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| "Chains" Reviews/Comments [ 115 ] | | Pages (8): [ « ‹ 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 › » ] | Reviewed By: Degenerate On: May 18, 2010 05:52 EDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love this story :D You write really well, and it's really interesting! Pllleeeeeaaassseee please please keep up with the frequent updating!!
| Reviewed By: Anonymous1191 On: May 17, 2010 18:15 EDT
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Oh wow, that was really well-written. It does seem strange now what exactly Schwarz is doing with Aya's sister. Because after Ran is sold, they don't really have any point to keep her other than to threaten Ran (Schuldig's mind reading doesn't even work over long distance, right?). Also, if they actually do kill her, they no longer have any leverage on Ran (well, only when he finds out that is). Argh this is interesting. I really wanna know what's going on. =) You write very well!
| Reviewed By: Cody Thomas the lazy On: May 17, 2010 10:52 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
"Go Yohji! Whoot! ^_^ Actual progress in the right direction!" *Brushes Omi's and Aya-pet's hair* "Omi love, will you hold Ken still so I can do his next? I doubt Yohji will put up so much fuss. Honestly Ken, you're acting like it's some violation of your masculinity to have a woman brush your hair." O_O "You're a GIRL?!" *Glares* "You know, I normally take that as a compliment, how the hell did you make it an insult? Boys, hold him down, lets have a little fun with my new little Ken doll." "Noooooo!" I'm only borrowing him Miko-san, I promise I won't hurt him. *hears muffled whimpers coming from the torture chamber.* '^_^ and Schuldig is still a little tied up, he found a few uh 'toys' that are keeping him quite occupied. thanks for the update! they makes me happy!
| Reviewed By: Cody Thomas being lazy On: May 15, 2010 10:36 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
wow two more chapters! You spoil us Miko! ^_^ those flashbacks just make me want to hurt those bastards for harming my beautiful Aya-pet. I hope Yohji can earn his trust soon, it would be Sooooooo cute to see them cuddling!
| Reviewed By: Cody Thomas being lazy On: May 13, 2010 14:40 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow TWO chapters! No matter HOW sick I am I feel spoiled! I feel so bad for Aya-pet, this is quite the confusing world he landed in, and Farfarello is worrying me a LOT. I hope he hit his Femoral Artery when he stabbed himself. *get's the Hentai Slug's attention with a neon pink thong* Pssst if you really want out, I still live in Las Vegas, about 2 miles from the Strip, and I have a whole fully furnished bedroom I don't really use. Come on, how does a little 2 week vacation sound? You know you're not gonna get a better deal than that! All I ask is for you to wear your bishie form to attract prey-I mean pretty gay boys, and give me some of the most perverted ideas you can think of which I promise to write down faithfully. What do you say? ^_^ and Miko, since you're offering so nicely and Aya-pet is asleep... *Grabs Shuldig's leash* Get over here you disgusting piece of flesh, after what you did you don't even deserve to be called human. You are going to clean up every room in my house and you get no breaks until you are done! If you don't move fast enough, you will feel my whip, and I promise you, I'm not going to hold back. When you are finished, you and I are gonna have a little instructional time in my Torture Chamber. It's filled with all kinds of toys I think you'd be interested in, most are fully functional replicas from the Spanish inquisition, and some are my own invention. I'm going to demonstrate how each and every one of them works, and YOU get to be the demonstration model! Won't that be fun? I hope your interwebs come back soon Miko, I love reading your writing!
| Reviewed By: Cody Thomas being lazy On: May 11, 2010 13:59 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Well it's progress. Hey Omi, pick up a toothbrush for Aya while you're at the store will you? Hmm thanks for the offer, but I don't like Schuldig much, especially in this fic. Unless you are willing to loan him out as torture chamber fodder I don't think I should take him. *brushes Aya-pet's hair.* I think itis best if I stick with pretty little Aya-pet. ^_^
| Reviewed By: Cody Thomas being lazy On: May 06, 2010 23:09 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Aaaaaand I was right... Ok Yohji, Pet recovery 101. First off, get his ass in bed and order him to stay there if you have to. These should help keep him occupied. *Hands over tray full of books, word searches, sudoku, crosswords, dvd's, and hand held video games.* You will keep him in said bed at all times except for bathing and natural functions. Next, I hear you aren't very handy in the kitchen and that's ok, I'll let you know the EXTREMELY easy way to nurse him back to health. Mix a 50/50 solution of water with non-acidic juice like apple or grape, then add a quarter teaspoon of salt. Have him take SMALL sips only. This will hydrate him, raise his blood sugar, help him retain fluids, start to balance his electrolytes, and stave off hunger pains. Once he has kept down a full glass you can make a tasty, healthy 'quick soup' by mixing a can of chicken or beef broth and a small can of V8 juice then warming it in the microwave. When he starts holding things down regularly, add protein and starch to help him recover muscle and put on weight. Put rice or soft tofu in the broth, give him a few crackers, or give him some mashed regular or sweet potatoes on the side and gradually work up to eggs and meat. But if you give him any dairy before he's up to at LEAST eggs, I will kill you myself. If his blood sugar drops dramatically when his metabolism starts kicking in again, give him a few spoonfuls of honey with some room temperature water to balance things out. And voila, your pet will soon be on his way to recovery. *huggles Miko* I would kill the guy who killed your internet, but it would prevent me from reading your work once you get it back, due to me being in jail... so I'll just be patient. ^_^
| Reviewed By: Cody Thomas being lazy On: May 06, 2010 22:26 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Food is good, but Yohji, I think you aren't starting small enough. Curry? Honestly? With how long he's been deprived of food? His stomach will have shrank, I doubt he can keep down solids, I was surprised with the coffee to be honest. I do NOT see this ending well. *prepares nutrient water, and broth.*
| Reviewed By: Cody Thomas being lazy On: May 06, 2010 02:15 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Omi really? A spy? Seriously? what crack are you smoking? and Aya Pet looked cute kneeling by Yohji's feet. Take you'r head out of your ass and stop scaring him or I'll tie you up and throw you into the closet with the Hentai Slug. REALLY?! All mine for a whole hour?! I LOVE YOU MIKO! And if his condition is any different than when I took him it will only be improvements I promise! ^_^ *clips a leash on his (now properly cared for) collar.* come on Aya-pet I'll bet you've never had a nice soothing massage before, we'll do that first and then I've got a nice pretty new collar for you, it's black suede and green velvet, it will look beautiful with your hair and skin tone... oooh and outfits! I have so many outfits I wanna put you in, things that are sexy AND covers you at the same time. I'll make you feel just like the wonderful pet you are! Come on Aya-pet let's go play!
| Reviewed By: kat716 On: May 05, 2010 23:06 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is so entertaining to read. I feel bad for Aya, but Yohji will take good care of him. I'm grateful that you update often. Thanks. N
| Reviewed By: Cody Thomas being lazy On: May 04, 2010 14:14 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
AWWWW! Good Yohji! You are doing much better, I'm glad you are finally starting to catch on. Well Aya-pet will catch on soon too, then we can start making some real progress. and WHOOT for the fast update! I loves you Miko!
| Reviewed By: Cody Thomas being lazy On: May 04, 2010 01:12 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
^_^ Yohji, you make a LOVELY knight in shining armour! Hey Ken! Get your head out of your ass! Omi, lighten up, seriously, and Aya-pet *cuddles and brushes his hair* It's ok, Master won't let anyone hurt you, he really likes you and wants to protect you. It'll be okay.
| Reviewed By: Cody Thomas being lazy On: April 28, 2010 00:10 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
"Oh, Yohji could call me several things, most of them I wouldn't let him call me in public.^_^ But Aya I'm just gonna call 'Aya-Pet' for the moment." *Glares at Yohji.* "He's been trained out of most of his decision making free-will you Bishonen-baka, so you're gonna have to take your oh-so-lightly assumed role seriously! Have patience and make compromises and give him a set guide of rules so that you don't always have him in fear of messing up and being punished!'sigh.' Watch." Has Aya-Pet strip to his briefs and sit in the tub and gives him a warm gentle bath, trims his hair, then washes and conditions it properly before wrapping him in a fluffy warm towel and combing his hair out.* "I'll give you a proper manicure next, oh, and give me that!" *takes the collar from a startled Aya who was trying to sneak it back on.* "Training you to bathe with a collar, it's gonna turn into a cracked, smelly, unmovable piece of ruined junk. Sheesh, and it's caked with body oil, sweat and blood too. Did they NEVER clean this since they put it on you?! Those bastards have no respect for leather. I would LOVE to get them in my torture chamber and teach THEM a few things!" *Takes out collection of brushes and rags, along with leather soap, conditioner, touch up polish and stain, oil, suede brush, and metal polish.* "This is gonna take a while Aya-Pet, so you are to change into those warm dry clothes, eat every bite of food on that tray and then lay down on your bed until I'm finished." *points to a service tray sitting on the floor with a plate of fresh fruits, veggies, cheese cubes, and deli meats, two cookies and a glass of water. Just behind it is a huge over-stuffed pet bed with 'Aya' embroidered on the side. Glances at Yohji as Aya immediately obeys without hesitation or fear.* "See? Be clear with him and it's a piece of cake." *Huggles Miko* Thank you for the chapter it really made my awful day a million times better! XD my capcha for this chapter is CEXY! XD how fitting!
| Reviewed By: Cody Thomas being lazy On: April 25, 2010 16:14 EDT
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PRINCESS?! Oh Yohji you really are just gonna confuse the man to death if you can't even tell he's been programmed. *smacks him upside the head* well, the rest of weiss is certainly gonna have a field day with this, I can't WAIT to see how this goes! Thnaks for the update and ooooh that notch looks promising!
| Reviewed By: Cody Thomas being lazy On: April 23, 2010 11:00 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Aya! Noooo you need real rest! It's ok to sleep in the bed if that's where your Master puts you! I wanna kill those bastards sooooo much. You have a new Master now, so that means new rules! Much easier to follow and better for your health rules! Oh well, Yohji will tell you the same when he wakes up.
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