| "Lost Hopes" Reviews/Comments [ 113 ] |
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Reviewed By: KADJFHKDXJFH On: November 18, 2006 10:53 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 2 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 1 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love your story's plotline! Kouga and Inuyasha make such a cute couple, especially when Kouga gets all possessive about Inuyasha. However, your grammar and whatnot is atrocious. Do you have a "beta reader"? If you don't, you need to get one; if you do, they're not doing their job. Normally, if I can figure out what you mean, I just overlook grammar, spelling, etc. I knew what you meant in most cases, but when I really stopped to read the actual words, I only confused myself. I believe you said, "we are anything but proud to have you at our side"? I interpreted it as, "we're not proud to have you with us". I know that's not what you meant, but that's what you wrote. You also said, "he should have disrespected his alpha"? I interpreted it as, "he should not have shown respect to his alpha". Again, I know that's not what you meant, but again, that's what you wrote. Most of the time, I know what you mean, but these mistakes are annoying and a little distracting. Although some of them are funny, like, "wedge a war". I think the word you're looking for is "wage". What you wrote, I couldn't even interpret that, it doesn't make any sense at all. I would like to tell you that I'm not harshly criticizing your writing because I find your elementary mistakes funny. I'm doing it to make you a better writer. I prefer not to sugarcoat the truth.
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Reviewed By: sesshys numba1 gurl [MediaMiner Member] On: November 14, 2006 18:29 EST
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awe kouga so possesive on inuyasha jeez lol. but its cute, update soon
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Reviewed By: inuyashawifey [MediaMiner Member] On: November 11, 2006 10:10 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
awesome story i hope to read more u r an awesome writer later and kagome desevered what is happening 2 her later
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Reviewed By: Zetsuii [MediaMiner Member] On: November 10, 2006 23:10 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
oh boy...stupid Kagome...thats what she gets for being an ass...but I cant wait for the next update...your writing is as good as ever...and I cant wait to read more of your work so update soon please
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Reviewed By: Zetsuii [MediaMiner Member] On: November 09, 2006 18:08 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
wow...it has been a long time since I have read this story...I ended up rereading it all over again since I missed maybe a year of not reading it I think...but OMG I am so happy that Inuyasha is pregnant again...I cant wait till the birth...like I said last time your story is awesome and the flow is amazing...saw some errors in grammer and spelling but that cant be helped...I hope to get an update soon from you...so please update PLEASE
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Reviewed By: slytherinstranger On: November 08, 2006 20:16 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Update! Update! Update! Please! i know i havent read this story in the last couple months, but now you've got me hooked! It's been a month please update!!!!
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Reviewed By: veka On: October 29, 2006 01:09 EST
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Gees, I hate Kagome now. I hope she ends up old and alone with a bzillions cats as company. So I love your story but i wish Inuyasha's character is portrayed as a hormonal female but as the stubborn and male-ly male that he is. Keep it going.
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Reviewed By: inuyashawifey [MediaMiner Member] On: October 22, 2006 19:29 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i don't know if the story is finished yet but it is totally awesome you are a wonderful writer i hope to read more
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Title: Chapt. 31
Reviewed By: Bibi11 [MediaMiner Member] On: October 14, 2006 21:43 EDT
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You go Sango!! Great job of telling Kagome off! I loved this part - really good reading. It was a nice summary of everything too. Kagome is showing a lot of immaturity for her age at 19 - she was more compassionate and caring at the beginning of their adventures. Maybe she has a 'little' problem with her hormones? Kagome hasn't put the information from Sango that Inuyasha has already been pregnant together with Kouga telling her that she killed his child. Poor Sango and Miroku, what a way to find out happend to Inuyasha's first pup. How will Kagome react when it all sinks in? Enjoyed Miroku driving the point home that Inuyasha is a demon at heart and she really messed up with her treatment of him.
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Title: Chapt. 30
Reviewed By: Bibi11 [MediaMiner Member] On: October 14, 2006 20:39 EDT
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Kayia and Katashi had twin boys!! A sign of good fortune I believe. What are their names? HURRAH!! Inuyasha freed himself; that was so sweet and wonderful. He sure has come a long way. Nice action scene involving key members of the clan. Kagome is so dense--she thinks the world revolves around her not matter what the situation. She didn't even react when Kouga yelled at her for trying to hurt his mate. Talk about hearing only what you want to hear! Ooooh, can't wait to find out what Hotaru has planned for Kagome. Maybe she'll wind up washing diapers for all of the clans new pups for the next year by hand or cleaning up all the little 'accidents' that the pups will make while they're learning bladder control!? Or …..???? Very nice to see Kirara here; she has been the only member of Inuyasha's former pack that really understood him I think. She was supportive when he was trying to teach himself how to use his sword and mothered him when he was hurt and exhausted. I hope she gets to stay around for awhile; she would be a great 'pupsitter'. Now to read your next chapter and see what else happened.
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Title: oh
Reviewed By: greentresses [MediaMiner Member] On: October 11, 2006 16:29 EDT
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Oh can't you just feed her to the dogs already... I'm sure they'd have quite the feast,lol actually no she deserves to suffer, instant death is much to nice for the dumb Miko. Well any way I'm sure what ever you do will be more than worth the wait, nice update! Cheers! oh yeah and Go SANGO! I always liked her better than Kagome any way
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Reviewed By: Slayer66 [MediaMiner Member] On: October 11, 2006 14:41 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
When Kagome told Inuyasha to sit I almost cried even though I was convinced that you wouldn't have had Kagome hurt Kouga and Inuyasha's pup. But I hope Inuyasha yells at Kagome, or says something that makes her feel like scum. 10/10 and I can't wait for your next update ^.^
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Reviewed By: sesshys numba1 gurl [MediaMiner Member] On: October 10, 2006 19:44 EDT
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YES!!! FINALLY THAT BITCH GOT WHAT SHE DESEREVED. shes lucky i wasnt sango i would've beet her to a pulp until she shut up anyway lol that was a great chapter i hope she dies or something i would love u forever is she did :) lol update!
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Reviewed By: SoarMore_FlyHigher [MediaMiner Member] On: October 09, 2006 08:37 EDT
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My god. Kagome is horrible! I hope your going to bring her personality back to normal by the end. Anyway, it was a good chapter (Go Sango. Go Sango!) but I saw a lot of spelling mistakes and words missing that I normally don't see from you. Keep up the good work.
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Title: Thank you
Reviewed By: greentresses [MediaMiner Member] On: September 20, 2006 14:18 EDT
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Oh thank you thank you thank you... I'm not sure I'd be able to stomach my favorite Inuyasha being attacked by that vile witch. Have I mentioned that I absolutely love your Sango, if I haven't then I'll say it now, I absolutely love you Sango. Thanks ever so much for giving Kagome what she deserves and I look forward to more. Cheers!
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