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| "Purity 9: Subterfuge" Reviews/Comments [ 2359 ] | | Pages (158): [ « ‹ 120 121 122 123 124 125 126 127 128 129 130 131 132 133 134 135 136 137 138 139 › » ] | Title: Chapter 31 (OMG! **hugs Sue** another chapter!!! Huzzah!): Evan's pulling out the big guns, huh?
Reviewed By: iloveanimecartoons [MediaMiner Member] On: November 10, 2008 20:33 PST
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Wow. V, not grasping the biz the way he does, is, most likely, gonna collapse by day 3. Poor mortal she is. And I wonder if it also has to do with his stmina as a technical hanyou that gives him his vim and vigor or if it's more his dedication to the craft, the rush of the crowd, the feel of the music, the comraderie of the band and road crew, the ability to be him, in all his deviant glory, and get paid for it that gives him the get up and go to keep at the strnuous hours tha he knows good and well would tax the hell out of her. Part of me thinks "well, damn, Evvie--taht was like swatting a fly with a U-Haul truck, dude." while anothe thinks thisw experience will go a long way to establishing truths and strengths...and vulenrabilities, in a good light. I feel the experience may just be the changing point needed to get the lawyer/client aspect of their relationship on more even footing, with better results and more openness. But, damn, Evan...you sure got her good--right in the pride. Poor V... It's sad how partly, I just chuckle imagining gthe shenanigans they're gonna get into. **choked snort** Oh, sorry 'bout the caps for the last comment--Caps Lock was pushed accidentally. I wasn't shouting.
| Title: chAPTER 30: hMMM...TRUTH'S COMING OUT A TAD BIT, HUH?
Reviewed By: iloveanimecartoons [MediaMiner Member] On: November 10, 2008 20:19 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
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INSTINCTS. bEYOND BEING THE "HELLION" THAT EVERYONE EXPECTS HIM TO BE AND THUMBING HIS NOSE AT AUTHORITY, EVEN eVAN, iM SURE, KNOWS THAT FINE LINE...NO MATTER HOW MUCH HE TRIES TO MAKE v AND jUDGE lISTER THINK OTHERWISE. bUT, THAT WAS INTERESTING, HEARING v STATE THAT SHE THOUGHT SHE WAS AUTOMATICALLY SIZED UP AS MUCH AS eVAN THOUGHT SHE DID HIM. fOR DIFFERENT REASONS, BUT ALL THE SAME, PREJUDICE SUCKS. i SEE THEM GETTING TO THE HEART OF THE MATTER ABOUT A LOT OF THINGS WHEN v JOINS HHHIM ON TOUIR. wELL, IF SHE AGREES TO. sOMEHOW, OU TSIDE OF HER GENERAL BLUSTER AND RESTRAINT, i THINK SHE'S AT LEAST CURIOUS ABOUT THE GOINGS ON , ON THE ROAD AND, THE WAY SHE'S BEEN TRAILING HIM AROUND LATELY, WILL SHE REALLY BE ABLE TO GO NEARLY A month WITHOUT HIM? hMMM...
| Reviewed By: GalacticFire [MediaMiner Member] On: November 10, 2008 19:53 PST
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You know.. I'm just a bit curious myself just how a rock star works. I hope Valerie doesn't get punished too bad!
| Reviewed By: Meru [MediaMiner Member] On: November 10, 2008 19:19 PST
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iloveanimecartoons' review on chapter 29 talking about 'Evan's layers' made me think of Shrek, and onions. Now I'm going to think of onions whenever I think of Evan xD
| Reviewed By: Meru [MediaMiner Member] On: November 10, 2008 19:15 PST
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okay so that whole little pop can opening glass of ice waiting this was really cute. Did anyone else find that really cute lol, shes falling into routine with him =3 gah I love them together. Sue if for some crazy reason you make her stay with Pinkle I will fer serious cry. "Valerie Denning, esquire" made me laugh lol So I think V should TOTALLY just spend the week at Evan's house, bring an overnight bag xD then she can wake up same time as him, possibly not as early as she would wake up at her own house. !!! then!!!!! they can commute 8DDD and make breakfast together again X33 asdfghjkl;' THEN!THENTHENTHEN!!!!!!! when they spend a month together on his mini tour(cause like i said ITS GONNA HAPPEN!!!!) shes gonna figure out she loves him. I kinda want her to find out that hes a hanyou before they start 'seeing' each other.... I need more updates ;-; -HEART- Sue
| Reviewed By: OROsan0677 [MediaMiner Member] On: November 10, 2008 17:16 PST
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Oh, that's very sneaky of Evan, purposely setting up a bet V is sure to loose; but hey, if it helps him win her over, more power to him lol. Thanks for the chapter, Sue!
| Reviewed By: Dark Inu Fan [MediaMiner Member] On: November 10, 2008 13:59 PST
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Four AM... Heh, I'm a bit of an anti-morning person. I bet that Valerie will be late and Evan will have to go over to her house to wake her up. And then she'll have to do her hair and makeup in the car! I did choir, so I have a bit of an idea of what'll happen, but this'll be interesting to see what happens. Blessed be the energy drinks! Keep up the good work, dark
| Reviewed By: Sovereignty [MediaMiner Member] On: November 10, 2008 12:34 PST
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This is a VERY good way to get up in the morning!!! *inner head squeal!* Evan is gonna kill her... I bet she will wonder if he does drugs to keep himself active... lol... 'cause there is "no way" a normal human being could do that!
| Reviewed By: malitiadixie [MediaMiner Member] On: November 10, 2008 10:21 PST
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Evan is so evil. He knows damn good and well she won't be able to keep up. I wonder how long it will take V is fess up that it's too much for her. Poor girl. She has no idea what she's gotten into.
| Reviewed By: monkeyseemonkeynodo [MediaMiner Member] On: November 09, 2008 20:57 PST
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OMG i didn't get an email so I didn't know these chapters had come out! Well anyways GREAT JOB!! I love this story and Evan is SO ADORABLE! I love Bitches too haha and of course Maddy is a fav :D well keep it up!
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Reviewed By: iloveanimecartoons [MediaMiner Member] On: November 07, 2008 16:40 PST
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**sing song** Someone's jealous, someone's jealous (…and it's so obvious). Evan sees it, Bone sees it. Hell, I'm sure even Maddie sees it. Can't wait to see Bugs and Bitches comment on it. But, ah, yes, denial; it's such a warm and comfy cocoon, isn't it? Though, the more I look at V's view of Evan and his life, the good, the bad, the glamorous and the interpersonal, it seems more like a resigned envy, a "he's a train wreck waiting to happen, but such a free, happy, fulfilled and, okay dammit, sexy as hell one, to boot"…ah, but look a little deeper, V; you're starting to see there are layers, now are you brave enough to pull all of them back with an open mind? At this point, I'd say no. meanwhile, Evan's getting his jollies, I'm sure, off of his own personal corporate stalker. I KNEW Evan saw her. And I KNEW he was gonna comment and catch her off guard, but Bone even surprised me. I love seeing her off guard, though. It's, I dunno, cute or something and I'm sure Evan is as content as he is bemused with his constant companion-half a block away or across the restaurant positioned in a dimly lit corner. Oh, this is just too cute. And he's loving every bit of it and, more and more every day, her. *grins knowingly and high Fives Sue** As always, you go, girl!
| Title: Chapter 28: Aw, just look at them cuddle!
Reviewed By: iloveanimecartoons [MediaMiner Member] On: November 07, 2008 15:41 PST
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The more I read this story, the more I believe V's pretty lonely. I can only gather and, conscience pricking and all, subconsciously, she just craved his nearness and the warmth she knew he'd make available to her, without quarter, no strings, because she's getting him. Yeah, she infuriates him and all that; he's Evan. But she's getting the inside scoop of the core of the guy, too. Not just for the practical lockdown she expects him to adhere to but the fact that he's letting her see him. And, between mates, certain facets don't seem likely to be well-hidden. Those little shivers, V…those moments where you can't help but smile, laugh, blush 'cause he's in the general vicinity…**sing song** You wanna kiss him. Yeah, I had a teeny bopper moment there. I'm done. But, Evan seems to borderline violating the mate pact to me, albeit in future tense, with Marvin and V being engaged and all. Makes me wonder what Cain or Sesshy or even InuYasha would have to say about it. But, there I go, going off topic…moving right along. I so want them to give it a go but the whole fiancé thing is there and…yeah… Well, the tension's building so I'm half grinning like and idiot and grimacing for the future. I generally like Marvin but, well, it's not really fitting in all ways, his and V's relationship, is it? It's more like good friends with occasional trips into sexual release and then, it's back to the 50's. V strikes me as a passionate person who either doesn't know it, forgot it, or has a general dislike, a bad memory or string of them, that turns her off of that side of her. Might go back to the whole "don't want to show everyone the blonde bombshell I really am so they'll always take me seriously thing". This was just Kool-Aid smile sweet.
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Reviewed By: iloveanimecartoons [MediaMiner Member] On: November 07, 2008 15:05 PST
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Well, what mischief can Evan get into now that Dieter's been called off for home? Oh, the mind of the restless, reckless and young at heart, big kid Evan can be. Thoughts tick away, I tell ya. Feel ya pain, V…bored, indeed. Still, it was cool learning more about Dieter and how the two hooked up. Their interests do blend together well, though--two artistic souls, gellin'-yet, Dieter strikes me as a calmer less angry version of Evan, IMHO. He may do wild things with Evan occasionally, but I think, in his own way, he helps to center him a bit, especially with him already having found his mate and starting a family. Made me wonder, just for a sec, if Evan was a bit envious. Not in a mean way, but that genral envy/appreciation a friend may get when observing wedded bliss and familial contentment. He's growing up and, coming from a very loving family, if hhe wants to admit it or not-maybe…but, that's wholly conjecture, extrapolation on my part…any, really, not all that applicable. (See, Sue? Told ya I ramble.) But, I'm starting to see, now, that sex may be more of a time killer, a slight means of preoccupation over stimulation for Evan (or, so I gathered in my own odd way of thinking). Well, all mysteries will be revealed, right? Oh, grant me the patience…
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Reviewed By: iloveanimecartoons [MediaMiner Member] On: November 07, 2008 14:40 PST
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Okay, this entire chapter was just …endearing and had me squeezing my backpack like it was my favorite ted-um, pillow, yeah, **hrumphs** that's it, pillow. OMG, it was just too perfect! Evan's giving, nuturing, laid back state with the kids was just too perfect and I'm so glad V got to see it. It's always a blast to see her preconceived notions drain away in light of good old fashioned fact-evidence-sight. The fact that he knew the entire time was just the cutest. And when he called her out and gave her that flower, I was blush CITY. Her first flower! How appropriate that it's from her mate, thought she doesn't grasp that, yet. Heh. Makes me wonder how she'll digest the entire other species/fountain of youth/marking and bonding thing. But, I'm getting ahead of myself, huh? Man, I wanted to see V with her younger siblings while reading this chapter, Sue. I wonder how the reunion, well, if she gets one, will be. But, back to THIS chapter, it was big ol' warm fuzzy and I ADORED it!
| Title: chap 25: hmmm....
Reviewed By: iloveanimecartoons [MediaMiner Member] On: November 07, 2008 14:14 PST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i read and i couldn't get the thought out of my head. same as always, actually: WHO SHOT JR???? I KID...REALLY, THIS CHAPTER REINFORCES MY BELIEF THAT EVAN'S COVERING FOR SOMEONE. His peeps have his back but to what avail? I thibk it only weakens his case and prolongs the inevitable. could be wrong. i shall see, Oh, V's inner ramblings tickled me and Bitches?Saints preserve me, she's wild--like maddie, belle and Jillian in one (minus her preferences)--the anti-Gin. imagine those two in a room. well, no, take some of that back. she does have some of Gin's openess minus the general naivete. anyway, this ledt me with more points to ponder. And Bone...he really has Evan's back. I like him more and more, like how I like his manager. good read, this one. oh. P.S., the post, 2 posts down... **adjusts collar** that was for chapter 23, not 21... hell, i'm blind on top of hunting and pecking onr-hand--joy. NEwho, Good one.
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