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| "Teamwork 2" Reviews/Comments [ 88 ] | | Pages (6): [ « ‹ 1 2 3 4 5 6 › » ] | Title: Please update
Reviewed By: neko taichou On: June 04, 2006 04:03 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
GAH! please update this. I can't wait to see what Naruto's plan is. I do hope that you haven't given up but I doubt that you have cuz it's a complicated story and I'm sure that it takes a long time to come up with the pure genius that shows up in each chapter. I love this story.
| Reviewed By: wraithguardstaromg On: June 01, 2006 21:58 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
you know i love you asuka. but if you dont update soon, I KILL YOU DEAD!
| Reviewed By: Lee Russell On: May 18, 2006 18:35 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
So many things I would like to comment on. I followed someone's link to your Teamwork story (the most explicit thing I've ever read ^^) and fell in love with your style of writing (very interesting style of writing). I'm a yaoi fan myself, but I absolutely loved the combination of these three together. It just...made sense. Everything is so realistic in this story as well. The way Sakura's dealing with things, Sasuke and Naruto's macho manliness, and the parents' feelings towards the boys. Amazing. It's like, you're inside their heads or something. You honestly take everything into consideration in your writing, which is very skillful in itself. Okay, I loved this chapter. But I loved it indefinitely when I read that one sentence. That one beautifully in-character sentence that made me shudder and envision the most horrible of circumstances for Sasuke. Itachi. Itachi standing over the baby's crib. Wow. Just wow. It's so disturbing because really, if this was the anime, that's probably what would happen. You're so in tune with the Naruto environment it's insane! Okay, now for individual character assessments!!! Fun beans ^^ Naruto: In the story he's older, slightly more mature, a pervert, loud, and annoying. Exactly how I'd picture him. I don't know what people are talking about, because he's so in character it's almost suspicious. Are you sure you're not Masashi Kishimoto in disguise? Hmmm? That would be way too cool. A male manga artist writing yaoi for his anime...heh. Anyways, I really like how caring and sensitive Naruto can be as well, especially around Sakura and, when he needs it like in this chapter, Sasuke. Sasuke: Icy bastard with a stick (or something else preferably ^^) up his ass. Now, out of all your characters, I'd have to say Sasuke is more mild (in character-wise) than I would expect him to be. I'm going to account that for maturity ^^ Sasuke has, and always will be, the one character in the anime that I hate. He drives me crazy with his asshole attitude and his constant angsting. Yet, somehow, I've come to love him (in this fic only, of course ^^). In the anime, he's almost too perfect, like an untouchable, and I hate that. But in this story, he makes mistakes occasionally; he's human. That's great, and it makes me want to actually like him. The awkward way he's trying to develop his relationship with Sakura is hilarious and honestly how it should be. I personally think he's always had a major crush on Naruto, but whatever, Sakura works too. Sakura: Another character I originally didn't like in the anime. It wasn't until I read the manga online, when they're fifteen, that I really started to respect her in all her female awesomeness. Never even once did I think of her as a whore for going at it like a dog with her two best guy friends. It just, as I stated earlier, made sense. And all her emotions concerning the baby are very head on (not that I would know what it's like to be pregnant, hah...^^") She's always so worried about excluding one of her boys (I loved that part in the story) from the relationship, which I think is very cute. In fact, I just think Sakura is cute all throughout the story. Just picturing her when she'll start to show cracks me up. Anyways, I'm sure you're sick of reading this. I just felt this relentless urge to review because this is honestly an amazing story with humor, sexy romance, and psychological insight that it should win some kind of award. In fact, I'm going to make an award up just for you. It'll be the 'Most Amazing and Only SakuSasuNaru Threesome Fanfiction Ever Read by Lee Russell' and people will be like "Wow, that's so cool! We should read and review this story because it got an award!!!" Or not. Ahem, once again, amazing fic. I'm eagerly waiting for the next chapter (can't wait for the exams!!!) so please update as soon as humanly possible (I'll give you cookies?) ~Lee
| Reviewed By: aikotakara (not logged in) On: May 15, 2006 02:01 EDT
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this story is awesome. i really mean it. its been awhile since ive read i good naruto fan fic, with proper grammar and everything. i really enjoyed reading this and i hope you continue it. please update! Aiko
| Title: Love It!!
Reviewed By: eirisbadluck [MediaMiner Member] On: April 30, 2006 00:34 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I absolutely love this fic!! I find the whole concept really interesting and I've never once lost interest in the story line. The idea is very original and I love the way that you keep all three of them so in character and are easing them into the relationship (besides the whole "the night" thing that is). I can't wait to find out what Naruto's idea is - I'm afraid I might go slightly insane if I don't find out soon - what idea he could have had that even Sasuke would agree to it. So please keep me out of the padded rooms and update soon!!!
| Reviewed By: Dampirecat On: April 29, 2006 21:06 EDT
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good job spent the morning and afternoon reading your works, can't wait for the next chapter of the story.
| Title: Geshron Tyler
Reviewed By: GT On: April 24, 2006 21:39 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'm a MM member, but the review board doesn't seem to recognize that I'm signed in. >_< Great Team 7 fic. It's a bit of a shame that Orochimaru is so conviently dead =P, but with what's been happening recently in the original manga, you could make a good case for Akatsuki having taken him out. And maybe Orochimaru having taken one or more of them out himself. There was a 3 year time jump in the manga, from when Sasuke went to the Sound, to the present manga arc, so there's a good case for Akatsuki to have been biding their time in snatching Naruto as well. Though, I do wonder if you'll include the events of Gaara's kidnapping. Not anytime soon, would be my guess, since Sakura wouldn't have the skills as a Medic-Nin to handle Sasori. So, yeah. Cool story, got me hooked, where normally a yaoi tag would have me running for the hills, especially Naru/Sasu. Not that I have anything against yaoi, or the pairing perse' but it's usually to heavily emphasized for my tastes. So, this 3some I find interesting for your interpretation of the social dynamics in Team 7, especially the way Sakura and Naruto are so fluent in "Sasukespeak". ^_^ Also interesting for the effort the 3some have to go through to deal with the parents, and the rest of the village, and the angst Sakura's pregnancy is causing, what with Kyuubi's influence and all. The dinner episode went quite well for the 3, consindering... They didn't get thrown out, no gauntlets or ultimatums where thrown down, so things could get better. Of course, there's still social pressure that could be brought against Sakura's parents by the anti-kyuubi faction. Maybe that's something that Iruka could help them deal with, since his parents died during the Kyuubi rampage, and he's been a close companion of Naruto for several years. At least to help Sakura's mother realise that Naruto is so much more than just Kyuubi's container. The storyline I'm eagerly anticipating is the Chunin Exam. Don't envy you trying to come up with something for the 3 stages, though. Team 7 could have a bit of fun out-intimidating the "thug" type ninjas seen in the manga and anime- Naruto flashing them the "evil" eye and letting his chakra flare would be good for some laughs. I'd also like to see a scene where a rival team thinks they got the drop on Sakura left all alone, and as they loom over her and try to freak her out, the one in the middle finally realises that he is in fact alone, and that Naruto and Sasuke are on either side of him. And that Sakura "helpless" act was just that. :evil grin: I hope Sakura gets a chance to cut loose in the 3rd stage (I'm assuming she's going to be there =P), let innerSakura have some fun. I'd bet she'd be pretty vicious if she got going, especially with Medicnin training. A few hamstrings here and there... ^_^ Definately looking forward to more.
| Title: Nice!!
Reviewed By: TL [MediaMiner Member] On: April 13, 2006 20:43 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I read the first one and i think the story is perfect!! PLEASE update. Much luv, Trunks lover
| Reviewed By: Fujiwara_san On: April 12, 2006 22:25 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love you. You're brillant.
| Reviewed By: DarknessReader (NotSignedOn) On: April 09, 2006 10:18 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
At first, I thought you stopped in this fanfic...Now I'm happy to know I was wrong! I love the story and hope you update soon!
| Title: I feel happy, oh so happy...
Reviewed By: Pokey the Great [MediaMiner Member] On: April 09, 2006 03:15 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I don't know why anyone complains about them being OOC. Everyone seems to be fairly in character to me, not that I'm an expert at identifying the personalities of Naruto and co. This recent chapter was long and very satisfying. Will the next be in Naruto's POV? In any case like the ratings say, I really enjoy this story. And I happily await the next update be it short or long ^_^
| Reviewed By: Chihiro1985 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 08, 2006 23:19 EDT
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the story is very realistic! I LOVE IT! Though I like it sometimes when everything falls into place!
| Title: Yay!
Reviewed By: Pokey the Great [MediaMiner Member] On: March 30, 2006 22:31 EST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
well...I just wanted to let you know that I love this story. It's one of my favorite fanfics ever! ^_^ I'm looking forward to whenever you update again.
| Title: Awesome
Reviewed By: GohanStealer [MediaMiner Member] On: March 09, 2006 22:39 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really enjoy reading this. I can't wait to find out if it's Sasuke or Naruto's baby!!
| Reviewed By: didi kat On: February 08, 2006 11:29 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
* poke poke * Hey still there? Need a new update please. * makes cute puppy eyes * Pretty Pleease ;-)
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