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| "Lies, Deception, and a Baby" Reviews/Comments [ 132 ] | | Pages (9): [ « ‹ 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 › » ] | Reviewed By: Mushi_azn [MediaMiner Member] On: November 01, 2002 23:08 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
OMg, the wati seemed like forever for this!! I LOVED IT!! the lemons are great!! It's not a surprise you're 22. Lol
CONTINUE!!
I WANNA KNOW WHAT HAPPENS!! NOOOOOWWWWWWWw!! X( | Reviewed By: lil debbie [MediaMiner Member] On: October 29, 2002 19:37 EST
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UUGGG!!! The whole IDEA of being with Yamcha after Vegeta is repulsive!! That's like McDonald's after a 5 star dinner. . . .yek! but, I can see the necessity of it for the plot line. . .just dont go into any detail please ~shuddering~ | Reviewed By: Mushi_azn [MediaMiner Member] On: October 29, 2002 18:34 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hey!! I loved this chapter! Nice Yamcha bashing. I don't mind Yamcha bashing in fanfics, but in reality, he's not bad in the show. Sure, he's dog shit on the bottom of my shoe conpared to Vegeta, but common, if you compare everything to Vegeta...
Anyways, CONTINUE!! I loved this chapter!!! Can't wait till the lemon. I love your stuff!! ^^
Vegeta's being quite a asshole right now, as much as I love that stud (Giggle) he deserves Bulma's lies. After all, he's returning it tenfold. Heh.
CONTINUE!! | Reviewed By: Lina On: October 29, 2002 18:14 EST
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Even though there was no lemon, you still wrote a good chapter. Keep up the good work! I can't wait to read the next chapter. | Reviewed By: Sara On: October 29, 2002 18:05 EST
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Yay! I love Yamcha bashing! ^.^
Come to think of it, didn't that ex-fiance of yours look kinda like Yamcha? And act kind of like him, too, in that loser kind of way? It never would have worked out anyway! I have no sympathy/pity for Yamcha-like people! He deserves to become a member of "Losers Anonymous"!
Other than that, the lemons were nice, not kinky enough for my taste, but a good start. I hope you get some kinkier ones later! ^.^
Love, Sara | Reviewed By: Tara Veseur On: October 29, 2002 11:48 EST
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Sorry about what I said before, I was drunk at the time (but you already knew that).
Loved the shower sex, very cute (if cliched)
*Bash, bash, bash, bash, bash, bash, bash, BASH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!* Guess who I'm bashing? Yamcha!
Thank you for the Yamcha bashing, and I hope to see more lemon in the future as well as more Yamcha bashing because Yamcha is a slime ball that does not deserve to live, let alone touch Bulma in her intimate areas. | Reviewed By: itsjustme On: October 28, 2002 21:55 EST
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Very good story. I like it so far. You are a very good author. | Reviewed By: Mushi_azn [MediaMiner Member] On: October 28, 2002 18:19 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hi. I know I just reviewed, but then I by mistake pressed the refresh button and there was another chapter!! ^^ How about that?? ^^ Anyways, I loved it!! The shower lemon was great. and I love how you write Jelous Vegeta. It's soooo in character and well written!! Loving it, and always will!!
CONTINUE!! | Reviewed By: Hard Candy Vegetto On: October 28, 2002 11:00 EST
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
don't leave me hangin' here... -_-' | Reviewed By: Chibi-Dacras babysitter [MediaMiner Member] On: October 28, 2002 10:50 EST
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Aweshome, very aweshome, this is a cool b/v fic...ummm...and don't read mine because it takes major searching to find out which two are b/v's...sigh, just cuz i don't write them doesn't mean that i don't agree with the couple. Anywho, love this fic, can't wait until you update it. | Reviewed By: Legana On: October 28, 2002 08:34 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
*low growl*
ok I loved the B/V lemon part, and I like their characters a lot, but I don't like you're title, you can't, you simply CANNOT let yamcha fuck bulma!!!!!! NOT after she had the great Vegeta! bglrblrgl I hate yamcha, he doesn't even deserve a glamp from bulma, let alone her pussy! *snorts*
grhmpf, yamcha is a pathetic excuse for something living, he doesn't deserve life, he should be tortuared every single day! every second!
you cannot let them get a lemon, urgh, I would so blast you!
*growls again*
well anyway, I will leave the story up to you, I will just wait in my dark corner, until you have updated, and what comes out of it.
B/V lemon rules! | Reviewed By: Mushi_azn [MediaMiner Member] On: October 28, 2002 00:03 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Continue!! WITH LEMON!! LEMONNN!! YEAH! GO BULMA!! DUMP YAMCHA BECAUSE YOU DON'T WANNA HAVE SEX WITH HIM AND THEN RUN OFF AND DO IT WITH VEGETA!! WHOO HOO!! ^^ I think, maybe, the bedroom, or floor...or maybe, the couch, and then they roll onto the floor!! o.O Heh heh. CONTINUE!!
I don't agree with moonsaiyaprincess. Yamcha isn't a dick. He's a pussy. PUSSSSAAAAAAAHHH! | Reviewed By: Duo no Tsuin [MediaMiner Member] On: December 04, 2002 20:35 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
If you hadn't updated with this new chapter before you read my 2nd chapter ... then I'd think you caught my "what's-wrong-with-me-I've-suddenly-written-the-story-angstier-than-was-originally-planned" virus. *chuckles*
I feel bad for Vegeta. *thinks of him traning alone in space as he did during GarlicJuniorSaga* That poor lonely guy. If I wasn't attached (our 2 year anniversary is Monday, 12/9!!:) then I'd take him! I'm sure we'd all do the same. (except for you who found that cool guy with the pin *smirks* Yes, I read your diary!! *MUahahahahaha!!*;)
*lol* j/k He and Bulma are MEANT to be together, dammit!! *thinks of AndroidSaga when he shows up, turns SS, and has the flashback with the "I just don't care anymore!" ... and then she cries* NOW, I know where he got it from!! Damn, you're good!!
PS Have you read the manga version of DBZ?? Well, I just got the new ShounenJump and there was the CUTEST part when Bulma tells Vegeta that he can stay at her house. *chuckles* If you haven't read it ... then I'll tell you about it sometime if you'll let me :D
Keep it up and don't rush the ending!! ^_^ (Btw, can I borrow your library's copy of KS? ... I need some inspiration ^_~) | Reviewed By: moonsaiyanprincess [MediaMiner Member] On: October 27, 2002 22:09 EST
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I like this start, what other soothing things does Vegeta do? Yamcha's such a dick! >. | Reviewed By: Tina Lang [MediaMiner Member] On: October 28, 2002 10:12 EST
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As I've said before ... I will NEVER EVER EVER write a lemon between Bulma and Yamcha!!! It would cause me to break out in a rash all over my body, and then vomit continously for three days straight if I did something as horrible as that!
The only lemons I will ever write including B/V will be with each other (unless it's an orgy or something special like that) so ... umm ... don't blast me ... please? ^.^;;;
Love, Tina
PS I hate Yamcha too! *Bashes Yamcha over the head repeatedly with the candlestick and lead pipe from Clue until he is lying on the ground bleeding profusely and quite dead, and still I bash him some more* Take that, Yamcha! | | Pages (9): [ « ‹ 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 › » ] |
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