| "What a mess" Reviews/Comments [ 115 ] |
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Reviewed By: tmelange On: January 01, 2003 12:54 CST
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This continues to be a great story. I laughed out loud at Yohji calling Ran "cutie". Kudos. Keep up the good work. |
Reviewed By: pink bunny On: January 01, 2003 07:26 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Good chapter. There were some word usage mistakes, but it's very good considering English isn't your first language! I liked the scene where Youji catches Ran from falling down the stairs, and when Youji finds Ran listening at the door.
Oooh, I can't wait to see Youji's reaction. ^_^ |
Reviewed By: morningwinds [MediaMiner Member] On: December 31, 2002 13:39 CST
Comment/Review:
can't wait to read the next chapter...
please update sooon |
Reviewed By: Merigold [MediaMiner Member] On: December 29, 2002 18:22 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I like this a lot! It sounds like a nice, fun story, and I hope you update soon.
Just a random critique-
>Sunlight, falling through the window, made short red hair gloom like rubys. Youji hold his breath,
Gloom? I think you meant gleamed, and hold should be held ^^
I just found a few random verb tense mistake and such, Lord know I make enough of those myself :)
Write, write, write! ^_^ |
Reviewed By: Sylph On: December 29, 2002 14:32 CST
Comment/Review:
Your story is very original. Interesting. I hope you will update soon. Can't wait. |
Reviewed By: pink bunny On: December 29, 2002 07:21 CST
Comment/Review:
I really like this. It is an original story that really draws you in. I loved the whole 'dress Ran up like a girl' idea...hehe. The Youji/Ran pairing makes it even better. ^__^ I hope you write more soon! |
Reviewed By: Aisha_Max On: December 29, 2002 00:35 CST
Comment/Review:
I like it! Although I like anything with Youji/Ran. It's kind of a cute fun sort of story. I am anxious to find out what happens. I really can't wait for you to put out more chapters. I hope I don't have to wait too long. *hint hint* ^_____^
P.S. I hope the ratings change as well. ^_~ |
Reviewed By: Mara-chan [MediaMiner Member] On: March 16, 2003 16:55 CST
Comment/Review:
yay! a new chapter! you kno, i never thought i'd really be able to like an AU of Weiss, i expected it to be so strange, but i like how you're going about it! and just to say wai! the chapters are so short!! please could you make them a little longer??
Mara |
Reviewed By: Nabila On: March 27, 2003 14:21 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Damn good. I mean it! |
Reviewed By: boowoman [MediaMiner Member] On: January 20, 2003 16:48 CST
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No, it's not Omi. I wasn't quite sure about the eye colour, so I watched some of the eps again and they are blue in the tv series. Sometimes they look a little grey or green, though... Na.. they ARE blue... |
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