| "Ai no Kakarotto" Reviews/Comments [ 86 ] |
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Reviewed By: debbiechan [MediaMiner Member] On: February 12, 2005 15:34 CST
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I finally read all the chapters! I have to say, I've a few G/V AU's so far and this was not what I was expecting. There's an atmosphere here that's more sensual that what I read in some yaoi. It's got a sexiness that doesn't freak me out with the whole dominance-submissive thing but makes me actually care about the people involved. Romantic I guess is the word, even though there's none of that yaoi-kissy mush. The setting, the dialogue (you manage to make your dialogue descriptive of feelings and don't just throw it around to fill up a page). I like it that your story is so lush and emotional and that your Vegeta is so... so.... oooh he's good. I knew this story wasn't completed when I started it so I knew not to be disappointed when I got to the end here, so I guess I read each chapter more for the "feel" than for the plot. Even so, you really do plot! You arrange your world in a different way from most writers--I can't put my finger on it, but it's different, maybe slower but I like that. Negative comments--prologue was kinda boring but it had a "narrative voice" that worked. There's still a LOT of dialogue, and I'm a fan of "show us, don't tell us" but I'm learning to like dialogue a lot (Phantomscribe uses a whole lot and I like hers). Anyway, your talent is very plain--I felt it when I read Full Moon, and it's evident in this story too. If I were the one writing, I'd chop some dialogue and make the chapters a little shorter but you might lose some of your lushness that w |
Title: .> V.V
Reviewed By: Vegeta's Mate [MediaMiner Member] On: February 10, 2005 15:13 CST
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WHERE THE HELL ARE YOU?!!! I WANNA KNOW WHAT HAPPENS NEXT AND IF VEGETA AND KAKAROTTO END UP TOGETHER OR NOT! U.P.D.A.T.E! NOW DAMNIT! WE WANT MORE AND ARE WILLING TO HUNT YOU DOWN TO GET IT! lol jk, please update soon! Love ya babe!
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Reviewed By: moonlight_dream On: January 18, 2005 09:36 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love this fic. It has been one of my favorites for a long time now, but i'm beginning to fear that i will never get to read the whole thing. I really hope that doesn't happen. Do you have the fic finished somewhere else? Another site maybe? Or has it been put on hiatus indefinately? Please update as soon as you can, or let me know whats going on at melane_anne@yahoo.com. I would appreciate it enourmously. Thanks
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Reviewed By: Lemony Fresh [MediaMiner Member] On: October 28, 2004 23:33 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
omfg.........dude you have got to update this fic.....PLEASE! i must read more *sobs* please!!!1
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Reviewed By: Vegeta's Mate [MediaMiner Member] On: September 29, 2004 23:10 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
WHERE THE HELL ARE YOU?!!! I WANNA KNOW WHAT THE HELL"S GONNA HAPPEN!!!! UPDATE DAMN IT! I'M LIKE DIEING HERE!!!LOL!
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Title: chayron
Reviewed By: chayron [MediaMiner Member] On: July 14, 2004 17:11 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
You go girl! That was so much fun to read! Thank you, thank you, thank you! I'm dying to see the next chapter!
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Reviewed By: chayron [MediaMiner Member] On: July 14, 2004 17:09 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
You go girl! That was so much fun to read! Thank you, thank you, thank you! I'm dying to see the next chapter!
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Reviewed By: chayron [MediaMiner Member] On: July 14, 2004 17:06 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
You go girl! That was so much fun to read! Thank you, thank you, thank you! I'm dying to see the next chapter!
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Reviewed By: chayron [MediaMiner Member] On: July 14, 2004 17:05 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
You go girl! That was so much fun to read! Thank you, thank you, thank you! I'm dying to see the next chapter!
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Title: Alliance (Chappie 12)
Reviewed By: Plyric [MediaMiner Member] On: June 22, 2004 21:54 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oh, I so love this story! It's so intricate! I love details that aren't monotonous! Vegeta and Kakarotto are perfect antagonists! MORE MORE! =)
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Title: Chappie 12
Reviewed By: Plyric [MediaMiner Member] On: June 08, 2004 21:15 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow! Finally, some action! Yeah! Oh yeah, and I ESPECIALLY LOVED Chapter 11! Oh, that was just beautiful and perfect! MORE MORE! =)
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Reviewed By: lee-lee On: May 24, 2004 21:44 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I loved the story so far. Please update soon.
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Title: Brilliant!
Reviewed By: Saiyan Slasher [MediaMiner Member] On: May 23, 2004 10:47 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I loved reading your story. Absolutely excellent! I hope that you update soon so I can read more of thist wonderful fanfic. Anyway, please, drop me an email or something if you want to talk...I really enjoy anything do to with Dragon Ball, DB Z or DB GT.
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Title: Wonderful!
Reviewed By: Akaya On: May 23, 2004 10:34 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Absolutely brilliant! I enjoyed every single moment of that fic, lol! Please keep on writing and update soon. You're a magnificent writer, and I wish to read more of your inspiring fanfic!
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Reviewed By: LadyKATT [MediaMiner Member] On: May 18, 2004 13:37 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hi I hpoe you up-date soon. I realy ejoy this fic. I hope they don't kill eack other. If you are going to kill some one make it Radizu or King Vegeta. Ok BYe for now. BYE BYE LadyKATT
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