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| "Ultimatum" Reviews/Comments [ 109 ] | | Pages (8): [ « ‹ 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 › » ] | Reviewed By: Rainstorm61879NSI On: September 26, 2008 22:28 EDT
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YOU ARE EVIL!!!!!!!!!!!! that is just a terrible cliffy to leave us with.
| Title: Ch 17
Reviewed By: lavie [MediaMiner Member] On: September 21, 2008 02:30 EDT
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it's been awhile, so I reread your story from the beginning. it's pretty good. FYI: ya missed a word in "She swiped her palms under [ ] eyes." Anyway, will wait patiently for next chapter. Thanks! Ja ne!
| Reviewed By: nightshade41230 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 01, 2008 01:29 EDT
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love the story I can't wait to read more hope to see it soon
| Reviewed By: AkureiAbduction On: July 25, 2008 14:31 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
OH My Gawd. Please update soon. :0 I love this story.
| Title: wow
Reviewed By: SFP [MediaMiner Member] On: July 20, 2008 05:18 EDT
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Love it! Love it! love it! your story is great, glad I read it! P.S. by the way, thanks for the review.
| Title: wow
Reviewed By: SFP [MediaMiner Member] On: July 20, 2008 05:17 EDT
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Love it! Love it! love it! your story is great, glad I read it! P.S. by the way, thanks for the review.
| Reviewed By: missingnin On: July 12, 2008 21:41 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
nice chpater, the tension is killing me. Most people would probably be against kagome's plan simply because she's helping out naraku in a way, but i have to agree with kag's, i don't want anyone to mess with my mind. I wonder exactly how her plan works though. this story seems to be bringing out my sadistic side once again, its so much fun to be that way. So will it truly be a betrayal? Could it actually be still called a betrayal when the others are betraying you, or is it simply vengence? It was funny that the dreams could actually have been stopped a long time ago. It's sad to think that family could be so easily swayed even though yusuke is in a precarious situation, and now when it seems that he and the rest of the tentei can finally work with kagome even though they violated her like that, an ultimatum comes into play. I actually want to see Kuwabara and yusuke break from their decision to give up kagome, even though it's not exactly their choice. My how the fools shall suffer, but i wonder exactly what will kagome's sentence be after the whole naraku business tides over, provided she lives through it.
| Reviewed By: Broken Tainted Wings [MediaMiner Member] On: July 12, 2008 16:24 EDT
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So.... beautiful!!! I really loved this chapter!!!
| Reviewed By: inu_luver_2004 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 10, 2008 01:20 EDT
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I love it!! It is so nice to see Kagome with a spine. Please give me more!! I am so loving this fic!!!!!!!!!!!
| Reviewed By: Jessica Cowley [MediaMiner Member] On: July 09, 2008 23:23 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Love it. But why did you end it. I want more. I been waiting for this story to update for so long. =]]]]]
| Reviewed By: madmiko [MediaMiner Member] On: July 09, 2008 05:27 EDT
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Well, that was completely wicked angst-ridden. Even when they found out how wrong they had been about her, they still treated her like she was completely expendable. I'm not sure I understand Koenma's stance at all, -- that it would be better to trade Kagome for Keiko. If Naraku wants Kagome, that means that he will benefit from having her somehow. If he benefits, then he will most likely become stronger. If he becomes stronger, they're all screwed. And how is one human's life worth more than another one, -- especially when the other one is a priestess of no little power, (though it keeps disappearing), and has knowledge of the Shikon jewel. If he was measuring the worth of the individual to the Spirit World, then Kagome would be way above Keiko. Even if they wipe her mind, if Naraku HAS her, there is always the chance he will be able to use her to get the jewel. And Koenma has already deduced that Kagome and Hiei must have a bond. Are none of them going to consider that wiping her mind and/or letting her be killed might have some effect on him? I really was hoping for more fallout when everyone discovered Hiei's connection to her. And why should Yusuke care if someone's "fucking" his cousin when he's willing to give her up to someone who they've SEEN torture someone? And he knows that she's already been through that. I don't think Yusuke would be able to live with himself. And Kuwabara would NEVER agree to let a girl be turned over to someone to be killed or tortured. Hmmm. I was just wondering if they begin wiping Kagome's mind, will Hiei immediately lose control of the Jagan? Skipping past all that, though, I really expected Kagome to volunteer to be switched for Keiko. Really. I was completely shocked when she didn't. Hiei's protests that Naraku must have been controlling him in those dreams really sucked. Kagome should have jumped on it and agreed that he must have been controlling HER, too. Really, this was an awesome chapter, but I've got to tell you that I don't have any good feelings for anyone in the story except Kagome, and I'm a little iffy on her right now. I didn't really see any torment in Yusuke over giving up the little girl who is his cousin, who he was so worried about in the beginning, to a monster. If their relationship is broken, he is the one who broke it. Kuwabara isn't championing her and seems rather ... lame. There's no growth or development of a relationship with Hiei and Kagome, and he's really just an ass, considering the dreams and that he OWES her. (What if she calls in that favor right now?) And Kurama is being quite an ass, too. Don't get me wrong, I'm all for ruthless on his part. But I'm not sure he's being all that smart here. Keiko is nothing to him. I would think he would insist on finding the jewel first. Kagome's knowledge of that just makes her the more valuable of the two. And since when would this group of "heroes" hand over someone to the enemy? No sneaky plan? Wiping the memory of the one person who knows where the Shikon no Tama is really doesn't seem all that smart. She's also the only person who can purify it/keep it purified. If it's ever discovered, without HER, it will become corrupted. And why didn't they just keep on with the shifting through her memories thing until they found out what happened to it? They didn't go back NEARLY far enough. They should have rewound to the Feudal Era battles and come forward from there. *sigh* So many, many questions and thoughts about this. How am I supposed to work on my own intrigue when you've got all this going on? LOL!! I'll be checking out your blog to see what all you have to say. And I sure hope your writing goes smoothly and quickly, -- I'm on the edge of my seat! ^_^
| Reviewed By: Nyuka [MediaMiner Member] On: June 13, 2008 21:45 EDT
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wow that was nice of Hiei leave her in the middle of the street why don't you...geess...well On one hand I'm glad she got her powers back but on the other Naraku took them away again so that stinks....what is Kagome going to do nowk.....hmmmmmmmm I wander if she could go to the past and stop Naraku befor all this happened...sigh....well even thought thats doughtable I'm sure you'll come up with something...well untill next time....................Nyuka
| Reviewed By: Hawaiianhoney2030 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 11, 2008 19:06 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
she is the jewel isnt she? the jewel wasnt hidden, it disovled into her, in result turning her into the living breathing jewel? i'm probably wrong, i just seem to have really random ideas lol. Great chapter ^_^ nice and long. cant wait for the next one
| Reviewed By: chibibunny [MediaMiner Member] On: June 05, 2008 18:32 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Okay, the more i read, the more i soooo fall in love with the depth of the characters. i got a bit confused with the whole Hiei switching time period thing- if that is what it was... but its okay. wow- totally love this!
| Reviewed By: chibibunny [MediaMiner Member] On: June 05, 2008 12:28 EDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
AMAZING! Great writing talent! You have a totally original mindset, I have never heard of a story like this before! I don't even like cross overs, but this one is GREAT! You've made a believer out of me =] Love your writing. -Bunny
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