| "A Mother For Rin" Reviews/Comments [ 140 ] |
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Title: GOOD WORK
Reviewed By: amori kuwabara [MediaMiner Member] On: August 19, 2005 23:34 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love all of your chapters in this story. You surprise me beyond measure at your ability to rebound from your writer's block. I like the new twists that you have given into this story. With Kagura and Kagome now becoming friends as I hope that they will become close. It seems that also enrages Naraku. I really like this story alot. I wonder how the Kimigra incident will go over though with Sess wanting to make it all proper and Inuyasha just fuming beyond no end. His need to protect the females in his pack is rightfully justified. Please let me know when you update and place me on your list. I will email you with my information. Thanks for putting another BRIGHT HAPPY SMILE on my face. I look forward to another update on this story. Thank you so much.
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Reviewed By: shadowwolf_02 (nsi sorry) On: August 19, 2005 08:43 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
i've just read the last two installments in this story....somehow i missed the other one, damn mm.org! lol. ty for the email updates! anyway, wonderful chapters....a little short, but still very good. i've noticed that there were a few spots where you missed a word, but other than that i didn't notice any major problems. keep up the wonderful work! i look forward to the next update! :)
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Title: soon please
Reviewed By: habby On: August 09, 2005 09:01 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
ok now i think i can't wait much longer without crying when do, at least, think that you're going to have capter up? pleas make it soon because i'm starting to get tears in my eye.:'(
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Title: grate
Reviewed By: habby On: August 07, 2005 17:23 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
please get a good -no grate- idea soon because you're killing. i bet you like that you're killing all your reader's. but its me who's in the most pain. i know that because when you said that you had writers block i almost cryed. and right when it was come to sasshomaru's part. but i really do hope you get a good idea and not just put something up to make us happy. i want you to be happy with what you wrote. happy with yourself. but don't take for ever. please have SOMTHING up by at least tomorrom. and don't worry if you don't get something up by then and it almost takes a month to get something up and all your readers have left you. at leaset know that i'll still be waiting. will bye and good luck =D
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Reviewed By: slivercat On: August 06, 2005 12:13 CDT
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Where's the writer's block?
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Reviewed By: dawnstar28 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 06, 2005 03:28 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i love it, i just read the entire thing through, i can barely find anything wrong with it, but i cant think of what they are right now-_-'but it wasnt much, anywayz, keep up the great work, and i look forward to your next update!^__^ciao, dawn
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Reviewed By: shatter the sky comes quietly On: August 02, 2005 16:28 CDT
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Great story so far, though Sess was a little off in this chapter. He would not say 'do not move one bit,' it would probably be just 'do not move.' Undoubtedly, Kagome would be like Sango in that she would not have a hymen. From everything that has happened to her, it would have broken ages ago. That's not to say it would not hurt or feel strange though. You also missed a couple words here and there, you might want to fix that. Keep up the good work.
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Reviewed By: shadowwolf_02 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 01, 2005 19:23 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
can i hold you to that? lol. here it was just getting rather good and you leave me hanging. lmao! meany! cant wait for the next chappie.
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Title: OK
Reviewed By: amori kuwabara [MediaMiner Member] On: July 31, 2005 22:32 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I liked this chapter too but it saddens me that Kagome cried. She has been through so much but now at least she can give herself time to heal. As I hope that the next chapter will be a good Sprite lemon/lime. I really want you to continue your writing. Thanks for making my weekend wonderful. I await your next update. Thanks again.
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Title: Relief
Reviewed By: amori kuwabara [MediaMiner Member] On: July 19, 2005 00:24 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This chapter is a good one. I am glad that Rin has awoken with Sess holding onto her. She needs to know that he still cares and loves her very much. I am also glad that Kagome has finally awoken. Thank goodness for Inuyasha and his way to make her drink her tea. I found that rather heartfelt and touching even though it was sealed with a kiss. I highly doubt that Inuyasha and Sess will be going anywhere without Kagome but I do think that Tsukina and her mate and her son can help Kagome to understand the whole courting issue. I hope that she is allowed to stay with them. Maybe they can help her with her Miko powers too since their son is a healer too. I can see great friendships and bonds being formed between all of them. I hope that she will keep both children with her for a time so that she can get to know Rin better too. It would be nice to see my mother daughter bonding in this story as well. I know how worried Kagome was about Shippou and I am relieved to see that he will be OK as so will she be too. Hopefully the worse is behind them. I await your next update. Thank you so much for this story too.
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Title: Writer and Appreciator of a Great Writer
Reviewed By: Dianara On: July 17, 2005 20:13 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
You've got a great concept here. Sesshoumaru always tended to let things go to the last minute before he would realize how much he would lose. Nice job of playing this one out. I have to say I don't usually play Sesshoumaru out as nearly so confused, but that's your option. Sesshoumaru isn't easily fooled or confused and tends to get his facts assuredly before making conclusions. But I love the way you let his emotions play into the game. Perhaps you might want to let him remember that Rin knows nothing about mating rituals of the Youkai, so his little mating display while they were fighting would not have produced the results he wanted. Just some food for thought. Dianara
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Title: THANK YOU
Reviewed By: amori kuwabara [MediaMiner Member] On: July 15, 2005 00:50 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This chapter is so good. I am deeply heartened that Shippou woke up after his ordeal with the deer although he must have a pounding headache. I am also deeply heartwarmed that Sess was able to get Rin to eat and drink even if it was in her sleep. Now if only Kagome would wake up and see the ones that she loves right by her side. I am hoping that she will be OK. She went through quite a traumatic ordeal. But she needs to wake up and know that she is very much loved for who she is and not for the lust of two men. Please update as soon as you can. Thanks alot.
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Title: Interesting
Reviewed By: amori kuwabara [MediaMiner Member] On: July 13, 2005 00:59 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This chapter definitely leaves me awaiting another update from you. I would really like to see some heartfelt dramatic situations happen with both Sesshomaru and Inuyasha that would make Kagome wake up. I also hope that she will be able to get through to Rin because she really needs her right now. It wouldn't surprise me if Kagome would decide to stay where she is and keep both children with her. My heart really goes out to Rin and everything that she has had to endure. I hope that she will pull through and make it. I know that Kagome is diverting her miko powers to Shippo to help him heal. She needs to heal herself too. so that she can help with Rin. Please keep writing this story is getting better with each chapter that you write. Thanks so much for all this as my imagination continues to go into full blown overdrive. Thanks for everything. Please update soon.
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Reviewed By: toolazytosignin On: July 12, 2005 06:06 CDT
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I'm assuming the name Kimigra was an attempt at making up a Japanese name... I give you props on trying, but have to take them away just the same for not doing your homework on it. In Japanese, with the exception of "n" a consonant is ALWAYS followed by a vowel. I suggest that you find some sites or something with the character charts and also, a japanese-english dictionary for any other japanese words you may feel the need to use. Don't use 'em just 'cause you saw 'em in someone else's fic! Chances are, they know japanese less than you. Oh, and for future referance, adding original characters that may possibly have a chance at being paired with one of the actual characters is a real turn-off for a lot of readers.
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Reviewed By: ice_princess_1185 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 12, 2005 01:03 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oh, please make Rin and Kagome be alright!!!!!!~!_!~
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