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| "Entrapment: A 21st Century Adventure" Reviews/Comments [ 85 ] | | Pages (6): [ « ‹ 1 2 3 4 5 6 › » ] | Reviewed By: =) On: July 25, 2011 11:21 PDT
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do they have malls in japan? especially in the suburbs? one would imagine that inuyasha would have gotten a whiff of a lot of the guys who were guarding them and are possibly after them that he'll hopefully recognize if any of them are casing that particular shopping area. although if kagome were to be alone and somehow disguise her eyes and change her hair style a bit and go when other girls her age were about she may be able to blend in. exciting! | Title: Naraku please stay in hidding!!
Reviewed By: Miss_Marilyn69 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 22, 2011 19:26 PDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Good god I hope they make it into the mountains before psycho freak gets to them...AAAHHHH!!! the suspense is killing me!! | Reviewed By: xFinalActsGirlx On: July 22, 2011 18:49 PDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Reunited and it feels so good~~ Inuyasha and Kagome back together again XD The mall eh? Hmm...just what their captors expected. ~.- Wonder how this will go?? Its gonna get pretty cold up in those mountains, Kagome. How are you going to keep warm..? Haha update when you can please! Another great chapter. | Reviewed By: SplendentGoddess [MediaMiner Member] On: July 22, 2011 18:35 PDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Uh-oh...no! Don't go to the mall! Well, on a positive note surely Kagome isn't stupid enough to let the 'Crimson Cat' go into the mall with her, and hopefully she won't be the only school uniform in the place. I was wondering...since you didn't have him go through the new moon transformation while caged, just how far away is the next new moon? Though I can understand why they couldn't just stay hidden in the forest for however many days until they could sneak into town at night with him human. One, still wearing the same outfit, and surely she blabbed about the new moon during her drug-induced interrogation so the bad guys know, and two, with no supplies of any kind and the possibility of a fire getting them noticed they couldn't really stay in the forest to wait it out. Hopefully they can avoid recapture. Hopefully she can also someday somehow find a way to contact her family just to let them know she's actually still alive. Maybe write it all down in a letter and mail it without a return address? Of course since they ultimately need to get to the shrine, and the bad guys are expecting that, that ought to make for quite the showdown. I hope Kagome's family doesn't get caught in the middle as hostages for leverage! Oh kami! This is a really good story...keep it up! | Title: Congrats!!!
Reviewed By: jaimed1968 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 13, 2011 02:12 PDT
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Congratulations! Your fiction has won an award from the Feudal Association for the June 2011 term! Founded in 2005 by author/artist, Dark Avenger, the Feudal Association consists of writers, artists, and enthusiasts of the InuYasha fandom. But aside from that, we are also proud to say that we are an awards guild that recognizes fan-fiction and artwork. Several times a year we nominate, vote, and hand out honors to some of the best creations in the fandom. Our Yahoo Group, where the nominating and voting occurs, can be found here: http://groups.yahoo.com/group/FeudalAssociation/ Our website is located here: http://feudal-pulpfiction.net/feudal/ This terms' fiction winners list can be found here: http://feudal-pulpfiction.net/feudal/winners/2011-2/june-2011/ Authors, you may retrieve your awards here: http://feudal-pulpfiction.net/feudal/gallery/thumbnails.php?album=98 Links to all of the awards, past or present, can be found here: http://feudal-pulpfiction.net/feudal/gallery/index.php Please pick up "site only" awards here: http://feudal-pulpfiction.net/feudal/gallery/thumbnails.php?album=98 Congratulations and feel free to join and/or help us spread the word about our group! ~The Feudal Association | Reviewed By: renniemama [MediaMiner Member] On: July 12, 2011 13:51 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'm loving this, I read up to the July 6 post in one day and I can't wait for more. I think your effort for accuracy is awe inspiring, and i can see your dedication. I'm glad our heroes are free and I want to know what they do next! | Reviewed By: ToryTory On: July 06, 2011 21:26 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Still loving this story! Wonderful chapter! | Reviewed By: Cricket42(not signed in) On: July 06, 2011 18:28 PDT
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Thanks for the update and good luck on the bar!!!!!~Cricket42 | Reviewed By: xFinalActsGirlx On: July 06, 2011 17:04 PDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Really loved this chapter. I absolutely hated the suspense of it though, where Inuyasha and Kagome were just talking, I was just like WHAT ARE YOU DOING GET OUT OF THERE BEFORE THEY CATCH YOU AGAIN! Don't get me wrong the moment was cute and much needed I was just really worried for them. :)Thanks for the update and good luck with that exam! | Reviewed By: SplendentGoddess [MediaMiner Member] On: July 06, 2011 16:11 PDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
No bad cliff hangers at all, that was an awesome place to pause the story if it's going to be on hold for a little bit while 'real life' gets a turn. I'm so relieved that all went so smoothly! Kagome was smart to risk hitchhiking, because wandering through the side roads forever on foot would have surely gotten her captured again, or if not, then at least possibly lost and half frozen and starved come night fall. Sensing Inuyasha was then by far the smartest thing she did, even though her original plan to go to the mall was definitely also wise, but yeah, why wait? Realizing she could feel Inuyasha's direction, I would have gone straight to him if I were her, too, and that was just pure luck and genius that she ended up finding that open door. And here she'd thought her luck had run out when that goon had spotted her! All Inuyasha needed was to know that she was out and (relatively) safe at his location to stage his own breakout, and I'm glad Tetsusaiga was right there, and the jewel shards. I hadn't forgotten that they were going to steal the shards, but I'd thought it was going to be another plot twist, like they could get back to her house only then to discover the shards were missing and have to go back out and face their enemies to find them, but of course we do still have the worry that Kagome's family might not be okay since somebody had obviously broken in. Still, I agree with the logic that one shouldn't needlessly cause a crime scene, so most likely her family is unharmed, and probably even unaware there was a break in if the guy knew what he was doing, but Kagome was very wise to not call them right away, the phone very well might be bugged. Plus Inuyasha's got to get himself a new set of clothes, pronto. They just need to sleep it off for a night deep in the woods and gather their thoughts, then that way you can also gather your thoughts, LOL. But yeah, instead of just being weird, now he'll be recognized as the Crimson Cat, so probably they should sneak to the mall, then as much as Inuyasha will hate it he'll have to stay in the shadows within 'sensing' range of Kagome, so she can quickly buy him or maybe both of them a change of outfit, and a bag to put their other clothes in. This story is definitely not over yet, so even if it takes you longer than normal, I'm certainly looking forward to seeing what you think of next, and what your ideas are for how to end this bad boy. Oh, and I love that little scene with Sango at the beginning, too; it's nice to remember them and realize that they are obviously troubled by Kagome and Inuyasha's disappearance, as well. Good job! And congrats on the nom! Totally deserve it! | Reviewed By: Miss_Marilyn69 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 06, 2011 14:38 PDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Man oh man what a fun story, I'm so happy they're safe. So I'll wait for the real world to premit your muses to have free time again without complaining. Until next time great story!! | Title: Congrats!
Reviewed By: jaimed1968 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 19, 2011 10:43 PDT
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This piece has been nominated at the Feudal Association! Founded in 2005 by author/artist, Dark Avenger, the Feudal Association consists of writers, artists, and enthusiasts of the InuYasha fandom. But aside from that, we are also proud to say that we are an awards guild that recognizes fan-fiction and artwork. Several times a year we nominate, vote, and hand out honors to some of the best creations in the fandom. Our official website can be found here: http://feudal-pulpfiction.net/feudal/ The current nominations pages are here: http://feudal-pulpfiction.net/feudal/nominations/sample-page/ Check them out to see what you were nominated for! Our Yahoo Group, where the nominations and voting occurs, can be found here: http://groups.yahoo.com/group/FeudalAssociation/ **Please note that FA membership is closed during voting. Congratulations and feel free to join and/or help us spread the word about our group! ~ The Feudal Association **Please Note: You may receive this notice more than once if you've been nominated for several awards. They will appear as reviews on your nominated works. | Reviewed By: xxxshikonxxx [MediaMiner Member] On: June 14, 2011 22:22 PDT
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WOOOOOOOOOHOOOOOOOOOO!!! You go girl! Kagome really had a great idea using woman's best weapon...And i loved the part when she made those dogs run with their tails between their legs. Now i hope that the other "dogs" won't catch her after her 2 hour head start. Love the story! Waiting for more chapters! | Reviewed By: xFinalActsGirlx On: June 14, 2011 16:44 PDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Loved this chapter! As for the escape there's always the old hide behind the door and wait til they come through and bash them over the head. But then again that one is like way obvious so they probably anticipated that one. And of course the suduction which you did do. So no. Your escape was the best idea...not to mention entertaining. :) | Title: *big sparkly eyes*
Reviewed By: Miss_Marilyn69 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 14, 2011 14:13 PDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
please...may I have some more (that last bit had a british accent) | | Pages (6): [ « ‹ 1 2 3 4 5 6 › » ] |
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