air"...when did Gohan enter the picture? Last I checked there was only Goku and Vegeta on the ship ^_~ Can't wait to read more.
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Title: The Odd Couple
Reviewed By: Viandra [MediaMiner Member] On: May 31, 2005 19:03 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow, that was amazing. I accidently stumbled across your fic today and could not stop reading it, until I was through. It`s breathtaking and easily held me captive. I enjoyed reading it very much and am looking forward to you continuing with it. You`ve got a way in writing that tickles ones imagination and thus the whole fic reads as if you are watching a film. The story is great and the characters are well defined. Keep up that excellent work. It defenitely was worth every hour I spent on my PC reading it. You really are talented and just have acquired a new fan. Many thanks and best regards, Viandra
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Reviewed By: lordofthepies On: May 30, 2005 10:52 CDT
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Reconciliation...from the hands of Vegeta- who'd have thought? It seemed that Goku was more surprised by that than his ascension. I loved the detail in this chapter, from where it was used to describe Vegeta's fighting style (which was so true to the show! He does head butt people, and I found that to be a very nice piece of detail. Its the little things that count. The general way he fought I found very true to the show), the way you actually showed the link between Kakarotto and Raddoon, which was a detail I appreciated reading, rather than writing it so it was just stuffed to the side. It was interesting to see the way they reacted to each others impending doom- even at the end. I loved the bit where Vegeta realised he'd ascended too- his reaction was so easy to picture. The scene at the end was wonderfully done too- I liked the way Vegeta's apology was lead up to, and his frustration in saying it- yet again, details which make the scene all the more pictureable, (Is that a word?...) and the emotions realistic. And your commissioned piece by Rena Sama is awesome too.
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Reviewed By: HSaiyajin On: May 22, 2005 00:19 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
GAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAH! I can't believe that you could be soo evil as to leave me hanging by a thread over the treacherous cliff!! Grrrrh [anyways!] The story is coming along great! And I wish that you hadn't ended so abruptly on this chapter...
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Reviewed By: lordofthepies On: May 19, 2005 14:49 CDT
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Wow, that is the most eviliest cliffhanger EVER! *glomps* Poor Goku...it looks like Vegeta might back to late... Good chapter, I really see how you captured the feeling of the rift between them and their points of view on it, I especially liked Vegeta's, it was very well written. Looking forward to the next chapter- even more than usual. Hehe
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Reviewed By: vegez_lush [MediaMiner Member] On: May 18, 2005 16:01 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love this fic!! ^.^ I hope you write loads more and soon!!!!! xXx
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Title: The Odd Couple
Reviewed By: Bunnicle [MediaMiner Member] On: April 26, 2005 19:37 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
if you kill vegita, i'll hunt you down and slauter you! *glares*
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Reviewed By: Elenek [MediaMiner Member] On: April 24, 2005 21:44 CDT
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I wasn't crazy with how this story started, but I really like where it is now. I enjoy the politics and the pull on Vegeta's emotions and loyalities. I like the interplay between past and present/future. I'm really looking to see how all the threads in your tapestry pull togeather. I would be interested in knowing how or if the families on Earth affect the outcome. -El-
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Title: Ch.15
Reviewed By: VgGkYaoiGurl [MediaMiner Member] On: April 23, 2005 23:09 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oh God!! Poor Vegeta...well he got what was coming to him...but still, u can't help but feel so sorry for him. I really can't believe how far Vegeta and Goku got, yet they seem to got all the way back to the beginning again. I hope they both pull through. And I hope everything goes well with the other saiyans too. I was also suprised to find out Kakarotto and Raddoon used to be lovers and now will resume to be. This chapter was so good, just like all ur others, so descriptive, for everything. I really can't wait for the next chapter!! I gotta know what happens between Goku and Vegeta!! Please don't let this be the end in their relationship!! Update soon!!!
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Title: *sniffling, grabs tissue*
Reviewed By: New Kitty On: April 23, 2005 21:28 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Aww, he loves him. It's so wonderful. Has Goku finally gotten through to Vegeta? Here's wishing he has finally broken that hard exterior that Vegeta uses to hide his feelings from the universe. Just proves my theory: Love isn't a weakness; it just makes us stonger. Dear goddess, I've gone all sappy again!
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Reviewed By: lordofthepies On: April 23, 2005 10:54 CDT
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Fantastic chapter! So much happened, and it flowed so well! I can see why you made all of this into a single chapter now. The battle was great to read, and I really think you wrote Goku and Vegeta in character very well, the emotions were there and everything, particularly Vegeta's reaction to Goku telling him he was no different from Frieza. Very descriptive, especially liked the description of Vegeta through the battle, with the blood in his eyes. Now I can't help wondering when Kakarotto is going to rear his head...
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