| "The Love Nest" Reviews/Comments [ 122 ] |
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Title: chapter 2
Reviewed By: vamp1000 On: September 04, 2005 12:22 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
holy shit dude! I have a feeling that this is going to be one hell of a fanfic. really nice guys like Keitaro scoring a harem is a lucky son of a bitch, but it's gonna be interesting where this is going. type like the wind... if possible!
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Reviewed By: Emperor Jaden [MediaMiner Member] On: September 03, 2005 12:09 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
First,fprgovemefor notloggingin, it would not let me.....anyhow, Great story, i enjoy it greatly, i enjoy reading such lemon stories that actually have plots, again, good story, update soon, or face my wrath! *Makes thunder boom and lightning crash*
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Title: next chapter please pleeaassee
Reviewed By: Teddyreaper On: September 01, 2005 01:06 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
moreeeee!!!! *cries cause next chapters not there* huuuurrrrryyyyy *sits in the corner of room and wobbles bak and forth reapidly sayin "next chapter please...next chapt..."* wahhhhhhh, hurry please, _:"T_T":_
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Title: Kickass... :D
Reviewed By: Kiyana On: August 31, 2005 16:46 EDT
Comment/Review:
Ah, someone else who wrote a M/F+ fic. :) And now that they've seen him bollock-naked, I assume we can expect some kind of catfight to see who can get to Keitaro first? :D
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Reviewed By: yenom [MediaMiner Member] On: August 25, 2005 17:25 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Love the direction you are taking this. I hope you take it to finish. So please keep up the good work
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Title: Chapter 2
Reviewed By: WarpWizard [MediaMiner Member] On: August 24, 2005 14:19 EDT
Comment/Review:
Good stuff. Now things really start to get interesting. :)
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Title: ch.2
Reviewed By: peacemaker(not logged in) On: August 24, 2005 08:13 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Ch.2 was another very well written chapter and I like the changes you did in chapter one. Keep up the good work and update when you have time please.
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Title: Looking Good
Reviewed By: forechunkukee [MediaMiner Member] On: August 22, 2005 18:33 EDT
Comment/Review:
Hmm...I'll be honest with you. When I read the first few sentences and paragraphs, I was not impressed. The stlye seemed a bit too...bland. That definitely changed however when Grandma Hina's ritual started. Your style took on a new depth and clarity, and I was then impressed. If you stay consistant to the writing style you used to decribe the ceremony, I think this fic will turn out fine. No major spelling errors, but I did notice your Japanese was a bit off on spelling. "Yes" in Japanese, while pronounced "hi", is spelled "hai". Minor typo, no big deal. For future reference, the characters are Urashima Keitaro, Narusegawa Naru, Otohime Mutsumi, Aoyama Motoko, Maehara Shinobu, Konno Mitsune, and Kaolla Su (I put this up because I noticed a few errors on characters). If you have any questions regarding the manga or anime, feel free to contact me. Hell, if you need a beta-reader or general editor, contact me! In any case, I think this is a pretty decent start. Bravo. d('')b
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Title: F^*$ AWSOME
Reviewed By: Big Smoke On: August 22, 2005 00:16 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Like I said in the title F^*$ AWSOME!!!! Please continue this story because I want more. Oh and I really wanted to give this story an 11 but it only went to 10.
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Title: A new story
Reviewed By: Peacemaker [MediaMiner Member] On: August 21, 2005 18:34 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This story is looking good so far, I can't wait to see where it leads. I was wondering if you could email me when you update; I would really appreciate it. Keep up the good work and update when you have time please.
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Title: Chapter 01
Reviewed By: WarpWizard [MediaMiner Member] On: August 21, 2005 13:03 EDT
Comment/Review:
Interesting start. I hope you continue.
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Reviewed By: Gigaman On: August 18, 2005 14:55 EDT
Comment/Review:
Very, Very good, can't wait for the rest of it.
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Title: can be good
Reviewed By: seph6 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 17, 2005 10:09 EDT
Comment/Review:
This stry has future, just the promisse of a heavy lemon involving all the tenants make me curious about what is going to happen. Hey, i noticed some errors about the careers, did you read the manga, or you did intentionaly? If not, want some information about love hina in general, i have lots of it.
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Reviewed By: yenom [MediaMiner Member] On: August 17, 2005 05:27 EDT
Comment/Review:
I like where is start hope to read more soon. Keep up the good work
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Title: good
Reviewed By: loslomo On: August 17, 2005 00:45 EDT
Comment/Review:
really, really good start
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