| "Purity 9: Subterfuge" Reviews/Comments [ 2359 ] |
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Reviewed By: AtamaHitoride [MediaMiner Member] On: January 13, 2009 06:13 PST
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Yay brotherly love! And you've GOT to love Sydney I mean come on!
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Reviewed By: theablackthorn [MediaMiner Member] On: January 13, 2009 05:19 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great chappie I can't wait to see what Sydnie has to talk with V about :)
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Reviewed By: Sovereignty [MediaMiner Member] On: January 13, 2009 00:29 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
wonderful chapters!!!!!! V is very cute too... even when her top come off... although I think that is the point where Evan thinks she is cute... If you update any where on the 20th of Jan, could you pretty please, with Gin on top (I've been recently re reading her and her brothers story) say happy birthday to me???? (Thank you!!!!)
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Reviewed By: WhisperingWolf [MediaMiner Member] On: January 12, 2009 20:26 PST
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Oh yay! I loved doll, that was a wonderful chapter. So does Evan even have the slightest inkling as to why V's uncomfortable with kids? When will she find out about the pup's and his families more eccentric heritage? And what I've been wondering most - will we hear more about the family that V missed going to see early on in the story? More questions to be answered later I guess. It makes the story so much more enthralling. You spin a good yarn dear and I can't wait for more! ~Wolf
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Reviewed By: Meru [MediaMiner Member] On: January 12, 2009 20:14 PST
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Olivia is adorable!! *heart* once again; I love sydnie XD I wonder if shes going to be a big part in V and Evan's getting together. you know; *cant think of the word GAH!* instigate i guess XD
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Reviewed By: Dark Inu Fan [MediaMiner Member] On: January 12, 2009 17:52 PST
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I have to wonder if those bikini's were the most un-revealing ones he had... Keep up the good work, dark
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Reviewed By: monkeyseemonkeynodo [MediaMiner Member] On: January 12, 2009 16:17 PST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I have to say I was estatic when I saw the song you chose for this chapter. I absolutely love that song. It's one of my favorites! I loved this Chapter! We got to see Evan and his Niece and Nephew and We got to see Valerie a little more relaxed. Bailey is a funny little boy! Everytime I type Valerie's name I think of the song "Valerie" by Amy Winehouse. haha Well keep up the great work! It's finals week for me and your story keeps me from getting too stressed out about it. ~MSMND (Charity)
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Reviewed By: OROsan0677 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 12, 2009 13:28 PST
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At the ending of that chapter Bailey reminded me a little bit of Toga in a way lol. I love Olivia she's just so adorable! So, I take it that Sydnie recognized what Evan was prepared to do and that's why she didn't push the subject further?
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Reviewed By: Sesshomaru4Kagura4ever [MediaMiner Member] On: January 12, 2009 10:37 PST
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It might be interesting if Sydnie ever manages to meet a woman without her first instinct being to claw her... Olivia is SO cute, by the way! I can imagine her... KAWAIIIII!
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Reviewed By: Valdimarian [MediaMiner Member] On: January 12, 2009 09:45 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
You know this whole story has been far more sugary than I'd have expected from Even (Zel Roka) Zelig. And I'm freaking LOVING it! It's like a fruit popsicle covered in sugar and it's just too adorable. I hope this is the one long story that doesn't take a dark turn, but even when it does I know it'll be great, and even cuter in the end when they do get together.
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Reviewed By: oblivion-bringr [MediaMiner Member] On: January 12, 2009 09:32 PST
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lol i meant to say red hair and green eyes. my bad :-D. p.s. i love MUGEN's style so thats a compliment. :-D ok ok im going now. lol
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Reviewed By: oblivion-bringr [MediaMiner Member] On: January 12, 2009 09:29 PST
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this was a cute chapter. i picture Olivia looking like my nephew when he was a newborn only with red hair and light brown eyes. (my nephew is about to be 2 but he has the most striking eyes and he was a very... pretty baby. people thought he was a she! lol) he gives me pecks on the lips like that too. its so cute. and hes so articulate he calls everyone by their first name. and calls other kids his age baby. lol but anyway. how old is bailey and olivia? and i meant to tell u before that for some reason when i read descriptions of evan's fighting i picture his style being like that of mugen's from samurai champloo. update soon
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Reviewed By: malitiadixie [MediaMiner Member] On: January 12, 2009 08:44 PST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Ha ha ha!!! I love Bailey and Olive. And Kitty being her natural jealous self. I missed these two, Bas and Sydnie. Thanks for the great chapter. Boobies!!! lol.
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Reviewed By: Titiana [MediaMiner Member] On: January 12, 2009 02:08 PST
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Something has been bothering me and I feel I should share with the class. Don't you get tired of hearing all these people say nothing but great things about your work. The sad part is even if we as a reader wanted to give you constructive criticism, we couldn't. You're too perfect!!!!! So here I go... Great job, really another awesome chapter added to your list of awesomeness. (I'm just teasing--- about the first part, it really is amazing all of the work you've done, that I'm perfectly serious about).
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Reviewed By: OROsan0677 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 10, 2009 20:57 PST
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Aw, I like what Evan says at the end, on how he wants his dream woman instead of his dream girl! Too bad Valerie doesn't know she's that dream woman yet.
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