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| "Chains" Reviews/Comments [ 115 ] | | Pages (8): [ « ‹ 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 ] | Reviewed By: Cody Thomas being lazy On: April 21, 2010 11:52 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
It shouldn't be so cute and sweet for Aya to be that helpless ...in Yohji's arms... being carried gently and saved without a word of protest... GAH! no no no no no no no! Bad Cody! Stop enjoying misery and angst so much!... ahh what's the use, I never listen to myself anyway. ^_^ Apron!Aya?! Really?1 for ME?! I LOVE you soooo much! *SQUEEEEE!*
| Reviewed By: kat716 On: April 02, 2010 04:14 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'm a lazy reviewer, I admit it. I like it. Please write more. Did you notice that it switches to bold print in the middle of chapter 6? It gave me a serious Whoa! moment. So, Aya just watched Yohji kill someone. I can just see him saying to himself in his head "No matter what, no matter what, no matter what. What the HELL?!?" Can't wait for the next bit. There's bound to be an akward moment... or twelve. N PS I like author's notes.
| Reviewed By: Noizchild [MediaMiner Member] On: March 27, 2010 22:49 EDT
Comment/Review:
My mistake on the post crazy part. I confused you with another writer. But don't post author's notes in the chaps.
| Reviewed By: Amyeyl (haven't logged in in years) On: March 27, 2010 19:38 EDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
It's been a long time since I've read a WK fic, and this was nice to stumble across. As the others have said this site doesn't seem to get much in the way of traffic. I'm thoroughly enjoying this so far. I'm always a sucker for Aya in distress. And Yohji's pet care line/thought, ah god. He's such a special boy. I don't know how it will carry into later chapters, but I like the stark, to the point nature of the early ones. It's a nice fit for me. (I personally enjoy author notes, as I like hearing what's going on inside their heads in relation to chapters, etc. Provided they're not inline and marked as such, I say it's completely up to the author whether or not they're included)
| Title: Hmmm...
Reviewed By: Noizchild [MediaMiner Member] On: March 27, 2010 18:01 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oddly attractive. Aya being submissive is just foreign to me. But, you had my attention sold with the prompt. I noticed that you go post crazy with the chapters with your fics. I suggest posting a chap and then waiting for a little bit (Like a day or so) before posting the next one. Also, don't do author notes in the chapter; I find them very annoying. Follow my advice and you will do good.
| Reviewed By: Cody Thomas being lazy On: March 27, 2010 17:40 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oh hell yes! Yohji you rock! I loved loved LOVED the mental image he had of asking Omi if he could keep his new 'pet', but when he got that guy with the wire, I sooo cheered out loud and startled the cat, it was great!
| Reviewed By: Cody Thomas the lazy On: March 23, 2010 05:50 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
SQUEEEEEEEE! oh you just gave me such a lovely mental image, Aya kneeling and Yohji clipping the collar on...oooh I love it! And you're gonna throw lovely naked men in a bed together just for ME?! ^_^ I feel just so lovely and special right now, you have NO idea *is rapidly turning to goo* You know my readers seriously owe you some thanks, because I just got inspired for my third chapter of 10 minute break (AKA Master. Executive.) because of this chapter. It's an original of mine, the first two chapters are already posted on AFF.net but I've been stuck on the third chapter for over a year now, so thank you! It's under my regular pen name if you wanna read it, but it might not be your thing, what with all the hardcore male on male sex, kink and S&M running rampant like PWP... oh wait it IS a PWP! But let me know if you check it out, because I would love a critique beyond 'add more chapters' and 'I loved it!'
| Reviewed By: Cody Thomas being lazy On: March 20, 2010 11:34 EDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
oooh Slavefic! Nice! I can't wait to see more, seriously I love this and if I could I would marry your brain. Although the images of the villans is mentally escaping me at the moment, so I'll have to check out pics when I get home tonight. *sigh I hate being so bad with names. by the way, you're giving me many wicked ideas of my own, so thank you! I only hadn't reviewed yet because I haven't been on for a few days *has inconsistent internet access* so I got to read all of the pretty at once! Whoot! Another reason you might not have as much traffic and therefore reviews here is because, well this site isn't nearly as popular as FF.net or AFF.net. It kinda used to be, when FF.net first started being a douche, but not so much anymore. You might have better results at AFF since I believe you are still boycotting FF.net and their stupid 'no NC17!' rule that no one follows. I know you have a profile there, I tried poking you on it a few times. Please update more I loves this!
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