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Reviewed By: denisud On: July 19, 2006 16:53 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
I know where you got the idea for that last chapter. Also I think an epilogue is in order. Maybe Our two primary girls finding out about Nurse Mahera's 'treatment' of Keitaro. Seems so sad that he'll be tormented and abvused the rest of his short insane life dennisud
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Reviewed By: rdelancy On: July 19, 2006 16:31 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
not usually a big fan of darkfics but very good
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Reviewed By: SAnSa On: July 19, 2006 13:24 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Another good fic. This is a great history but i think the end was a bit rushed(this idea had material for a lot more chapters). anyway i hope this fic gets a continuation or at least an alter ending. maybe not now, but in a not too distant future.keep the good work and i cant wait to see what new fresh idea youll come up with.
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Reviewed By: Tulkas On: July 19, 2006 10:12 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Well, that was unexpected. While I suppose it was a decent ending in its own right, it does feel like some of the character development was leading elsewhere. The repercussions from Naru's little ordeal had the potential to drag out for a while on its own, not to mention Yuki's odd change in the fourth chapter, something which seems to be brushed aside in the end. Also, the issue with Motoko and her eagerness to "spar" some more seems to be left hanging. I'd like to hope that you're considering writing more than one ending. Consider it a challenge to your creative abilities, if you will. All in all, a great story, but I guess I'm just a sucker for happy endings.
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Reviewed By: rentauri [MediaMiner Member] On: July 19, 2006 09:04 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow this story was great, distrubing but great. A couple of things kind of ate at me in the end. First what were Yuki's feeleings. She seemed to always like to manipulate him but there were times that she was truly loving. I figured see enjoyed the manipulations and result but was there something under that. Also Motoko, it appeared as though you were going to use her for something big but then she kinda faded into the background. That wasnt really a big deal but it seemed strange. Overall a great story, nice style and characteriztions were top notch.
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Reviewed By: Alzrius [MediaMiner Member] On: July 19, 2006 08:21 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
An excellent fic, truly. My only complaint is that Yuki's juxtaposed feelings aren't ever fully explained. When she shows a bit of kindness towards Keitaro at the end of chapter four, that leaves you wondering what she really feels, but that's then lost amidst her use of him at the end of the fic. Does she really just see him as a sex-toy to be manipulated, or does she have some real feelings for him? The end of the fic seems to make that pretty clear, but I wonder. Also, as something of a lark, I kind of wish we could've seen Shinobu's reaction to finding out what her mother and Keitaro were doing (to say nothing of how her mother is in bed). I look forward to your next work!
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Reviewed By: Scyggy [MediaMiner Member] On: July 19, 2006 08:06 PDT
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That's... Fucked... Up... and that's all there is to it.
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Title: Dark...yet good
Reviewed By: A-Z Mark II [MediaMiner Member] On: July 19, 2006 07:13 PDT
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Nice wrap-up. Love Hina is such a happy place in cannon, but this one got a lot of the feel of NGE. Interesting contrast, my friend. Job well done!
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Reviewed By: denisud On: July 19, 2006 06:57 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Talk about getting screwed litterally and figuratively. I think you got some inspiration from a writer we both know huh! ;-) Great job of writing, and I would continue with theat writer's influence and write a comedy or romance after such an angst filled story! dennisud
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Reviewed By: runestar On: July 19, 2006 03:37 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 6 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
Why do I have a feeling that poor Keitaro will be stuck there for a very long time? Though I was wondering how you would handle the rest of the tenants - how they would deal with the issue etc. Never mind, I can always bug you for more details at thefanfiction forums...:D
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Reviewed By: GenocideHeart [MediaMiner Member] On: July 19, 2006 03:13 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Whoa. That was... the WTF meter just blew up. And poor bastard... geting stuck in the hospital the exact person who drove him mad was in. And HEH to the NGE reference. It does explain why Shinji is so screwed up...
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Reviewed By: SimmyC [MediaMiner Member] On: July 19, 2006 01:46 PDT
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Whoa. That was... whoa! Poor Keitaro. Going to spend the rest of his life hold there? Whoa. I knew this story was going to be dark by what was happening to Keitaro, and to what Yuki was doing to him. But I truely did not expect that ending! I was thinking death. Heck, when Keitaro callapsed, I was thinking he was dead, or at least serverly injured. But then, in a way, what he got? Might be worse than death. Ooooo. Can't wait to hear some of the other people's reaction on this one!
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Reviewed By: SAnSa On: July 16, 2006 23:47 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Holy shit! great work, i wonder how did you get this idea, its just some of the best love hina fics i have read (aside from ships) i dont know if u plan to have keitaro f##k all the girls or just keep it to yuki and motoko(i prefer t 2ond motoko is my favorite caracter XD) pls update soon
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Reviewed By: Sick On: July 15, 2006 23:38 PDT
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I just thought up this crazy idea when I was thinking about how Yuki, and Motoko were smiling at him... What if the girls planned this to Keitaro? o.O Turn Keitaro into the secks god! ;) innocent Shinobu isn't so innocent! lol... yeah I know stupid but it's crazy and weird and completely twisted
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Reviewed By: JErosion [MediaMiner Member] On: July 15, 2006 19:18 PDT
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This is great really great. Now I wonder how long Keitaro will stay in that alley. Or if he'll get around to fixing that sqeak in Motoko's room. but how long can he keep this up without someone noticing. Either way Keitaro needs to fuck someone in the ass.
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