| "Mayumi's Story" Reviews/Comments [ 79 ] |
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Reviewed By: inu-kags4ever [MediaMiner Member] On: January 15, 2009 22:19 EST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I know how she would feel in a way, u know my parents are overprotective...i loved it keep on writing...please:) Mayuim's story is so awesome! I love it,i love it, i love it!!!!!
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Reviewed By: CatLover260 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 14, 2009 22:47 EST
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Woot new update so quickly!! I am still giggling about how disappointed Mayumi is with having to spend time with "Uncle Dai" while sneaking off to spend time with Daichi in the past. Thank you for including some Mayumi/Daichi time. It was good to see their interaction, his reaction to her being hanyou and the fact that they protected Hiroshi by not making him do the patrol alone. The way they did it allowed Hiroshi to maintain his honor but still watch out for him. I wouldn't have been surprised if the adults in the village hadn't done the same things the first few times the boys went on patrol. I look forward to the rest of the story and to see how Mayumi and Daichi's relationship develops and the outcome of it all.
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Reviewed By: inu-kags4ever [MediaMiner Member] On: January 14, 2009 20:55 EST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I loved it! i like how Diechi gets so worried about mayumi:) and how inuyasha gets so protective, i like how inuyasha and kagome still know how one can't stay away from the other:)keep on writing! can't wait for the next chapter!
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Reviewed By: CatLover260 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 13, 2009 14:25 EST
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really liked seeing the interaction of Mayumi and her friends getting her ears pierced. Dai had a great reaction and way of rescuing her from it. It was also great to see the hints of the future relationship between Dai and Mayumi when they were talking about her security, though I would have liked to see some snippets of time spent with past Dai. If Mayumi wants to stop wearing the kerchief she could try a wide headband, it should work to conceal her ears if carefully placed and pinned. You really have my interest piqued about who the youkai is that has come back. I can think of several possibles and I am curious as to which one it is.
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Reviewed By: kokoronagomu [MediaMiner Member] On: January 12, 2009 12:41 EST
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wondering about the trouble making youkai and if he has anything to do with dai's wife/mate mayumi's disappearance? ♣ as always, good stuff! ♥
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Reviewed By: kokoronagomu [MediaMiner Member] On: January 08, 2009 02:52 EST
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what a confusing life. i feel for yasha and dai and can see where they're both coming from. one hopes you can justify it all in the end. ♦ seems the romance has just begun. kudos ♥
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Reviewed By: CatLover260 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 07, 2009 22:50 EST
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Nice segue between past Dai and future Dai. I can understand both his action of attempting to give her the rabbit and his reaction to her calling him "uncle". And Inuyasha was being so normally over protective that he really was clueless as to what he might have done wrong. The complaints from Inuyasha about the smell from the wolves and Mayumi liking the smell says a lot about her future relationship with them. Is some of the wolves that came over actually descended from Mayumi and will they give the relationship away? I can't wait to see how you answer these questions in future chapters.
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Reviewed By: inu-kags4ever [MediaMiner Member] On: January 07, 2009 20:30 EST
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AWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWW! i loved it it was so sweet! keep on writing!
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Reviewed By: kokoronagomu [MediaMiner Member] On: January 04, 2009 19:35 EST
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happy family snapshots. or like seeing home movies, little incidents that bring smiles to ones' faces. ♥
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Reviewed By: CatLover260 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 04, 2009 01:15 EST
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
The playground teasing is so perfect it is great. I liked the scene with Inuyasha taking his daughter into the woods to comfort her and to reinforce the care not to be seen and to not hurt others. It is about time poor Kagome gets the degree that she has been working on for so long. I was a little surprised that none of her/their friends were there for the graduation. I would like to know what Peter, Noroki and the others are doing now. Maybe you can bring them in later for later.
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Reviewed By: inu-kags4ever [MediaMiner Member] On: January 03, 2009 18:20 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
loved it! keep on writing:)
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Reviewed By: CatLover260 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 02, 2009 00:37 EST
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I am so glad to see the start of this story. And you have made it an intriguing start. I love the ties that you have made with the past and the future and the stories that have come before. The way she refers to Inuyasha is touching, I always suspected that any daughter of his would be able to wrap him around her little finger. It was so funny when she mentions that she did not make the connection between the past Daichi and the older one that she also knew until too late. It must have been hard on Daichi watching her grow up without giving away too much or letting her know who he was. I am looking forward to the rest of the story.
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Reviewed By: Chase65 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 01, 2009 19:21 EST
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Yeah, more! So glad you are continuing the future/present/past series!
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Reviewed By: kokoronagomu [MediaMiner Member] On: January 01, 2009 18:58 EST
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wow, that was beautiful-- i don't usually read the 'next generations' sequel stories, preferring to stick with canon characters but there are exceptions, like 'lucky ones' sequel 'the coyote child' by terri botta, and now this. -not bad company. ♥ great stuff as always, ginny
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Reviewed By: Knittingknots [MediaMiner Member] On: January 01, 2009 12:16 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
A great start to a new story. Looking forward to reading more!
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