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| "Love's Smirking Revenge" Reviews/Comments [ 148 ] | | Pages (10): [ « ‹ 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 10 › » ] | Reviewed By: mehrabad [MediaMiner Member] On: July 27, 2008 20:05 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
You're a great writer and I'm not saying that lightly. Not only is this a gripping storyline, but it is also well-written. I like your characterization of the protagonists; they're not perfect and they're sure as hell not heroes. But, they are perfectly flawed. Despite it being a dark chapter, I think that it was a necessary chapter in order to better understand Kagome, not only in relation to her reaction against the villain, but also her earlier behavior towards Inuyasha. I like that your Kagome was not just brave and feisty when she was faced with who she thought was her past lover, rather she was realistic because she feared him at the same time that she wanted to defy him. And, I really enjoy the fact that she's not this one-dimensional "nice and innocent" girl that a lot of other stories make her out to be. So as they say, keep up the good work and I look forward to reading the next chapter =)
| Reviewed By: ThisIsMeSmiling [MediaMiner Member] On: July 27, 2008 18:05 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
AMAZING. I had a feeling Naraku would be the villain of this story but when he mentioned that his vendetta was personal a few chapters back I did NOT expect what you just did. So Kagome killed his brother? That makes things interesting. I can't wait to see what happens when InuYasha comes barging in there. Till next chappie!:) ~Amber
| Reviewed By: me On: July 27, 2008 16:31 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Appeals to my curiousity.
| Title: Chapter 19
Reviewed By: Eye's of Eden [MediaMiner Member] On: July 27, 2008 14:43 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
One of the best things about you is the way you describe the settings. In the chapter "Been a while" when Sesshoumaru was in the Casino, I thought that was the best description of setting I've ever read (That includes the professional writers too) Your other fields of literature, like dialogue and emotion, are fantastic as well, but I think your specialty is setting. You really "put me in the story" if I may. Once again, you've done that. And I feel like you've really made a big step with Kagome. I must admit, I'm curious to see how Onigumo was killed. From what you've told me so far, I have reason to believe the murder was justified (seeing as she's not in jail) but it still creates tension and I can't help but feel a little disappointment in Kagome's last word of the chapter, "Free." Not that I blame her, of course. The things that she went through certainly justified the murder, but you know from all the other fics I've read it's quite a different picture of Kagome that you've painted here. I'm used to that "nice girl" vibe from her. But who knows? From the flashbacks it certainly seemed she was that way before Onigumo came onto the scene, and I can certainly see that change from "nice girl" to EXTREMELY fiery as completely reasonable when you take that into consideration. Either way, it certainly adds another twist and DEFINITELY would keep me reading. All questionable reactions aside, it was another great installment and you remain one of the few writers that I can actually see professional ability in. Ever since I stumbled upon this story, I've tried to model my fic, "Equilibrium" after the style that you use in this story. Can't wait for the update! ~Eyes of Eden
| Reviewed By: bigfanofiykag [MediaMiner Member] On: July 27, 2008 09:27 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Now I can finally breathe. That last chapter had me holding my breath with anticipation. Man, I love this story. I'm out of town and can't check my email for updates, but as soon as I was able to check on new updates, I had to read this one. This story is awesome. I'm just a little pissed at InuYasha for taking so damn long to look for Kagome, but I hope that he finds her soon because she's in real deep dog poop now. Well, please update as soon as possible. This is like one of my favorite stories. Any you are one helluva an awesome writer.
| Reviewed By: Kryptoinuyasha [MediaMiner Member] On: July 17, 2008 22:35 EDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'm speechless. This is one of the best pieces of AU Inu fiction I've read. I normally don't get hooked into reading many AU fics(major canon fangirl)but you've got me...hook, line, and sinker. I'm very partial to the story line. And to be honest I'm a little biased too (come from a cop family and my dad was in homicide for 15 years. Oh, the stories I could tell you....). You're opening chapter was fantastic. Inu's reaction to the reporters was a typical day in the life of "keeping the liberal scum sucking press out of the investigation" (my dad's saying BTW). You dipict very realistic crime scene and use of terminology is terrific. Though, I do have a tough time believing a lieutenant would take a verbal beat down from a detective that is 2 ranks below him, no matter how green he is. (*giggling* I'd make him a corporal. Bit more believable that the Detective could make him practically cream his shorts. *wink*) Inu's brash hard-as-nails exterior is spot on. Love Kagome's razor edged tongue and attitude (not afraid to flaunt what she's got to get her story). Your take on Kouga is great. *rubbing hands together deviously* And now Sesshy has been added to the mix......muhahahaha. Love where your taking the story! Hope you update it soon!
| Reviewed By: chanda [MediaMiner Member] On: July 16, 2008 13:45 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I am so glad you updated, great chapter! Ah there so close. Congrats on the wins :D! Also, look forward to your updates on ED. Well look forward to your next chapter. Chanda
| Title: and I'mstill here
Reviewed By: Kibo [MediaMiner Member] On: July 16, 2008 12:29 EDT
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I was skimming over the AN and my name jumped out at me. Woo hoo! It's the little things that make me happy these days. So, you're welcome! And I can't wait for the big rescue chapter where Yash busts in kicking asses!
| Reviewed By: Kags- -dogboylover [MediaMiner Member] On: June 23, 2008 17:21 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
wow, this is such a greeeeeat story!!!! really amazing, i looooove your style, you write very well!!! i read in your profile that you sometimes tend not to finish some of your works, please do not do that with LSR :P I(and probably everyone else too)need to know how you intended to end this story, so please don't give up on it. It'd be such a waste of good writing, it's unbelievably hard to find such good Inuyasha stories these days. ^.^
| Reviewed By: yashkags4eva [MediaMiner Member] On: May 27, 2008 15:35 EDT
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This is amazing! I only just started today and already finished all the chapters you've written. So, yea that was definately an evil cliffy, but now i know that inuyasha will be there in the next chap hopefully. Im pretty sure i know who the guy is but ill just wait...is shessy gona be in more chapters? great piece of work! i love it! update soon!!!!
| Reviewed By: Kibo [MediaMiner Member] On: May 27, 2008 08:35 EDT
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Evil cliffy... but Inu has to show up next chappy, so I'm happy the drama is no longer going to be stretched out. It is so Naraku. And I love how Fluffy totally shot down Kagura. Is he going to be further involved in the story? Or is that merely a cameo appearance?
| Reviewed By: Teddy Bear [MediaMiner Member] On: May 27, 2008 00:47 EDT
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Finally a decent Alternate Universe fic that not only is comprehendable in grammar and diction, BUT it has a Inu/Kag pairing. Am I the only one who is seeing less and less of these lately? Anyhow, commendable work, exquisite use of imagery and the description leaves nothing to be desired. It is a fic that captures what I think should be the true essences of both Kagome and Inuyasha. Gruff, gentle, demanding, powerful, all-dominant, and passionate are traits of our favourite hanyou mixed so intimately and correctly with the stubborn, compassionate, open, frank, determined, sweet and loving nature that defines Kagome. I thoroughly enjoyed this story and I hope that you will continue to grace us with your literary genius and update soon. I pray that GOD watches over you and covers you in his blood. Rebuke the demon that is "Writers' Block" and if possible read and review story of mine "Love's Hidden Desire".
| Title: Chapter 17
Reviewed By: chanda [MediaMiner Member] On: May 24, 2008 00:44 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
OMG!!! Langus, you're bad...LOL. Nice cliffy, I guess, I will just have to wait until your next update! I know now that it isn't Sesshomaru, I am pretty sure it's Naraku, but still havent' given us to much detail. Well, whoever the hell he is, did something to Kagome? Probably raped her, by the fear she is emanating! She said the also killed him? Damn Langus! This is a superb Mystery! Until next time, Chanda
| Reviewed By: ilona [MediaMiner Member] On: April 15, 2008 10:27 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love this story! I really like how inuyasha is portrayed as well as Kagome, and this story is one of the few that i found and liked in which Kouga isnt a "bad" guy who is bashed by everyone!! Cant wait for the next chapter.. Oh, and a minor correction - Promytheus wasnt the greek god of fire. He was a titan who stole fire from Zeus and brought it back to mankind after Zeus himself removed fire from mortals due to punishment...(Basically it was Promytheus' fault since he tricked Zeus when he was making an offering to Zeus. The end result was that the mortals ended up with the good meat and Zeus' offerinf was a bunch of ox bones) When he was found out, Zeus punished him by tying him to a rock and letting vultures eat his regenerating liver over and over until , years leter, Hercules frees Promytheus from the rock. Hephaestus (pronounced ifestos in greek) is actually the greek god of fire, metal etc and he was the one that actually made Zeus' lighting bolts :p im very sorry if this offends you in any way and for taking you time in reading all of this, but i was always a sucker for greek mythology.. :P:p
| Reviewed By: angelbabe17 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 10, 2008 19:06 EDT
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no problem! life happens. thanks for updating. i'm so glad they finally found a clue!
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