| "The Love Nest" Reviews/Comments [ 122 ] |
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Title: The Nest
Reviewed By: runamuck [MediaMiner Member] On: April 04, 2006 23:12 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I like the way your developing The Nest. Chapter 6 was great and I'm looking forward to what happens to Keitaro the next day after all the girls are done with their potions. I'm also looking forward to the the chapters on Su and Mitsune and what happens when they drink their potions.
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Title: It's all coming together.
Reviewed By: Sonic 1 [MediaMiner Member] On: March 27, 2006 10:58 EST
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Only 3 more scrolls left to go. Don't keep your fans waiting. This is a work of art.
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Reviewed By: EmperorJaden [MediaMiner Member] On: March 22, 2006 15:30 EST
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...Wow...just...Wow, that was great! It really was, I'm glad that you revised it, it's much better now, and the orginal was just a first draft huh? That makes sense, anyway, update soon, or feel my wrath! *Makes darkness explode from the ground, sending shockwaves all over the island he currently is vacationin on*
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Title: HELL YEAH!
Reviewed By: Dark Lord Tokunaga [MediaMiner Member] On: March 21, 2006 23:29 EST
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Now I KNEW that chap was inferior...... Anyway Glad to know that your not losing your touch...... But... If I'm wrong or in YOU feel that i review incorrectly feel free to drop me an email or something also I'm putting my AIM tag on my bio so check that will ya? KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK! YOU'RE ONE OF THE FEW AUTHORS THAT KEEP ME SANE! SAYONARA FOR NOW! ^-^
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Title: Now that's what I'm talkin' about...
Reviewed By: thebigW [MediaMiner Member] On: March 21, 2006 20:18 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
"She had become everything. She was the plant that she was using to give her the pleasure. She was the linoleum that was under her buxom ass..." Now that's the ticket. This is SO much better than its previous version, in keeping with what we've come to expect from you... Ja. W.
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Title: I'm Ba~ack
Reviewed By: Dark Lord Tokunaga [MediaMiner Member] On: February 17, 2006 18:29 EST
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New chap kinda um... inferior to the other ones... any way CONGRATS ON YOUR MARRAGE!!!!! Sro bout not reviewing for a while...
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Title: What Happened?
Reviewed By: thebigW [MediaMiner Member] On: February 11, 2006 07:58 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
I have to be frank, here. I was expecting this to be at least the equal of previous chapters, but it seemed somehow rushed, with the exception of the writing of the scroll itself. You avoided cliched, hackneyed phrasing quite well before, so I was a bit disappointed to find so much of that here, almost as if it had been written by someone else. Your previous chapters were almost poetry by comparison to what you've done for Shinobu. She deserves better. Also, there were more spelling errors in this chapter than in the entire rest of your fic, I think ("too" for "tool", etc.). Congrats on your nuptials, but I can't help but think your new "better half" isn't too cool with the idea of you writing erotic fan fiction, and so you now do this on the sly. I have this image of you typing away in the middle of the night to avoid being found out. I hope I'm wrong. Please don't let what you've worked so hard for up until now turn south. I want to continue to support this story as I have in the past, so give us at least the level of talent we've come to expect from you. PM or email me if you'd like to discuss this more. Best regards. W.
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Reviewed By: arknine [MediaMiner Member] On: February 10, 2006 00:33 EST
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Love the story. Can't wait until everyone finds out what their scroll say and tell everyone else.
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Reviewed By: Kiyana Va Sala [MediaMiner Member] On: February 08, 2006 18:30 EST
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Ah, the blasted site actually remembers that I logged in for once! That makes this easier. First of all, gratz on grinding enough rep to reach the 'Married' level (That's the WOW player in me talking...). So that makes the... fourth, is it?... vial chapter. One small question is nagging at me, though. The horniness the vials bestow... Is it a permanent effect (I'd assume something like an enhancement of their natural arousal levels that comes into effect whenever they become aroused), or just a one-time 'Tip them over the edge' method of swaying their minds?
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Reviewed By: EmperorJaden [MediaMiner Member] On: February 08, 2006 12:54 EST
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Wonderful! you've updated, was starting to gvie up hope that tihs was to continue...Anyway, Congrats on your marriage, and best of luck to. Can't wait for the next chapter, i'll wait to threaten with wrath.
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Title: New chapter
Reviewed By: Peacemaker [MediaMiner Member] On: February 08, 2006 03:48 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Another fantastic chapter and congrats on the marriage. It is great to be reading this story again. Keep up the good work and update when you have time please.
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Reviewed By: Akira139 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 07, 2006 23:13 EST
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Great chapter, it has been awhile, but i loved your story before, and i cant wait for you to finish up with the girls so we can see Keitaro's letter. Hope to see more soon!!
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Reviewed By: KillerRabbit [MediaMiner Member] On: January 14, 2006 17:15 EST
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Granny Hina was apparently a dirty old woman, reading her scroll.
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Reviewed By: A-Z Mark II [MediaMiner Member] On: December 07, 2005 20:29 EST
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Just a word of encouragement, really. Hope to see another chapter soon. Good job and keep it up.
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Title: Pretty good
Reviewed By: Dark Lord Tokunaga [MediaMiner Member] On: November 20, 2005 04:59 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Pretty good job in matching personality to bodys but I think you overdid it.Still this is a good story.Update soon or face the flaming-darkness that is my wrath. *makes black fire and takes aim*
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