| "When We First Met" Reviews/Comments [ 334 ] |
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Reviewed By: essie [MediaMiner Member] On: July 21, 2004 14:55 CDT
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this is a great fanfic please update soon
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Reviewed By: Inus_Kagome_Forever [MediaMiner Member] On: July 21, 2004 11:58 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
That was a grr eat chapter! i hope you update soon again! gosh this story is soo good!
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Reviewed By: Elisa On: July 21, 2004 11:46 CDT
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Jeez, poor Inu & Kagome getting interrupted every time they go somewhere for privacy. I hope that they make their relationship official soon.
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Reviewed By: darkempereror not signed in On: July 21, 2004 11:19 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
i've been reading your story on and off in between my own writing. I really like the plot and the direction the story is going. (Burn in heel Kikyo!) Ahem... yeah. I have some constructive criticism, and a favor to ask. First the favor. You said rated for future lemons, do you mind seperating the chapter from the lemon with a signal like (~*~) or something? It means I don't hvae to read the parts that I don't want to read. For the criticism, try to find some alternate ways to say things, be a bit more descriptive, and try to write less simply. I know that its really easy to sum things up in a paragraph into a sentence, but it gives everybody a clearer image of whats going on. Instead of 'Inuyasha was happy she was awake.'(from story), try 'Inuyasha felt Kagome stir, and breathed a sigh of releif, worry washing away from his presence.' I sound like my english teacher! Please and Thank you.
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Reviewed By: Orb (n.o.) On: July 21, 2004 11:13 CDT
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oh poor kagome-chan. that's really a bummer situation for her. but alteast she has all her friends. inuyasha is so cute to her lol. i cant wait till you uypdate again.
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Reviewed By: InusDemoness(well you know) On: July 21, 2004 10:09 CDT
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Man does Miroku always have to interrupt!!!! All this sexual tension is making me as grumpy as Inuyasha!!!!!
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Reviewed By: Higurashi Kagome [MediaMiner Member] On: July 21, 2004 04:05 CDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I finally finished reading what you have written so far it is some of the best work i've ever read can't wait to read more up-date soon..........o i don't know if the chappie should be like this but it's last sentence is Kagome goes to a feild and then nothing is after it it's either that's where you lefted-ed-ed or Oreo(my computer)hates me and won't let me finish can you send me a message telling me which one it is cause if it's the later of the two i wanna try and find the problem and finish reading well hope you up-date soon^_^
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Reviewed By: Orb [MediaMiner Member] On: July 19, 2004 15:12 CDT
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oh those two crazy kids lol. they're so cute. stupid kouga, he's such a loser. the end part with shippo was really cute tho lol.
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Title: not quite done
Reviewed By: Higurashi Kagome [MediaMiner Member] On: July 19, 2004 14:40 CDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'm alittle over half way of reading this story and it's really really really really really really really really really intersting i can't wait to read the rest^_^
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Reviewed By: essie [MediaMiner Member] On: July 18, 2004 21:27 CDT
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this is a great fanfic please update soon
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Reviewed By: Hououza On: July 18, 2004 18:33 CDT
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Excellent chapter, found the little interlude with Kouga highly amusing. Good luck & best wishes, Hououza
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Reviewed By: Inus_Kagome_Forever [MediaMiner Member] On: July 18, 2004 16:43 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I think that was a good chap, and im glad you got a new PC so you can update faster again!
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Reviewed By: Haisha-chan [MediaMiner Member] On: July 18, 2004 12:34 CDT
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haha Inus_Kagome_Forever is totally right: this story just keeps getting better and better!! I hate when people ruin a peaceful bathtime! *cough* baka kouga *cough* I'm so glad you got a new computer, I missed your updates!! ^_^
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Reviewed By: Inus_Kagome_Forever [MediaMiner Member] On: July 14, 2004 15:26 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
gosh this story just gets better and better, i cant believe that people would flame on this story though.... i mean, theres not one thing wrong with this story....hmmm...anyway, update soon PLEASE!!!
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Reviewed By: inu'sgirl On: July 12, 2004 03:05 CDT
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yea, kag knows about the new moon... hahaha please update SOON! i'm addicted to this fic!
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