| "The Love Nest" Reviews/Comments [ 122 ] |
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Title: Now Serving
Reviewed By: A-Z Mark II [MediaMiner Member] On: March 25, 2009 19:38 EDT
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Welcome back. :) Motoko got hers at last, Tsuruko found a REAL man and that shadowy figure appeared again. Now the other girls need to get their Keitaro Train Tickets punched. :P
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Title: Interesting
Reviewed By: A-Z Mark II [MediaMiner Member] On: December 04, 2008 19:28 EST
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I see we have the beginnings of the next stage. I was sort of hoping to see Motoko get her some Keitaro loving, but one step at a time, I guess. Good chapter, and I look forward to more.
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Reviewed By: sailorvista [MediaMiner Member] On: December 02, 2008 21:31 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 5 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
liked what happened at the end. Hope to see more
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Title: Stepping Right Along
Reviewed By: A-Z Mark II [MediaMiner Member] On: October 08, 2008 08:52 EDT
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Another chapter. Excellent. More of the business with the shadowy enemies, I see. Motoko is getting her turn at development and you seem to be steering for a beach scene. Should be fun. Can't wait for the next chapter.
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Reviewed By: sailorvista [MediaMiner Member] On: October 08, 2008 01:01 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 5 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 5 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 5 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
I thought in the previous chapter you were going to introduce who the next girl will be. And now we do know who it will be and we know what happening in the shadows and that everyone that he has met while at the Hinata was in on it.
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Reviewed By: USAVet [MediaMiner Member] On: October 07, 2008 19:57 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Not a bad addition overall. Double check the spelling and grammar as there was a few places that looked like they needed some work. Other than that everything looks to be proceeding nicely.
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Reviewed By: fidencio On: September 28, 2008 02:36 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
so shirai, hitani and kentaro were just trying to ursurp keitaro's power as the hina heir?
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Reviewed By: pak40l46(not signed in) On: September 26, 2008 22:32 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
good story, but forget the conspiracy BS. I like harem and incest stories a lot. drop the cloak and dagger stuff and you really do have a great story here. Chris
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Title: New Chapters!
Reviewed By: A-Z Mark II [MediaMiner Member] On: September 26, 2008 15:57 EDT
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Good to see new stuff up. Naru gets it twice (yay!), and we see some detail-tending in regard to the plotting and story line (also good). I do look forward to the other girls getting their share of the Keitaro Joy Ride, but that isn't criticism of your handling of the scenario. I must say that the mysterious meeting at the end kind of came out of nowhere. I recognize three of them, and am pretty sure that I know what they speak of, but I could sure use a little more information on where this is comeing from. Even so, good read, and I look forward to the next chapter!
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Reviewed By: A-Z Mark II [MediaMiner Member] On: June 11, 2008 21:21 EDT
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Finally! SEX! :) Seriously, though, good to know that things have gone from dreams and masturbation to something more meaningful. Looking forward to more!
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Reviewed By: dragon_cloud16 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 10, 2008 18:17 EDT
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A good two chapters, especially since February. I hope to see you continue to write and release some more chapters soon.
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Reviewed By: pspmario On: April 05, 2008 00:26 EDT
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Glad to see another update, I was so worried that you dropped this and did something else. Thank you for continuing this fic.
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Reviewed By: Sicksorrow On: March 26, 2008 00:35 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Finally read your update and it's coming along nicely!! Please Update SOON!!
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Reviewed By: sailorvista [MediaMiner Member] On: March 24, 2008 23:39 EDT
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I it was going to head this way with Haruka to Train him on handle a women, But I did not think she would also be a Virgin. I easier to see if a women is a virgin then a guy so it not that bad if he not a Virgin and Naru will not be the wiser, but he tell her anyways. But anyways great story and keep it up.
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Reviewed By: dennisud [MediaMiner Member] On: March 23, 2008 15:31 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
FINALLY! After 13 nut blowing buildups we give Kei his due and its haruka who not only gets his virginity he gets her unexpectedly! You'll have to give us a few lines as to why she was sill a virgin! dennisud
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