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| "Seductive Embrace" Reviews/Comments [ 157 ] | | Pages (11): [ « ‹ 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 10 11 › » ] | Reviewed By: starwind327 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 09, 2005 18:04 PDT
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loved this line -`Go get another ice cream and do it again, except drop it on our chest.' lol. could not stop laughing. this is one of the few stories that i like then idea of kurama+kags, usually im all for hiei+kags. please update!
| Title: Review Chapter Eight
Reviewed By: Kin-chan Pandun [MediaMiner Member] On: July 09, 2005 13:43 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
[First, let me apologize for not reviewing sooner. I've been taking late night driver's ed, and I'm extremely busy during the day.] Okay. I like this chapter, filler though it is (for the most part). We learned what happened to Rin and Kirara, there was fluff and "innocent" seduction. I like it a lot. Just let me see if I understand what happened. Kurama skipped out on the final part of the search (Genkai's shrine) to go see Kagome, leaving Yusuke and Kuwabara (or Kurabara) to do that part. So as far as I can tell, next chapter will be the more human half of the tantei at Genkai's, possibly including a meeting of all the tantei that evening to re-hash what the two learned (or failed to learn) from Genkai. I'm still waiting on Sesshoumaru's appearance here. Are you nervous about writing him or something? Will anything happen during the night at Fluffy's place? When will they notice Shippou is gone? When will the messenger get there? Will he get there? What will the Tantei (and Kurama) learn of Genkai's possible student? What will Hiei divulge (or refuse to)? What will Fluffy be like after 500 or so years? What was Fluffy's relationship with Kagome like before she left? When will Kurama pump Kagome for more small talk? Will Kagome ever get any training? Remember to keep straight how many days you've written so that you can write the next Kagome, Yukina and Genkai scene at the right time. ... ... ... ... Thanks for another great chapter (even if it was filler), Kin.
| Reviewed By: Ryukotsusei [MediaMiner Member] On: July 09, 2005 12:53 PDT
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Love this chapter. Youko's character is coming out well. Playful, teasing and seductive but at the same time intelligent. Wonderful job, please update soon.
| Title: dragonpixie14
Reviewed By: tuskimiko On: July 05, 2005 21:49 PDT
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this is a good story keep it up, please inform me when you update it via email(dragonpixie14@aol.com) thank you tuskimiko aka dragon
| Reviewed By: White Fox 612 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 03, 2005 02:04 PDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Very very interresting, I wonder who Kagome ends up with, or if she would end up with both. The fire and the forest both need love. Do continue very soon ne?
| Reviewed By: puritygoddess [MediaMiner Member] On: July 01, 2005 13:16 PDT
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update soon
| Reviewed By: dangerangel On: June 29, 2005 20:56 PDT
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I thought this was very good, even for it's size. I know how hard it is with writers block, but it seem that you got through this one very well. I understand why Shippo is acting the way he is, with the temptress in all, I just think that you should keep in mind that he is a kitsune, so he would most likely have some kind of trick up his sleeve when it comes to mind controlling. I'm sure he has run across it during his travels, and he would have learned from it.
| Reviewed By: Kuramas gurl [MediaMiner Member] On: June 29, 2005 07:23 PDT
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good chappie. Poor shippo! update soon please
| Title: Review Chapter Seven, ANOTHER Continuation
Reviewed By: Kin-chan Pandun [MediaMiner Member] On: June 29, 2005 03:10 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Since the contact Sesshoumaru would send would have to be someone she would recognize (or at least recognize their youki) without purifying straight away, I think his choices are limited. He can either A) go himself, B)send Kouga, C)send Jaken. I don't think Jaken would be very inconspicuous, so it's either A or B as I see it. both sides have their pros and cons. I'm not quite sure how you want the final battle to have gone, but depending on how you handle that, Kagome gould either be more or less happy to Sesshoumaru. I think it'd be easier for her to deal with Kouga though, so I think that might be the best option. Also, the Reikai Tantei would have an easier time getting information out of Kouga than Sesshoumaru. How has Sesshoumaru been keeping tabs on her anyway? I'm also concerned at how much time Kagome will have for training before she has to go off and save Shippou. Maybe Genkai could give her some excercises that she could do on her own? O God, the funniest scene just occured to me. Kagome out with Keiko, Yusuke, and Kurama, only to have someone yell to her: "Kagome! And how's my woman been lately?" Kagome goes into shock, everyone turns to see a human-disguised Kouga. Kagome goes "K-Kouga?" and Kurama and Youko have internal "dialogue" because, not only has someone just claimed Kagome, but they can probably sense his Youki. Awkward scene ensues, possibly with Kagome breaking out in tears from relief at hearing a friend again. Whatever happens, Take care! Kin | Title: Review Chapter Seven, Continued Again
Reviewed By: Kin-chan Pandun [MediaMiner Member] On: June 29, 2005 02:50 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Anyway, back to the review. I was wondering at Hiei's reasons for going with the rest of the Tantei to Genkai's. Is he going to try and stop Genkai from revealing anything? Or is he just going to see if she does? Let's see, since Kagome is asleep, I'd have to imagine that the next two scenes would be the detectives at Genkai's and Sesshoumaru and Kouga recieving news of Shippou's capture. As another reviewer suggested, it is possible that Sesshoumaru might consider him expendable, but I highly doubt it. Kouga, as far as I can tell, considers Kagome (and by extension and familiarity, Shippou) as part of his pack, and wolves are notoriously loyal to packmates. Sesshoumaru, on the other hand, while still a cold bastard, has had to have matured some in 500 years, and he seems to consider Kagome a worthy ally to go through all this trouble on her part. In addition, Sesshoumaru is a Taiyoukai, so even if he didn't want to, he would try and help Shippou because Shippou is an ally, and, in his words: "This Sesshoumaru is not so dishonorable as that." With the respect he seems to show for Kagome, I also find it unlikely that he would not inform her of the situation. I imagine he might react badly to the note at first (read: go ballistic), but he would calm down soon enough and he and Kouga will come up with a plan. I wonder who will be going to inform Kagome of Shippou's situation. It would have to be someone that she would recognize and not purify off the bat.
| Title: Review Chapter Seven, Continued
Reviewed By: Kin-chan Pandun [MediaMiner Member] On: June 29, 2005 02:36 PDT
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I'm not sure how much you've seen of the anime, but, after the sensui arc, Yusuke is no longer a human. He's actually a Mazoku (hanyou-sorta). He has his human form (which is still uber-powerful, and has a bit of demon blood to it) and his demon form, whose hair is calf length and wild (but the same dark brown color); with claws; fangs; and a bunch of really sweet, tatoo-like markings all over. He is also, by the end of the next story arc, a Makai Lord. I just wanted to let you know, because you have Kurama refer to both Kuwabara AND Yusuke as human when they go and visit them with the assignment from Koenma. I'm also not sure about Yusuke. He seemed slightly OOC when he tried to egg Hiei into a fight by mentioning what a great couple Kuwabara and Yukina made. It seemed like something he would do pre-Genkai's death (in the dark Tournament). After that, he matured quite a bit, emotionally. So, although he's still the same, good-ol' Yusuke, he's grown. By the start of the Makai story arc, Yusuke's personality has been tempered a bit, and it's more apparent that he's used to battles to the death. If you haven't watched any of these story arcs yet, I suggest you find a way to, and, if at all possible, watch them unedited (this means not the stuff that they show on TV) and, if you prefer, subbed instead of dubbed. I think you'd really enjoy it. ... ... Anyway, I'll continue this review in another section.
| Title: Review Chapter Seven
Reviewed By: Kin-chan Pandun [MediaMiner Member] On: June 29, 2005 02:25 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
First, let me thank you for another wonderful chapter. This fic has become one of my top favorites, it really has. It's a wonderful story, and you update regularly. (All the other fics I really like are on hold.) So, on with the review. Good character interactions. I like how you have Hiei and Kurama witholding information from each other. I can't help but agree with it, since having them divulge everything to each other about Kagome would move the plot along a bit too fast, I daresay. Not much on Kagome this chapter, but I can see why. The other scenes you had were fun and necessary, and definitely made up for the brevity of our time with Kagome. ALSO: I'm not too sure about this but you might want to back and check your spelling of Kuwabaka's name. I think there was one point where you spelled it "Kurabara" when it whould actually be spelled "Kuwabara." It really aggravates me when people replace the "w" with an "r." I mean, he gets enough damage as is, being bashed so much. You'd think people would have the decency to at least get his name right.
| Reviewed By: ashtonreed [MediaMiner Member] On: June 29, 2005 02:10 PDT
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I so LOVE this fic! I cant wait to see how Kags gonna react when she sees Sesshoumaru & Koga again. lol Id prolly run up and hug em, despite the fact that Fluffy's a cold blooded killer. My wouldnt that surprise Hiei & Kurama. Which brings me to the pairing. Either Hiei/Kag or Hiei/Kag/Kurama One last thing... DONT kill Shippou!
| Reviewed By: DeJaVooo [MediaMiner Member] On: June 28, 2005 18:42 PDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Ok, this chapter was a bit confusing. When Hiei told Youko that Genkai took another student, and then Yusuke came and told them about the power that the baby prince felt in the area of the temple, could then Youko put it all together, or am i being to picky? or did i miss something? lol, by the way, love the story so far.
| Reviewed By: Ryukotsusei [MediaMiner Member] On: June 28, 2005 15:33 PDT
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Very good chapter, I imagine that Sesshoumaru will indeed be quite furious when he learns that Shippo has been taken. Given that Kagome is going to be put into grave danger trying to retreive him I do not know that Sesshoumaru would indeed inform her, perhaps planning on attempting to deal with it on his own? He knows what havoc the jewel could cause in the wrong hands and with how practical he is he might be willing to sacrifice Shippo to insure the jewel stays safe. *Ponders for a bit* Looks like Kurama and Hiei are going to have fun attempting to keep these secrets from each other though how successful they will continue to be I am not certain. I'm sure the others will be suspicious and when they eventually meet up with her training at Genkais I'm positive there will be alot of questions raised. Excellent length and description to this chapter, I anxiously await the next one. Keep up the good work and please update soon!
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