| "Lies, Deception, and a Baby" Reviews/Comments [ 132 ] |
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Reviewed By: Duo no Tsuin [MediaMiner Member] On: December 04, 2002 20:35 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
If you hadn't updated with this new chapter before you read my 2nd chapter ... then I'd think you caught my "what's-wrong-with-me-I've-suddenly-written-the-story-angstier-than-was-originally-planned" virus. *chuckles*
I feel bad for Vegeta. *thinks of him traning alone in space as he did during GarlicJuniorSaga* That poor lonely guy. If I wasn't attached (our 2 year anniversary is Monday, 12/9!!:) then I'd take him! I'm sure we'd all do the same. (except for you who found that cool guy with the pin *smirks* Yes, I read your diary!! *MUahahahahaha!!*;)
*lol* j/k He and Bulma are MEANT to be together, dammit!! *thinks of AndroidSaga when he shows up, turns SS, and has the flashback with the "I just don't care anymore!" ... and then she cries* NOW, I know where he got it from!! Damn, you're good!!
PS Have you read the manga version of DBZ?? Well, I just got the new ShounenJump and there was the CUTEST part when Bulma tells Vegeta that he can stay at her house. *chuckles* If you haven't read it ... then I'll tell you about it sometime if you'll let me :D
Keep it up and don't rush the ending!! ^_^ (Btw, can I borrow your library's copy of KS? ... I need some inspiration ^_~) |
Reviewed By: moonsaiyanprincess [MediaMiner Member] On: October 27, 2002 22:09 EST
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I like this start, what other soothing things does Vegeta do? Yamcha's such a dick! >. |
Reviewed By: Tina Lang [MediaMiner Member] On: October 28, 2002 10:12 EST
Comment/Review:
As I've said before ... I will NEVER EVER EVER write a lemon between Bulma and Yamcha!!! It would cause me to break out in a rash all over my body, and then vomit continously for three days straight if I did something as horrible as that!
The only lemons I will ever write including B/V will be with each other (unless it's an orgy or something special like that) so ... umm ... don't blast me ... please? ^.^;;;
Love, Tina
PS I hate Yamcha too! *Bashes Yamcha over the head repeatedly with the candlestick and lead pipe from Clue until he is lying on the ground bleeding profusely and quite dead, and still I bash him some more* Take that, Yamcha! |
Reviewed By: Tara Veseur On: October 27, 2002 02:59 EST
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oh, Tina!
Knowing you, I already know you were planning to have them do it on the floor anyway, no matter what the reviews said! :-p Besides, if you didn't Sara would make your life a living hell for the next week or so! LOL
But yeah, I agree ... it should be sweet!
Love ya!
~~Tara |
Reviewed By: itsjustme On: October 26, 2002 23:30 EDT
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Have Yamcha come over to apologize *checks end of first chapter* right now... |
Reviewed By: Lina On: October 26, 2002 22:43 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Love the story so far. Keep up the good work.
Hmmm, about the lemon, it should be nice and sweet sice it's Bulma's first time. Where should it take place? The floor or the bedroom:) |
Reviewed By: Kinkyness On: October 26, 2002 21:31 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Heh what's up with the word kinky and you people? LoL wild hot mokey sex! Lmao ah the old times....OK Too much info? Well then, in the kitchen! LoL Veggie-chan's favorite things, food and sex? Well he can;t train and have sex now can he? Well.....maybe but for her first time that'd be a little too rough.....OK I'm just blabbing now and probably not making any sense. Well that's what you get when your tired! I guess.... |
Reviewed By: Sara On: October 26, 2002 19:54 EDT
Comment/Review:
I like the floor idea! Altho not a wood floor, I think it should be carpet, like something comfy u know??
And it should be VERY VERY KINKY!!
Well I dunno about the kinky, maybe not the first time since Bulma's still just a virgin ... so maybe the first time it should be nice and sweet (well I guess maybe just as sweet as Vegeta can be, which isn't very!) But like a nice first time kind of experience ... I mean we've all been there, and know what we would have liked it to be like (and what it wasn't!) so I guess just make it like that, a GOOD first time (definitely NOT a disappointment!!) and then later when she and Veggie get it on again he can maybe teach her some kinky stuff ... hehe yeah that sounds about right!!!
Ok, that's my 2 cents!
Just hurry up and write the lemon!! Just like my twin sister, I LOVE reading lemons, and I'm very impatient, too!! |
Reviewed By: Tara Veseur On: October 28, 2002 04:47 EST
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Aww, that was so sweet! Bulma and Veggie make such a cute couple! I love them!
Don't you dare make Bulma go back to Yamcha!! And don't make her actually sleep with him *shudders* I would be traumatized for life! Like Veggie said, after being with him being with another guy is just out of the question.
And besides, you need more Yamcha bashing! *Bashes Yamcha over the head with a large, blunt object* See? Like that!
I swear, if you plan on writing a Bulma+Yamcha lemon, I will never forgive you!! I'll hunt you down and tie you up to a tree and tickle your bare feet with feathers, and it will emotionally scar you for life!!
B+V4ever!!!!!!!!!!!!!! |
Reviewed By: Legana On: December 24, 2002 13:35 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
FINALY *grunt* it took you long enough to update the bloody chappy, but I'm happy that you did =)
great story, I followed it from the first chapter, and I liked it a lot.
great work and merry cristmas, I'm sure Vegeta and Bulma have one ;)
kiss kiss. |
Reviewed By: Chibi-Dacras babysitter [MediaMiner Member] On: November 07, 2002 13:48 EST
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awwww..poor yamucha...thinking he was gonna get laid. HA! He can just kiss yajirobe's big fat rump if he expects any from Bulma, she's got herself a real man! hoo hoo!!! **Laughing uncontrolably** yammie's such a pitiful characters...he he he....(rofl) |
Reviewed By: Hot Bra On: October 26, 2002 20:55 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great being on the story, I think they should do it on the floor. |
Reviewed By: Mushi_azn [MediaMiner Member] On: October 28, 2002 18:07 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
OMG!! I loved the chapters!! the lemon! EVERYTHING!! You write VB sooo well!! ^^
CONTINUE!! OH PLEASE CONTINUE! |
Reviewed By: Mushi_azn [MediaMiner Member] On: November 07, 2002 00:37 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
GOD DAMMIT!! CONTINUE CONTINUE CONTINUE!!
god dammit. You leave us at such a hangover...
X(
I WANT A UPDATE AND I WANT IT NOW!! |
Reviewed By: VampireGoddess On: November 16, 2002 14:40 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Very well writtin please update soon! |
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