| "Transformations" Reviews/Comments [ 409 ] |
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Title: i'm lazy
Reviewed By: ZirraNova On: February 22, 2005 14:52 EST
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Ohh weapons contests, lets see, hmmm......... maybe, nah, or how about. No, I know you know Kohaku's weapon, that's a scyth and chain, okay put apoison on the end , i'll give you the exact poison and it's properties later promise:) Zirra
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Reviewed By: ScaryClownHat On: February 21, 2005 01:35 EST
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Hmm, weirdest weapon...alright, a multi-colored flame-thrower? Its odd... It's an exelent story that I've been reading a while, the threats have only recently gotten to me. Keep up the great work! -ScaryClownHat
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Title: AE:39
Reviewed By: Hououza On: February 19, 2005 21:22 EST
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Wierd weapons huh? Er...um... *Thinking* A large inflateable red herring? How about a bug catching net? Perhaps a santa shaped cookie cutter? Excellent chapter, quite dark though, still. Um...for the enters you could use < br > a couple of times, that should have the same effect...that or enclose the paragraphs with < p > (Pardon the spaces but I don't know what will happen otherwise. Dunno if that helps at all? Good luck & best wishes, Hououza
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Title: Hmmm
Reviewed By: HanyouGal (Offline) On: February 19, 2005 03:07 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Is it just my computer or is the format wacked up? Well anyways its an awesome story please continue soon!
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Title: Where did you go wrong? AE 38
Reviewed By: Fighting Sadness On: February 16, 2005 13:26 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 1 of 10
Overall Rating: 1 of 10 Comment/Review:
You just lost a big fan. What you did was beyond wrong. I can't read something that causes so much pain. If Kagome had given herself to Inuyasha first, I still wouldn't like it but I could live with it. But what you've written is..is... I can't even describe it. I'll pay you to change it. I'll become a servant. Anything! Just please I can't live with that happening to Kagome. That's pure evil. You act crazy but its all in good fun. This is wrong. I dont care how you do it. Just please change. It hurts too much.
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Reviewed By: dragrdr On: February 12, 2005 10:49 EST
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hmmm, a weapon that you haven't used...kindergarteners, those things NEVER leave you alone and will talk your ear off!. what else...ninja stars, evil hamsters, pack of rabid dogs, base ball(with retractable spikes), giant magnifying glass(use with bright sun, burns readers to a crisp, ...*mind goes blank* damn it! i'll give you some more next time. Love the story! ^^
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Reviewed By: dragrdr On: February 12, 2005 10:49 EST
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hmmm, a weapon that you haven't used...kindergarteners, those things NEVER leave you alone and will talk your ear off!. what else...ninja stars, evil hamsters, pack of rabid dogs, base ball(with retractable spikes), giant magnifying glass(use with bright sun, burns readers to a crisp, ...*mind goes blank* damn it! i'll give you some more next time. Love the story! ^^
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Title: Ch 69
Reviewed By: Wolfshadow [MediaMiner Member] On: February 10, 2005 00:39 EST
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Hey, now you really are starting to take a darker turn in your storyline. You had been 'inspired' by a another story right? Well here's a suggestion for you to read 'You Darkness' by Vyncent here on MM/AFFN/FFN. It also may 'inspire' you in your next darker turn you have going. Especially since you have Inu-chan going to 'Hunt'...and she was attacked by multiple persons unknown (for now). Then again, you may go the route of the 'Camera people's evidence'. *shrugs* But definately check out that story beforehand to get 'inspired'! That person (Vyncent) has a way of really getting you into the story...*shudders*.
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Reviewed By: Zirra Nova [MediaMiner Member] On: February 08, 2005 11:12 EST
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Ohhhh, Inuyasha is going to make those a**holes pay so badly, *low growls are heard from the dark of Zirra's room* I wish i could help him ohh that pisses me off, SIX gerrrrshshs! i could kill, ohh i...... great chappy, hope Inuyasha gets a looooong revenge chapter, i really mean long, those f*cking a**holes deserve it. Do i sound fanatic to you? oh well. Next. Zirra
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Title: 69
Reviewed By: Hououza On: February 07, 2005 18:39 EST
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Woah...that was...unexpectedly dark. An excellent chaoter but still very very dark. I don't know what to say this time...it's took me completely off guard. None the less I look forwards to seeing what you have in store for us. Good luck & best wishes, Hououza
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Reviewed By: WoodShop2300 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 07, 2005 02:02 EST
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Well i defently see why someone would accuse you of such a thing.. The resemblince is far to close to just ignore.. But that said there is only one way to really write a chapter like that expecelly if you keep characters reactions to whats knowen.. Any way on a lighter note: the chapter was well written the idea well not orginal is an off norm one. This chapter was quite the jump from the others but i'll wait to see how it all ties in..
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Title: End
Reviewed By: kasumi1205 logged out On: February 03, 2005 17:48 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
this story was awsum, i loved ur idea to make her hanyou, and to make every 1 live. alotta people get her to live as long as inu, but they let sango and miroku die..i also loved when she started flying when she was fighting Naraku..that was perfect exactly what i wanted to see, cuz i wanna be able to fly...*mumbles* damn gravity...gr8 story i loved it so much!! =^.^=
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Title: fic as a whole
Reviewed By: subie On: February 02, 2005 20:35 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
excellent creativity; you have a gift for description expecially in the battle scenes, however be careful you don't get too bogged down in details. The writing style is better than average but still could be improved; that will only come through practice. I could tell through this story that you are getting better. Your detemerination writing this long of a fanfic is impressive, I hope that you will end up finishing it cus I want to read it :) Excellent job.
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Reviewed By: Zirra Nova [MediaMiner Member] On: January 31, 2005 11:16 EST
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hehehe, god i love your authors notes, there so funny. great chappy, can't(but will)wait for the next one. Zirra.
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Title: FLUFF!
Reviewed By: celtic_hanyou [MediaMiner Member] On: January 30, 2005 21:30 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Ah, fluff is nice. I like this story and how there was a story within a story. Will kagome write any other stories? lol. Anyway, I also like how Kagome is reserved about marking and such and I started cracking up laughing at the nipping bit. It was good though, and brought a unique style to your story.
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