| "When We First Met" Reviews/Comments [ 334 ] |
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Reviewed By: InusDemoness(not signed on) On: May 17, 2004 17:39 CDT
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Aaaaaaaaaaawwwwwwwwww poor Shippou!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Who did it!!!!!!!!!!!! Who killed his parents, that's soooo mean!!!!!!!!!! I hope Inuyasha cuts them to ribbins with his claws!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Reviewed By: ThatsMsDiva2U [MediaMiner Member] On: May 17, 2004 15:57 CDT
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What a sweet chapter! I loved the fact that InuYasha thinking of Kagome being a wonderful mother and wanting to have pups with her.
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Reviewed By: Orb [MediaMiner Member] On: May 17, 2004 15:51 CDT
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This was a really good chapter. I liked the end with Kagome said she'd take care of SHippo, and her mom said she wanted to her to get married and have grandchildren, wne Inu Yasha was standing right there. I know whenever you decided to slip a lemon in the story it will be really good. The connection between this version of Inu Yasha and Kagome is so sweet and innocent. I love it to much lol ^__^
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Reviewed By: RabidFanGirl On: May 17, 2004 01:28 CDT
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Anytime Queenie...someone has to keep him in line or he'll never do his job...lolz Luv Ya
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Title: When We First Met
Reviewed By: Ritsukie [MediaMiner Member] On: May 15, 2004 20:30 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Why this is fabulous!....ok so that sounds odd but its a great fic i love it! i can not wait for another update....i must say though very original and nead keep it up! Ja Ne "Rituskie"
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Reviewed By: YasashiiAme (too fucking lazy to log in DAMNIT) On: May 10, 2004 16:22 CDT
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I'm an unloyal fan of your fanfiction. I am undeserving to read it ;.; Err yeah, I haven't had time to read it, sorry. Anyway, good chapter, blabhlahblajfdkadf. Sorry I don't have anything else to say ;.;
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Reviewed By: Inus_Kagome_Forever [MediaMiner Member] On: May 09, 2004 04:20 CDT
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oh yeah..plzz update soon and i this is a very good story...or fanfic.. ok now cya
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Reviewed By: Inus_Kagome_Forever [MediaMiner Member] On: May 09, 2004 04:19 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i like your story,its good... but i was kinda wondering..are you putting lemons in any time soon? i just thought it would have something like lemons cause this is under hentai, anyway great story i like the story line, cya
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Reviewed By: MIztikal_Dragon [MediaMiner Member] On: May 09, 2004 00:01 CDT
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yay, keep up the good work and update asap. K? Krystal.
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Reviewed By: RedHerring [MediaMiner Member] On: May 08, 2004 11:04 CDT
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Seriously, you have to be a bit more discriptive with your chapters. I mean, if you can barely write a decent chapter--scratch that, your chapters aren't even decent--then how do you expect to write a passable lemon? The lemon, for the most part, is all description. Descriptions of actions, touch, sight, taste, sounds, and smells. In your story you barelydescribe the setting, letting a "in the woods" or "near Kaede's hut" or "on a big rock" suffice. What about the trees? What kind of day is it? These are the things that, while many people will not admit to caring about once they think about it, most people appreciate. What are the characters thinking of? What are their fears, their memories? What does one character think of another character. You don't tell us these things! You're whole story is dialogue and simple action statements! It's pathetic! It's boring, and it's not good writing!
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Reviewed By: essie [MediaMiner Member] On: May 08, 2004 01:47 CDT
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this great grea great great fanfic
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Reviewed By: Orb [MediaMiner Member] On: May 07, 2004 21:35 CDT
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ooooo yay and other chapter!! I know i say it all the time, but this is such a cute story. Meeting Sess-chan will definitly be interesting. I hope you can update soon.
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Reviewed By: InusDemoness(not signed on) On: May 07, 2004 20:22 CDT
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Good chapter, but short!!!!!! You can't keep giving us these little bits and pieces. It's torture, torture I tell you!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Reviewed By: Hououza On: May 07, 2004 20:08 CDT
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Excellent chapter! Wonder what will happen when Sesshi shows up? Good luck & best wishes, Hououza
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Reviewed By: MIztikal_Dragon [MediaMiner Member] On: May 06, 2004 02:34 CDT
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ooo so cool keep it up! Krystal.
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